Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 07/10/09 01:47 PM · On: Something Wicked But Not Evil
Hey hunny. A fortuitious chance meeting ! Perhaps take a little look at your tenses...you move from past to present to past a little confusingly. Bird x
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 07/10/09 01:43 PM · On: Chapter 1: Prologue
Hey Hunny. It's an action packed start and I'll go read chapter two in a minute. I'm gonna suggest that you might want to get someone to read your stories before you post as some of your structuring is a little bit off the mark. Bird x
Author's Response: yeah i know i'm bad at this idk why but i'm tryin to do it right sometimes i'm not good at english kinda spelling thing or stuff like that and it doesnt make sense..
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