Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/01/10 01:54 PM · On: If I Swear That I'll Change My Ways...

Finally got my bum into gear, printed off the chapters I hadn't reviewed yet, and read them all last night when I went to bed. Yes, I know, Supernatural bedtime stories - they work, though. Go figure......

Loved Dean's thoughts right at the start that it can't be good to have Sam sitting there for half the night thinking. And the whole push/pull of Sam's concern balanced by his anger at what he felt was Dean's off-hand manner was great. 

The brief peek into Sam's happier days at Stanford was wonderfully sweet. Especially given the fact that he's falling for Nara. Shows his softer side. Lovely scenes between Sam and Nara - and I had to laugh at how thoroughly she ignored Dean in favour of the younger Winchester. What a switch - lol. Poor Dean.

Flipside of the coin was Biyen performing the ritual - that was downright chilling, especially the last line about it waiting to feed......*shivers*....

And why do I get the feeling that this day isn't going to end well for Dean? 

Jules

Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 06:47 PM · On: Married To My Guilt

Hey Tree, I thought it was time for me to review some of your work. I haven't managed to squeeze in a lot of reading over the last months but Worthy was at the top of the list. So, here you go. My reviewing tactics follow a two simple rules: I comment while I read, so some parts of the review will show you the my reactions toward your story in a chronological way. Another rule is, I drool and I ramble. I think that's enough for now... let the reviewing begin...

Dean's empty stomach... not good. Short temper. But good for the sick fangirl in me. I love me a pissed off Dean! And he gets real whiny when he is hungry, doesn't he? Like a baby? LOL. Metabolism thing. Priceless.

Hitchhiking chupacabra? LOLOLOL. Sam cracking a joke is a rare but pleasant sight. Loved that one. Go Sammy!!!!

and now the guilt had set in. OH YEAH... bring it. Is there anything tastier than Winchester-guilt? YUM.

couldn’t- lose the last remaining person that meant anything in his life aw, Sammy is his only family now but even if he wasn't he could never kill him. Not even when he was drinking demon blood and being an ass. Dean just couldn't. I wonder if that still applies this season. The moment in 5.02 where he struggled to decide to go after Sammy (reflex, always) or stay and help the others... made me wonder how much their brotherhood had changed...

It had begun when his brother was small, starting with tears and pleading and ending with soulful eyes and an irritating penchant for persistence. aw... those puppy dogs … he always had them, remember Something Wicked? How he pushed Dean into giving him the last bowl of Lucky Charms with one carefully aimed look? AW. ... and he sure is persistent still. Even if it gets him nowhere at this point in time...

“To be honest with yourself. To quit burying all that pain so goddamn deep down inside of you. Quit being so friggin’ stubborn and just talk to me.” that would mean to lose the real Dean and replace him with an average guy. As healthy as that may be... it totally takes the fun out of drooling over him (cept for his good looks of course) and would render me being a fangirl a redundant thing. So, DONT'T THE FUCK DO AS SAMMY TELLS YOU, DEAN. Or only once, on the side of a lonely road on the hood of the Impala with a single tear rolling down your freckly cheeks. Or maybe by a lake after an incident where you almost had to kill your bro...

works on people that don’t know you, but it isn’t fooling me. They both read each other like an open book and that's always what makes it hard for them to reconcile... twisted, loveable idjits that they are. Love em.

‘wake up in a bathtub full of ice with a kidney missing’ is nothing but urban legend Oh yeah. Doc Benton does that all the time *winks*

ripped out organs... opens a whole new world of whumpage for me... gonna have to remember to do that to them... maybe write another Dean in Hell story with more detail.... yummy... just love to hurt them... I am a sick, twisted pervert and I love it. It's cathartic... vents all my anger nicely. And saves me from seeking therapy--- heh. Anyway, I am curious to read about this critter is and what it will do to my boys...

Sam's hands... OMG. Doesn't Jared have great hands and arms? I mean, I am a full on Dean girl, but that part of Jared's body always makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. The long fingers, the corded arms, large hands, strong biceps... *thud* Massive drooling going on here, have to go fetch my bucket!. HANDPORN's almost as sexy as GUNPORN (see epi 5.02 episode stills) and a hurt!Dean... almost.

