Reviewer: jeanne (Signed) · Date: 18/03/12 08:15 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Every time I see that you have written something new I read it and then run back to this story to see if you have written a new chapter. I hope that you will be able to find the words to finish this one. It is a great story. The brothers so desperately need to be together again on so many levels.
Reviewer: frostfalcon (Signed) · Date: 31/12/11 04:09 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
What a place to leave off!! You have me hooked, I can't wait for more. Poor Dean alone and injured...
Reviewer: Tallin (Signed) · Date: 23/11/11 06:37 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Hey Love the story. Are you going to finish this. Hate being left hanging. You are one of my fav authors so please, please finish Worthy.
Author's Response: Tallin WOW - I'd thought everyone had forgotten about WORTHY... Thankyou! I am sooo humbled... I had honestly hit a bit of a brick wall with this one- well, really I'd hit a brick wall with all my writing... but maybe I'll go back and give it a go again. Its not like I never knew where the story was headed... I was just having a hard time getting it there. You may be the only one left reading it- but since you asked- I'll give it a try! Thanks SOOOOOO much- truly! Tree
Reviewer: thirdwatchfanatic (Signed) · Date: 14/07/10 11:51 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Poor Dean is still shivering - violently! Save him Tree!
Reviewer: dixie (Signed) · Date: 25/05/10 01:07 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Now that another summer hiatus is upon us, I am looking forward to the next chapter of this wonderful story even more - please, oh please, come back soon............
Reviewer: palomacal (Signed) · Date: 19/05/10 10:28 AM · On: Married To My Guilt
Please, don't stop updating. I'm one of those people hated by writers that always read but nerver review. I put the blame on my lack of fluidity in english, you will probably think something very different. Anyway, never mind how long it takes I will stay here waiting for your stories.
Author's Response: Palomacal.... Thanks for the review and hang in there... a new chapter is coming VERY soon... I apologize for the delay... my muse took a slow boat and a very long vacation, but I caught up to her, drug her back and have chained her to my laptop. She's cooperating nicely now... hahahha... Thanks again for taking the time to drop a note and dont worry- you're English is perfect! Tree
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 06/04/10 04:33 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Damn you! How can you leave him there? Wet, cold, injured, alone? So alone. *sniff sniff* I have made no notes of the second section of this chap. Got caught up in the beautiful description of the wintery forest. Of Dean's agony. His flight from those tormenting voices... Gawd I just wish I could be there and hug him till he is better, share some body heat and mebbe *winks* even produce some. I was so scared when he just lay there, the snow covering bit by bit. Thank god some of his instincts have been stronger. Sam's angry voice bein' the trigger to find his way back into reality.. aw, thank you so so so so much for this chapter. I adore this hurt and lonely Dean in the middle of the wilderness, tormented by guilt and responsibilty... *daydreams*
Now the Sam part. Wow. Great. I love that you actually picked up all those things I talked about in the last review... LOL it's magic as I only reviewed that a coupla hrs ago LOL how did you know months ago I was gonna choose those bits to comment on??? Okay, seriously... it just shows that your plot is unraveling along my train of thought. That's awesome! Evidence you are leading your readership very well! Here's my checklist: Guilt-fest=check, the painful contrast between Dean in the forest and Sam in the comfy motel room= check, Sam berating himself about not trusting his gut= check. LOL and I think I could go on for a while but you get the pic... I loved worried, feverish, impatient, protective, frantic Sammy! Aw... It was as hard for me as for him to see him come to the conclusion he hadda go and find out who's behind Dean's disappearance rather than just hike out into the woods--- poor guy. And poor Nara... I fear for her reaction when Biyen's involvement in the killings is unearthed. *hugs her and hopes Sam will offer some solace- smutty or otherwise... LOL* Oh and Dean... begging for Sam to hurry up, sniffle. Please have a heart and let Sam get there soon? Pretty please? But make sure Dean gets a tad worse 'fore that happens? Yes, I know how sick that sounds... LOL. But be honest! You were planning on that anyway! We're like peas in a pod *nods appreciatively* HurtDean for the win!
