Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 21/10/09 08:53 AM · On: Prologue

Yes as far as the content goes, it was pretty good, very gory and a great ending on this chapter...but the layout in one block makes it very very hard to read. 

If you look at other stories posted here you will see that they are broken up with gaps between paragraphs.

It just helps for the eyes not to be overwhelmed. 

Yes it was interesting and exciting...I will read on though, I do suggest you go back and edit the layout.  If you need help doing it let me know.

Jacq

Reviewer: Seraph (Signed) · Date: 21/10/09 07:18 AM · On: Prologue

great start!