Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 16/01/08 05:02 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
Oh, just read your companion piece to this and this is beautiful too...makes me wonder exactly how much of a person we know, and that if there's only 2 of us left, who would remember all the little things in life that makes it all worthwhile.... Beautifully done....
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 21/10/07 01:05 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
Fantasitc! I loved all of it. What a potent mix of poignant and in your face intensity. The best line EVER in fic history:"Big brother, locked and fucking loaded, his love for Sam a weapon that's been big enough and strong enough to keep him alive for the last twenty-two years" - big call shot straight from Dean's hip because that's the way it really is. I sucked my breath in at that one, could feel Dean's passion and belief that is impossible to challenge. Your recollection of all that Dean has noticed about Sam is not a surprise. Dean nonchalance IS his game face: he misses nothing - supreme hunter but more supreme big brother. We see the wheels turning in his eyes and in your words. Congrats on an outstanding piece of writing. Your style and creativity know no bounds. You articlulate our boys with flair and emotion and I just love it!
Reviewer: ThePasserby (Signed) · Date: 26/06/07 03:30 PM · On: The Whipping Dance
aw how sad. i never thought that dean would look at it that way, but it makes perfect sense that he would see sam's face in god as a lack of faith in him. *sniff*
Author's Response: That's our boy...so incredibly damaged in so many ways that he would think that. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 06/05/07 12:22 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
Very moving story. I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing it! ~Kayla
Author's Response: Thankyou for reading, and taking the time to comment! :o)
Reviewer: Armaita (Signed) · Date: 02/05/07 10:26 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
This was really well done, I could actually picture Dean thinking all these things...especially the "or, you know, at least attempt it" line. (Personally, I think Dean would have a decent chance of accomplishing that goal, if only out of pure stubbornness!) I haven't seen HOH, so I might be way off here, but...is it possible Sam prays for Dean to be safe, and not as a way of undermining Dean's abilities? I think Dean would miss that detail, though, so this fic is still realistic. Thanks for writing it!
Author's Response: I so agree with you about Dean accomplishing that goal out of stubbornness! I think you're right, that is the one of the things Sam does pray for, but Dean refuses to see it that way. Thanks for reading! :o)
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 22/04/07 08:52 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
This was fantastic. I honestly never really thought about the specific little things that Dean would know about Sam -- as I read, I started thinking of how easy it's been for me to take for granted what I know of my husband (the one I spend the most time with). I thought about all those little things you mentioned that Dean knows about Sam and thought... have I noticed those? Could I detail them like this? I read your paragraphs and actually found myself falling harder for Dean that he did notice. And then... you come to the end... to the end and to Dean's thoughts about Sam praying. I remember that look on Dean's face when Sam said he prayed every night. And I thought I knew where you were going... I thought you were going to have Dean wonder how he hadn't noticed, when he noticed everything else. But where you went with this gutted me -- Dean thinking that Sam's faith in a higher power means that he doesn't have faith in Dean to save him... *heartbreaks* Because you're right -- Sam does have the one thing that Dean doesn't have: a big brother who would die for him. *sniff* Well done.
Author's Response: Thankyou so much for your feedback, and apologies for taking so long to reply (new job = crazy times). For all that Dean can appear oblivious to the most obvious things, I actually think that when it comes to Sam, there's nothing he doesn't notice, just things he doesn't decide to act on. And I think you're right, that look on Dean's face was as much about him not knowing that Sam did it as it was anything else. But by this stage, self-flagellation is so much Dean's style that he can't help making it more than that.
Reviewer: whitewave (Signed) · Date: 16/04/07 08:02 PM · On: The Whipping Dance
Loved the list of all the things Dean knows about Sam. It is such a great contrast to what he doesn't know. Dean has no point of reference to understand Sam's faith, because it is something he can't believe in. Maybe Sam can believe in Dean and still need to know that there is something bigger out there, or else why bother to save anyone?
Author's Response: That is such a good point, about Dean having no point of reference to understand Sam's faith...as Dean's faith was shattered so completely when Mary died. Interesting...I shall have a think about that! Thanks so much for reading.
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 09:54 PM · On: The Whipping Dance
Wow, wonder no longer! This is better than merely likeable. It is powerful and poignant at the same time, and that's truly a lethal combination. I loved this part (it won't let me copy and paste for some reason...but I love it enough to type it out!) "Big brother, locked and fucking loaded, his love for Sam a weapon that's been big enough and strong enough to keep him alive for the last twenty two years" Fantastic work, I hope there's more where this came from. I'll be watching out for it!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much! *grins* I'm so pleased it worked for you. And yeah, I kinda like that sentence too...I wanted to capture that Dean is fundamentally about protecting Sam.
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 09:31 PM · On: The Whipping Dance
Sweet and sad at the same time. Good with the details, its the little things that make it real.
Author's Response: Thankyou. And thanks so much for reading. :o)
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 12:30 PM · On: The Whipping Dance
What a touching little piece. Loved the simplicity of it.
Author's Response: Thankyou. :o) I haven't yet mastered the long complicated fic-beast, so I tend to keep things short(er) for now.
Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 10:53 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
This was very well written! I love this piece and the way you've captured Dean's voice. Excellent one shot.
Author's Response: Thankyou so much, I am so pleased it worked for you.
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 10:47 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
All I can say is WOW! This is an awesome scene. You capture the brothers beautifully. I think I may have too many favourite lines to mention them all. "no hyperbolic bullshit rhetoric: he'll save Sam if it's the last thing he does, and if he can't , them he'll march into hell itself to get Sam back" - yup, that's all Dean. You've also touched on the thing in HOH that really got to me. The fact that Sam does doubt Dean's ability to save him. I've forgiven Sam enough to believe that it's not so much that he sees something lacking in Dean as much as he is just overwhelmed by his own sense of his destiny. Thanks for a great story - I think it works perfectly.
Author's Response: Thankyou so much, I am so glad it works for you! I think you're right about Sam needing something more than Dean to 'save him' having to do with the enormous weight of his unknown destiny...rather than something lacking in Dean. And Dean's shouldered a tremendous burden here: it's not rational to suggest that he is all-powerful in Sam's life, yet I truly believe he feels that way. There's so much to think about on this topic...!
Reviewer: bayre (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 09:33 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
I really liked this. Made me think..Wow! Laura
Author's Response: Thankyou so much!
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 15/04/07 08:56 AM · On: The Whipping Dance
I absolutely loved this one-shot. SO well thought out and done. Very unique! Great job!
Author's Response: Thankyou, I really appreciate your comment! :o)
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