Another bit of evidence for your writing skills: "snail crawling through wet concrete" Love the senusal and figurative power of this image. I dunno how t'explain it. It just made me writhe in impatience (granted it doesn't take much to have me do this... still, it worked, I could relate with -to? damn those prepositions *growls*- Sam fairly easy) "Cold like death" oh OUCH... Ice crept into my heart there. As cold as the sleet stinging Dean's skin (yum), as cold as the black metal. I love that you use such many words from the semantic field of Death and Winter (which in turn are actually synonyms to some extent if you think about it metaphorically. Winter being the death of the year and all that poetic stuff). Yay! You're a poet writin' prose! LOL... okay that doesn't really make sense... but I dunno how to put it differently... Aw-moment (apart from those I kept having as I watched Dean shiver, run, hurt, fall, yell, lose faith, give up, pull himself up...): The Impala seems to order Sam to "go get him back", the chevy seems to feel wrong to Sam if Dean is in danger. *chin wibble* I don't wanna know how it felt like driving the car while Dean was in hell. *sniff* Now... DAMN... I NEEEEEED that update! You can't leave Dean, Sam and me here! We'll waste away! Separated from each other... (talkin bout me and Dean of course... LOL) it's just WRONG! I know how hard it is to write sometimes but please know that this story is worth coming back to as an author AND a reader. So no matter how long it takes you to update this... I WILL BE HERE reading and picking Dean up from the frozen ground... Poor guys. 'nother night in the Minnesota woods might prove to be fateful... Hugs, hoping to see you around soon, Ilka
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 05/04/10 08:59 PM · On: Here I Am Alone...
THANK. YOU. Great chapter again. The hurt-Dean-fest was just delicious. The way he tries to push himself on, how, again, the voices challenge him into action. Awesome. And also so gutwrenching when they accuse him of being a failure as a brother and son. Those sentences tore at my heart so much. First the mental torture and then the thing is back. Thanks for describing this fugly bird-rodent so well. NASTY. Reminds me: AWESOME descriptions and metaphores in this chapter. The scurrying squirrel (loves), the pall wrapping itself around the forest (eerie, creepy, LOVE IT) and then the tears from heaven when Dean slips into oblivion. TERRIFIC. But back to Dean. Coz we haven't finished wallowing in angst-drool. No, you go and give me HURTdrool blended with some I-dont-give-a-damn and I'll-go-down-fighting plus I-have-to-get-to-Sammy Dean. OH MAN. So full of my fav Winchester. So hot...He must be totally hurt now. That ravine made me think of Jensen as Jason Teague at the end of his guest role in Smallville. Had that same spot in my head when I pictured the scene. But please tell me, he'll wake up again. And one word of advice to Dean: POKE THE THING IN THE EYES WITH SOMETHING SHARP. Hope he heard me shouting. He's so far away. I could use some Deantime now... *sighs* Sam. My god. I know I am a Deangirl but seeing him in just a towel? Hair dripping with water? DUDE. *fans self* By the way I completely forgot to thank you for Dean's shower scene earlier. GREAT. Both Winchesters stripped to almost-nudity. YAY. Sam's comfortable surroundings made the apparent difference to Dean's current situation even more unbearable. Great writing there. However, I bet Sam's gonna torture himself now that he knows Dean's in trouble. Oh that man just knows how to be guilt-stricken. And is there ANYthing as tasty as a good chunk of Winchester guilt? 'cept for hurt? No, I didn't think there was. I was actually gettin' annoyed at how easily Sam persuaded himself that Dean was hooking up with some random chick. Not because it was an unlikely scenario (coz, let's face it, it's just the way he would do it). But because Sam CHOSE NOT to listen to his gut. Never a good thing. When he finally came to the conclusion that this wasn't "like Dean" I yelled at him in my best Dean-voice: NO SHIT SHERLOCK! And rolled my eyes just for good measure. I am glad that Nara found the car and told Sam immediately. Now, he can come to Dean's rescue. And he has to hurry coz I got a feeling that critter won't be in a pleasant mood when it comes to. On a more general note: The bit about reaching "breaking point" ? CHILLS DOWN MY SPINE. So very apt to the current season's situation. Actually I would have used that title for the tag I sent you but in case I post it on UnGen after all I changed it. There's already a fic by that name. 'Nother general idea: I love the title of your fic so much. After all, season 2 is all about how Dean has to find his self-esteem again. He has to learn to feel worthy for his own sake and not just because he needs to protect his bro. Very apt title. Even if I think that Dean still struggles with that particular part of his character to this day... But then again, I can relate. Loving yourself for who you are just isn't easy. Hugs hun. I think I'm gonna grab some sleep now... even tho I'm itching to read what's next... we'll see. Hope your day was at least a little better than last night! Ilka
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 05/04/10 06:55 PM · On: Dark Days Arise...
