Supernaturalville
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 07/10/09 01:38 PM · On: Chapter 1

Hey Hun.

Well done on writing your first story and welcome to the happy world of fanfiction.

I wondered if you might want to think about getting a beta for your writing as some of your sentence structuring/ spacing makes your story a little tricky to read.

Good luck with your future work.

Bird x



Author's Response: thnx and i really getting it and um i was wondering if you could help me with my fics and i might get the wrong idea for makin mistakes and some of the stories i typed is in my computer and others are in my books and i hope i will get it right..

Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 21/03/09 08:22 PM · On: Chapter 1

it's good so far, but a few suggestions:

 

I'd space out the sentences so it's easyier to read:)

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