John's words... they are haunting to me, how much more must they haunt Dean? How could John do that to him? Altho I have always suspected that John knew Dean would never be able to do it but would do ANYTHING to save his brother. Maybe he hadn't thought of Dean selling his soul but I am sure John just wanted Dean to look out for Sammy with all his might. To ultimately save him... Still, John remains a manipulative SOB. I like him but hate his educational methods.

Descriptions, details ...The way you describe the sky and the other details just sounds painfully sweet. A harsh contrast to the crappy emotional states of the boys. Excellent!

Livers torn out... maybe a werewolf with little knowledge of the human anatomy? Hehee. Just kidding. And ick! How awkward... And strangely reminiscent of Hannibal Lector...

to mimic Anthony Hopkins. You and me, Dean. You and me. We share the same sick sense of humor. And of course you, Tree.

into twin rounds of laughter aw, got a strong Hell House vibe from that scene. Them sitting in a diner and laughing. So sweet. I like their light-hearted laughing moments. And frankly, I just needed to breathe a little after the massive guilt-overload here. So, well done, Tree. Great timing!

to the curse of their ancestors Oh! I like curses! Can't break em... just have to get out of their way! Cool. And a native American one. I like their lore. Something I am not that familiar with. I do excel at Greek and Roman myths but not at those. Intriguing. I wonder what beast he is trying to appease... So the victims were chosen huh? Wonder what it takes to be Worthy? Guilt? Or some dark secret? Or being evil? I am making a guess here and I am building on Greek myth. Is it some sort of eagle or bird of prey? Like in the Prometheus myth? The eagle feeds on the Titan and everyday the liver grows back. That would work well with the liver bit and the creature alighting on the branches...

Anyhow... that's it for now. I must say I am intrigued by this first chapter and can't wait to read on. Brilliant choice of words, the dialogue was very true the respective brother and I just loved your descriptions, very poetic.

See you tomorrow on the next one! Nightnight, Ilka

Author's Response:

Ilka -

Ok- WOW! I'm speechless... Um... Thanks... I truly cant thank you enough for taking the time to leave such a kind and thoughtful review. I'm very glad that there were so many tidbits to this set-up chapter that you could sink your teeth into.

Ironically- your review came right when I was wallowing in some serious self-doubt about my writing- and Jules- bless her- chose use it ( among others) to point out that I should have more self-confidence).

I really appreciate - more than I can possibly go into here) all the little nuances you picked up on here. I guess I know I write them. I guess I even know why I write them- but I dont guess I ever expect people to pick up on it... so yeah... thanks- from the bottom of my heart !!!

I hope you continue to enjoy the rest of the story. I'm trying to work on an upcoming chapter- having gotten a little side-tracked with writing an early episode for the returning VS. 

Oh and one last comment- Chica- do you EVER sleep??? lol!

Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 27/08/09 10:04 PM · On: And the Road I Walk is Paved With Sorrow...

Ahh, poor Sam - I know just how he feels. If anyone's going to drop something and make a goose of themselves, it will be me - like this morning when I went to hand over my ATM card to be swiped at the coffee shop, and ended up pitching it halfway across the floor....in totally the wrong direction.....*sigh*...

And trust trouble to find Dean just when he was spoiling for a fight. Love that the wild streak came out in him, and he beat those thugs to a pulp. But he's going to be sorry in the morning, methinks. Biyen's plans notwithstanding.

And oh, no - so it's Dean who's going to be the McHappy Meal for the thingamy-bob in the forest. And did Dean catch a glimpse of it, or of Biyen before he went into the motel room?

If Biyen's going to sacrifice Dean, he's got a hell of a fight on his hands - and I don't mean just Dean.

Little brother will NOT be happy...

Sorry I've been AWOL for so long - and I'm dreadfully sorry that you have been struck down by that horrible virus that's been sweeping through the site. You know - Drabble-itis. I believe that the cure is possibly worse than the disease. Should I send flowers? Or just a shotgun....?