WOW. Just... wow. Brilliant. I dunno where to start, honestly. First you give me frantic Sam. Berating himself, discussing with himself on how to proceed and what to think of Dean's apparent tardiness. Then you bring in some tender minutes with Nara (I really like her...) and finish this section off with something I have ALWAYS thought to be true. Charlie and Alan are Dean and Sam! *high fives* I think about that EVERYTIME I watch that show. They even use some of the same lines sometimes! And then... MY GOD. DEAN. Stripped of weapons, journal, cell and jacket (yum), first paralyzed by those nasty herbs and then soaking wet from an icy rain. *loves you* Plus you have him angsting and worrying, talking with the voices of his father and Sam urging him on. I always thought he would "channel" Sam or John when he's in need. And the way you do it is subtler than I ever managed to do it myself. Like a real dialogue. No unnecessary description. Down to the most important stuff. But you don't really stop there. No. You go introduce the monster to him. And then you have the guts to leave me like this: breathless, panting, egging Dean on to HURRY THE HELL UP and GET YOUR ASS OUTTA THERE. You. Just. Leave. Me. Gaping. In. Shock. How am I s'posed to leave this story at this point? Dude, you do awesome cliffies! Gawd, I am so glad that there isa next chapter upalready. And you should be happy too. Coz I would've pestered you, nagged you and even bribed you... Thanks again, heading to the next one. Can't wait to see Dean stumble and stagger in the freezing rain some more. Hugs, Ilka
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 05/04/10 05:30 PM · On: Fighting For My Pride...
good lord... I LOVED this one. Thank you for the smutty bits, THANK YOU SO MUCH. I didnt think Dean would actually make it to the casino but I think it really contributed to the plot. Now he isn't only beat up something terrible (wanna hug him better) but also Biyen has him in his clutches. Let the hurt fest begin. Of course Dean is worthy of whatever critter Biyen is sacrificing him to. Doesnt mean he needs to, does it? I fear for ma boy... Hugs, Ilka... PS might even make another chap... doin an all-nighter I reckon.
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 05/04/10 02:50 PM · On: If I Swear That I'll Change My Ways...
Awesome chap, hunny... I loved the hurt!Dean bits to death. And man, doesn't he know women? LOL... Although, knowing what we know about Biyen I kinda fear he won't reach the casino as planned... Those narcotic herbs are just waiting for him... And then he'll be fighting to survive out in the woods... I bet I'll love the hurt-fest once that's goin' on! OH, and Sam broke my heart with his bittersweet memories of Jess and Stanford. I am glad he seems to find some love in this story. Nara is a sweet girl. I'd hate to see this lil bit of romance gettin' crushed by the whole hunt and its implications on the gal's family... Will see if I can finish the next chappie tonite. Thought you could need some reviews to cheer you up! Hugs, Ilka
Reviewer: Micaiah (Signed) · Date: 16/01/10 01:58 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Awesome! I am loving this story. Very nice Dean whumpage....yeah, I know, that just sounds so wrong. :)
Author's Response: Dean whumpage???? Nah- now what could possibly be wrong with that? LOL! Tree
Reviewer: Micaiah (Signed) · Date: 14/01/10 02:07 PM · On: Shattered By My Pride
Really good chapter. Sounds just like the brothers arguing. And really, I've always thought both boys have a point. I think they saw their Dad differently because of the way he raised them. He made Dean into a soldier but he protected Sam. I think because John and Dean both tried to protect Sam, it made him a little selfish. I think John did the best he knew how with both boys. He wasn't a hunter like Mary. He knew nothing about the life. I can imagine he spent many sleepless nights worrying about both of his boys and wondering if what killed Mary would come to get them also.
Author's Response: Thanks Nancy - I agree totally- there's two sides here- neither right or wrong... but both colored by their POV and upbringing... and at the risk of the SamGirls- yep- I too think that Sam - being overly protected by both Dean and John DID become just a tad spoiled... but at the same time- I think there's nothing he wouldnt do for his brother as well- it just sometimes doesnt show quite as blatantly as it does with Dean. Thanks so much for your kind reviews- and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I hope you keep stopping by! Tree
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 14/01/10 08:14 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Well, as well as snow outside here there's snow threatening poor Dean, I can feel every snowflake chilling him to the bone, I hate the stuff...lol Great chapter, well worth the wait, at least the creature has left him alone for now, but I guess it's still lurking somewhere. And at last Sam is on the hunt for Dean. I do love those sentences like 'like a snail crawling through wet concrete' ! That just sounds too squelchy to imagine, yuck...lol Looking forward to the next chapter... Jacq
Author's Response: Jacq Soo glad you're enjoying the story... and yes- the snow is no more kind to Dean than it has been to most of us! LOL. I think it has at least been an inspiration for my writing though- so if the bone-numbing chills seeps through- then its working! Glad that some of the similes are working for ya' too.... trying to find the right descriptive isnt always the easiest thing to do- but I love it when I hit a mark with the reader. THanks so much for taking the time to read and review! Tree
Reviewer: Micaiah (Signed) · Date: 13/01/10 11:47 PM · On: Married To My Guilt
Dean and his metabolism thing. That's too cute. I know I'm late into the game here but better late than never, right? I'm intrigued as to what kind of creature they are going up against. Love the tension between the brothers. This was a very tense time for them both, especially for Dean with the secret hanging over his head.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 12/01/10 08:56 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
The imagery with the cold Impala just worked on so many levels. First it's the physical: the car is cold, meaning Dean hasn't been in it for some time (meaning it hasn't been running because Dean is ABSENT). Then it's also cold because Dean isn't there to fill it up, leaving it an empty space. Both metaphorically and literally. Then we have Sam seeing the car as an extension of his brother, and it being cold and empty parallels his fear that Dean is dead or lost (cold in the literal sense because of the weather, or cold in the worst possible sense of being dead). And then, as I said earlier, Sam thinking about driving the car sans Dean reminds him of all the times his brother has been unable to drive the car is such a parallel to post-season 3 (where the car became Sam's because Dean was dead). It just twinges deep in the heart to have Sam thinking about that empty car at this point in the series mytharc because we KNOW what's coming. And somehow you managed to convey all that with a few short, bittersweet paragraphs. I know I'm waxing poetic about it, but it just hit me on so many levels that I got a little choked up while reading it.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 12/01/10 06:56 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
I've been really looking forward to this update, and you certainly didn't disappoint. This was a really great installment, especially the Sam parts. (I know! Shocking coming from a Dean!whump junkie like me, but there you have it). There was just something so poignant about Sam discovering the Impala, Sam laying his hands on the cold metal and almost having a dialogue with her. The fact that Sam is so very rarely ever in that car by himself really struck a chord with me, in a foreshadowing to season 4 kind of way. The Legacy of Dean Winchester all wrapped up in that car (instead of beautiful, cherub-faced Winchester babies)... Anyway, it was a really great touch, Sam having a moment with the car. It set the tone and said so much more than the words on the page. And then there was Dean whump! Does it get any better than our boy struggling through an owie, being all stubborn and tough and groaning in pain? More when you can!
Author's Response: Thanks Mel- I'm glad you liked the bit with Sam and the Impala.. I thought it was ironically appropriate for him to have that moment with the car when he's always giving Dean so much grief about bestowing human qualities on the Impala. So using works like skin and cold as death... it just felt right- glad it had that impact on you too! Glad you also enjoyed the WHUMPAGE! lol! More coming!!!
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 11/01/10 07:18 PM · On: And the Road I Walk is Paved With Sorrow...