Jules

Author's Response:

Hey Jules... so good to see you back. I hope you're doing better. Glad you liked this chapter... and yep- I kinda identify with clumsy Sam too- especially if I'm rattled like he was... no telling what I'll knock down or break...

hahah- Dean a McHappy Meal ... hmmmm I know he'd sure me a McHappy person if he were served up hot and fresh on my plate... *sighs* alright... out of the gutter Tree...

But yes- Definately getting served up here... but I hope you'll see that despite the inflicted pain and sturggle to survive- its actually gonna be a "good" thing for Dean.

As for the Drabble-itis...  yes- I must admit that I dont care for a steady diet..- but at the same time I've come to appreciate a little break from writing/reading long fics - and honestly- this challenge turned out so much better than I'd dreamed... I'm always amazed at the creative talent around here..

Next challenge is gonna be romance writing with an intentional Mary Sue... hahahaa just kidding - I swear! Even I cant stoop that low... :)

Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 26/08/09 09:18 AM · On: Here I Am Alone...

Another outstanding chapter, the upcoming chapters sound brilliant, i'm really looking forward to them.

Author's Response: So glad you're enjoying them. Thanks for taking the time to read and review... IT really makes me feel good to see that folks are enjoying this story.

Reviewer: CatzEye (Signed) · Date: 24/08/09 07:32 PM · On: Here I Am Alone...

Oooh! - Great story so far- can't wait for the coming chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks hun... I think the upcoming chapters will be worth the wait... thanks for reading and reviewing...

Reviewer: marvethecat (Signed) · Date: 24/08/09 03:34 PM · On: Here I Am Alone...

thank you! Loving this more and more. Realy worried about Dean but can't wait for Sam to take care of things eagerly waiting the next chapter.

Author's Response:

SOOOO glad you're enjoying this... and I'm already writing Sam's "man of action" chapter... plenty more hurtDean and ToughSam coming up...

Thanks for reading and reviewing. It makes my day!

Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 07/08/09 10:45 PM · On: Dark Days Arise...

Yikes! I wonder how Dean will get out of this mess? Hopefully, Sam will listen to his inner dialog and realize that something is not right and that Dean would not have just disappeared like that. Looking forward to the next part.

Author's Response:

Oh yeah - Sam's gonna figure it out long before Dean finds a way out of the mess he's in... cause after all- I just love to hurt em'.. lol

thanks for taking the time to review!

Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 06/08/09 06:48 AM · On: Dark Days Arise...

Hell of a way for Dean to find out it really is a hunt lol, this is a great story, i'm sure the next chapter will be worth the wait, so i'll not chase you with a pitchfork, this time lol.

Author's Response:

thanks for holding off with the pitchfork... heehee.... I'll try to make the wait worth the while...

and yes... not such a great way to find out you were wrong.... but thats Dean...

thanks so much for taking time to read and review.

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 06/08/09 06:25 AM · On: Dark Days Arise...

The chase is on!  Things are not looking very good for Dean!  I want to kick Sam for not following his intuition, and for not walking Nara home!  Shame on him!  I will be sad that the next chapter is delayed- I'm looking forward to finding out what is next.

Author's Response:

heehee... well- the boys havent been on the best behavior with each other- and they tend to do stupid things when they're angry.... trust me- Sam will make up for it... LOL

 Glad you enjoyed and thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: marvethecat (Signed) · Date: 04/08/09 11:57 AM · On: Fighting For My Pride...

wow great chapter can,t wait for the next. Off work for a while so plenty of spare time to read at moment,glad to hear the next chapter is nearly ready.

Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 03/08/09 07:40 AM · On: Fighting For My Pride...

That wes a brilliant chapter, i really enjoyed it but a very evil cliffie, looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Thanks- so glad you liked it... and thank you for taking the time to leave a review... Next chapter will be up VERY soon!

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 31/07/09 03:25 AM · On: Fighting For My Pride...

Oh boy, this is so dire....really great chapter....looking forward to the next one

Jacq

Author's Response: This is only the beginnig of dire... hang in there... and thanks for reviewing!