Wow... brilliant on so many levels... where to begin? Guess this review will be longer after all... damn, if I could only be a little less long-winded ... Let's start with Sam's part of the chappie... The idea of Sam loving spring just had me ROFLMAO. So fitting! And may I say, I immediately had an image of a happySam amidst fluffy bunnies, little lambs and chirruping chicklets in my mind. Don't ask. The stuff my brain comes up with sometimes *shakes head still chuckling at Sam and herself* Then just one sentence later you had me catch my breath again. As you did with every bit afterwards. I LOVED this chapter. So tense and filled with action. But lemme get back to Sammy and the bitterness that seeped into my mirth. The reason why he prefers spring is fine but why he hates winter... that just made me shiver... poor boy. Now a piece of I loved for the perfect wording and description, the beauty of choosing the right vocab and weaving it into a mental image and tangible emotion: the shadows from the nearby forest creeping outward to envelop the building like the tentacles of some nightmarish monster. WOW. Kudos, man. Talk about setting the atmosphere and a scene. LOVELY. Terrific even. Jeez. *shivers with forebodings* Sam and the groceries incident. LOL. Dude, mixture of Jerry Lewis and Jim Carey. HAHA. I saw EVERY TINY detail playing out in my head. Great stuff. And seriously chick, I could so relate to Sam. I am dead clumsy. And would've ended up the same way. Trust me. I would've managed the same trick. LOL. Wow, and ain't Sammy pissing off everyone here... ? He can be a little too blunt sometimes. I would've smacked the smart right out of his mouth there. Not physically but verbally. I'd 've kicked his ass out ... or maybe not. I mean he ain't Dean (*daydreams*) but he's a pretty Winchester... hm... now.. I get why she didn't do that. And may I say this: I think I saw that possible flirt (not love) interest comin'. She's just his type. Dark hair, petite and a little snarky. Notice how most of his hook ups after Jess are the complete opposite of her outward appearance? Just a thought... but I'm wandering off here... THANK YOU for putting in some horror movie refs. Two things on that scene: 1) I love me some Jason! And by the way summing up the bad guys with those words about mothers and such... NICE JOB. Very true! 2) Background music. Way to go, Nara! LOL. And I always have them with background music. *points at playlist* can't do without some nice tunes while reading/writing/vidding. Just doesn't seem right somehow. Dean POV-section. hmmmmm don't you just love this man pissed off, punching and kicking and being punched? Bleeding a little, processing his pain ... pushing it away for later... always coming back... and never giving up? *thudthudthud* nope, not my heart beat. My head repeatedly hitting the desk while fainting in between writing these lines. First of all: MOUTH??? my first thought: GOONIES for the win! YAY. Okay.... the way my mind works hasn't been figured out (neither by me nor professionals, LOL) yet. And can I start drooling once more: SweatyDean practicing with a sand-sack... man, ain't that just a WORTHY sight... Y.U.M. Hadda laugh at this one (and I think that sums up Dean's current state nicely...) enough pent-up rage to level a small village... FREAKING HILARIOUS and little sad.. well, not just a little but I love your choice of words there... Oh and then the BEST FIGHT SCENE EVER. Felt like watching it in slow motion. Perfect down to the smallest detail, the faintest twitch of a muscle. Wonderfully choreographed. like a dance, which is what a really good fight scene should be like. And it so showed Dean's yummy cat-like grace, his agility and dexterity. Love him when he fights. So HAWT. I could even smell/taste the bloody tang in the air. YOU ROCK! I know how hard writing a decent fight scene can be. It has to be accurate, doable and believable. All at the same time. I hate writing them. Friggin meticulous work. And ended up in various bruises or numb joints on my part. However, Dean fighting them bullies crept me out a little. I loved the way you described it 'cause it reminded me very much of that vamp-chainsaw-get-together (LOL, love me some gore) in Bloodlust. He just switches on the autopilot, set to survival mode and never stops dealing out punches and jabs and kicks and stuff. It's not healthy but very sexy at the same time. Heehee... But it freaked me out. I fear for him. He is really on the edge, just needs a little tip in the wrong direction and -BOOM!- explodes, and seriously, I wouldn't wanna be near him when he goes off like the world's biggest human nuke... friggin lethal. Hey, how wonderful that you had Sam step in finally. I was a little angry with him before. I get why he didn't intervene but man, I couldn't have done that. I loved how he is called back to his senses from his fighting frenzy by Sam's voice. Love that about the boys. They each work as anchor for the other one, bringing their sibling back into reality... awh, how I miss them... still 10 more days... I can't wait! Loved the epilogue of the fighting scene... The dialogue there has some great banter in it. Picked out the best lines just 'cause I love to read them here again: "I win." heeheee... dizzy, half conscious, numbed from repeated blows to EVERY square inch of his body... but no, he doesn't lose his snark. And YAY, he so kicked their asses 10 ways from Sunday. You gotta love this guy. I'd feel so safe around him, I tell ya... he's about the only guy who could ever make me feel that way... yup, I got high standards, but the man of my dreams needs to be strong, witty, snarky and able to fight for me to death. There, doesn't that sum up Dean? Oh and did I mention my extreme preference for green eyes framed with long, thick dark lashes and some freckles? Oh and the stubble... and bandy legs... a perky ass... luscious lips... oops sorry... not a smut report, woman, this is s'posed to be a review, get a grip! Loved Sam coming back with this one (and I imagined a smirk and a bitch face and a roll of his eyes here): "You drop here, you're sleeping here." BWAHAHAHA. ROFLMFAO. Way to go Sammy... And then he even tops it with: "He can stagger that far." Is it me or does Sammy feel a little glee at his brother's beat up, screwed to hell condition?Heehee. And I so love Dean staggering his way... remember BUABS when he leans heavily into Jo and his knees buckle and he trips... whoa... sorry, but that makes this sick fangirl's heart skip several beats EVERY SINGLE TIME. Heeehee, and another great one from Sam: "awesomely handsome" , my ass. LOL. I do love some scars but swollen faces... nah, not so much. Heehe. Dean saying "she loves me" wasn't bad either. But I have to admit that Sam clearly won the banter for once. Okay, Dean was almost out of it but hey, every win counts! All in all, I am curious as to how the story develops and the Indian will surely dish up some hurt for Dean in the future chapters, right? Poor Sammy's gonna end up kickin' his ass for ever mentioning the hunt in the first place. Boy, he's gonna angst and worry like hell, I bet. Wonderful, brilliant. Excellent chapter hun. Don't you EVER dare say you can't really write. Coz, hun, you can. You ROCK! Hugs ya, and will come back to the story over the next days, I promise. I am so hooked now. Ilka PS: sorry, hadda delete the first review, too many effing typos in it. I didn't check for grammar now but I guess it's a little better now... Off to bed now, hugs ya.
Author's Response: Geez dude! - I think your muse is writing reviews! LOL! So glad you liked this chapter- you picked out some of my favorite parts too... I'm really glad you liked the fight scene- I work hard to make those come out fluid... working them out in my head- step by step. ANd I'm also glad you liked the snark at the end too- I could just picture a bloody and battered Dean lying on the ground and looking up at Nara and Sam- never missing a beat and saying "but I won!" Yet you're right- Sammy's still perturbed at his bro- hence the "you drop here- you sleep here" attitude. I'm really glad you like this.. you make me smile (blush really) -sitting here now grinning silly - good thing no one can see me- I look like an idiot. But thanks! And no worries about typos- you dork... I make enough of my own... I'm fluent in typoese! hahaha!
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 11/01/10 04:27 PM · On: Shattered By My Pride
Dude... man the boys are at odds with each other. Painful, heartbreaking even, to read. So wonderfully written. AWESOME. I loved this chapter even if I had something in my eye at some point or another... damn, it's dusty around here. LOL. I love the way they each try to process their loss and grief, how they attempt to rearrange their lives to fit the new conditions with John being dead, the Colt gone and John's last words weighing on Dean's shoulders with the impact crushing Sam alongside (even if he doesn't really know... there certainly is some fall out, poor him. Doesn't even know what's going on... *hugs Sammy and Dean*). These 3 issues form a true sword of Damocles hanging over their heads just barely teetering on the edge of slamming down like the blade of a guillotine.... Man, they both have some issues... Poor Sammy guilt-ridden and still -at the same time- angry with his dad. And Dean... man, I do like a pissed off Dean but this Dean is just wrong in so many ways. He creeps me right out. I get what Sam is feeling about this new Dean. Jeez, that green-eyed hottie really breaks my heart more with every word I read in this fic. Searching refuge in alcohol or a brawl... that's nothing new. But not even listening to Metallica??? (dude, I love that you chose Unforgiven. My ALL TIME FAV. LOOOOOVE the lyrics... so him!) No music at all? And somehow, I don't like the idea of them being separated just now. Even if only by a few yards. I dunno. Feels wrong and dangerous. I'm sure Dean will show the Ojibwe guys a few new jabs and punches but in the end, I fear they'll get the better of him and I doubt he'll like the result in the morning. (I sure would... I dig scars and bruises by the dozen... heehee, I'm a sick puppy...)
I'm intrigued by Nara and Biyen. I love me some Indian myths (*points at UIS*). But there is deffo something very threatening going on. Okay, next chappie it is. I'm sorry for the shortness of this review. But I wanna read through quite a few chappies tonite, so you'll have more reviews and less words to read... that a deal? Hugs, Ilka
Author's Response: You just tickle me with your reviews... reading them makes me go back and say- "did I write that?" Sometimes you pick out things that I hadnt even realized I'd done... so thanks for that! Glad you're enjoying it - you got to catch up now! You're a few chaps behind! Heehee!
Reviewer: Oceane (Signed) · Date: 10/01/10 01:53 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
Dean is in big, big trouble. No food, no water, no shelter, no warmer clothes, no weapon with a creature after him his time is running out and fast but John and Sam's apparition're helping him to hang on, for the moment. Terrific chapter Tree, the suspense is killing me, I want more already. Happy New Year Tree.
Author's Response: Oceane... I always love seeing you come out and leave a review.Yes- things arent looking so great for Dean... and there's still sooo much for him to battle through- but this is Dean... never fear! More is on the way! And Happy New Year to you as well! Hope 2010 brings all the best to you! THanks for reading and reviewing- as always! Tree
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 10/01/10 10:31 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
HOORAY!!!! I've been looking forward to this, and even then, I didn't have a chance to read it when it first got posted! I am so happy to see this! Poor Dean, all hurt, and Sam, all worried and feeling guilty. This is fabulous! Has been from the start!
Author's Response: Thanks Julie! So glad you're still enjoying the story. There's plenty more hurtDean and WorriedSam- although I think you'll be seeing some slight change in both of them coming up.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving such a nice review! Tree
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 08/01/10 01:17 PM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
An exciting update, lots of lovely Sam in this chapter lol, poor Dean hurt and lost out in the cold dark woods, hope Sam finds him soon. Congrats on your win, it's well deserved.
Author's Response: Lindsay Thanks so much for your kind congrats! I'm very glad you came back to read the story after my long delay. Hopefully the next chaps wont be such a long wait. As for Sam finding him soon... well.....
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/01/10 06:08 AM · On: Broken By My Ghosts
There was some wonderful imagery in this chapter....where do I start? Your descriptions take your readers right into the story, almost as if we're walking shoulder to shoulder with the boys. I'm sitting here in summer heat in shorts and a tank top with a fan going to circulate the warm air, and I could feel the icy kiss of the snow and freezing rain, the sucking mud beneath my bare feet and the creepy feeling of being watched running up my spine.....I actually felt cold. That's great storytelling. The internal dialogue of both men was spot-on once more - beautiful job with Dean's and the way he was holding onto that newly formed resentment towards John by arguing with his dad's voice in his head, but responding to Sam's pleas just as he would if his brother was actually standing there. Sam's emotions when he found the Chevy were so well-painted I was hunched over the keyboard, feeling the fear in my own chest as he reached for the door handle. Oh, and I have to say - "Note to self - don't open trunk in front of the women." That made me chuckle - that was a great line. As was the description of Sam's thoughts invading his mind like pirates taking after a freighter. Lots of really good moments. I found myself getting lost in the story and not doing my job as a beta in quite a few places - lol. And that is why this story won Best WIP - your ability to weave a tale to keep the reader enthralled. Jules
Author's Response: I always forget about the season difference across the equator... up here- its not so hard to imagine huge flakes of fluffy white snow drifting lazily- cause gee- thats what its been doing for day! ( wanna share some of that sunshine with me? LOL) The *Note to self* - funny story there... I own guns... no secret there... but in Illinois where I live- its illegal to carry them in your car in certain circumstances unless you have a permit ( which I do) but they still have to be in a case, unloaded, etc... - and I was coming back from the range - and I had several of my guns in the trunk when I had to stop and pick my sons up from a play date at a friends house. They had all their stuff with them and as the other boy's mom walked out to the car with us- all I could think was "DON'T OPEN THE TRUNK IN FRONT OF HER!" - so there ya go! As for the Best WIP -You keep saying it- maybe some point I'll believe it! LOL
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/01/10 02:16 PM · On: Here I Am Alone...
Really loved the descriptions in the opening scenes of the chapter - it put me right out there in the rain and the cold with Dean. The dialogue going on between Dean and his conscience was great. Dean unable to get his father's last words out of his head, exacerbated by the fact that he's hurt, cold, hungry and being hunted. Too many distractions for him to cope with. Also loved how he barged straight at the creature, catching it off-guard, even though it was only a temporary respite at best. This thing hasn't gotten itself an easy prey this time. Dean won't just lie down and wait to be dismembered - not without taking a sizeable chunk of the creature with him. My heart was in my mouth when the thing dragged Dean over the edge of the gully with it, and they hit the bottom....hard. Great line about the mockery of a lovers' embrace, by the way. Oh, Sammy - you're going to regret that message later......but can understand - I've been in that situation myself with someone overdue and me pacing, getting more worried and more angry by the minute. And Sam's hurting too, over the death of their father. Even though he was pretty much estranged from John, he still loved his dad, and would have been filled with regrets and guilt when John died because there was a lot unresolved between them. And with the added worry of a brother going off the rails..... And yep, he regrets it - especially now that Nara has found the Impala, and Dean's bloodied jacket. Hopefully Sam will find his brother before the creature does....... Jules
Author's Response: This was actually one of my favorite bits to write thus far- so I'm glad you liked it. I love the action- and I try to think- how would the character react in this situation. SO - considering Wendigo or some of the other situations where Dean tended to be more "Head on" - it only seemed appropriate that when his back was against the wall- he'd basically play a game of Chicken with the creature. Phone calls- yep- been there myself- nothing like putting your mouth in gear and regretting it later. Life makes for good fiction doesnt it? As for Sam- alas- I dont believe he'll find Dean before the critter does- but then- you didnt really expect him to did you? LOL. Thanks Jules... your words, your beta and your support mean the world to me!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/01/10 02:07 PM · On: Dark Days Arise...
Loved the boys' respective internal monologues berating them. And Sam's pacing - could picture that clearly in my head. Nara had Sam pretty well pegged, didn't she? That was great how she caught him flat-footed with her observations. And sweet how they both danced around each other, unsure whether to make a move or not. So Biyen dumped Dean out in the middle of the woods to be prey for the creature, stripping him of every defence apart from his own inventiveness and hunting skills. And now the creature has him scented and spotted. Run, indeed.... That description of the creature's eyes was really well done - and bloody creepy, I might add....... And what a time for Dean to find out that he was totally wrong - it was a hunt after all, not just an overzealous security force from the casino getting revenge on unruly customers. Come on, Sam, listen to those bad feelings you're having! Jules
Author's Response: Glad you like Nara- its always tough to develop an OC- especially a female one- and not have them be distracting or stupid or WORSE. I kinda wanted someone that could go toe- to - toe with him... maybe a bit like a female Dean so to speak... or say like Sara from Providence... And yes- I think that by the time Sam puts some of that emotional baggage away- he'll have wished he'd have followed the nagging voices a bit sooner! Thanks as always hun!
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