Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed)
29/08/09 08:12 PM · On:
The way this is written it could either be Dean or Sam speaking. I guess that really depends on the reader. The first thing that I flashed to in my mind was NRFTW but now that you mention it this one shot could cover Mystery Spot and AHBL(Part 1). I loved your word choice throughout. You are really talented.
Author's Response: Thanks again! I really enjoyed working on this so it could be interpreted as either brother speaking and it also fit into several of their death scenes. Wow, how many show have that many death scenes of principle characters to choose from? Later, B.J.
Reviewer: sam (Signed)
25/04/09 02:45 AM · On:
I think this is a mixture of not only both, but also for two others and that is the writer it self and how most fanatics of supernatural would read, feel, and think of it.
I do think it was very creative and illusion of whom is the sense of feeling . . . could it be DEAN, writer, or SAM. That is the ? and I think you did more then well in this poetry and I lioke it. I thought it was more Dean then Sam or more of . . . JOHN WINCHESTER also viewing it in his prospective way of being spirtualy with mary.
Thank you! It feels good to know that my few words have such power. The Winchesters have all suffered such loss and as viewers who are totally swept up in their lives, we feel it too, not to mention our own personal losses. The story truly is the merging of all that loss and the pain it brings. Thanks for reading and leaving such an insightful review. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: Pandora Jazz (Signed)
13/03/09 01:11 AM · On:
Just wanted to say hi and surprise you - I do get to other boards occasionally.
I did like this story and thought you did an awesome job with the description of the scene. Still think in the end it was Dean holding Sam, just felt like it.
Thanks again for sharing your story with us and also for the warning, but I'm glad I read this one.
Hey, Lori, this was a nice surprise. I haven't answered any of my fanfiction reviews yet, was waiting until tonight's episode and then was falling asleep and getting ready to head off to bed.
I am glad you liked this one. I can handle dark as long as I know the boys come out all right in the end.
You are right about the end of the story being Dean holding Sam, that was the inspiration, that tragic final scene of AHBL1. And yet the words still hold up for Sam holding Dean's limp body in MS and even NRFTW. So much death and loss for those guys and so much shared pain.
Reviewer: CatzEye (Signed)
11/03/09 10:14 PM · On:
I for some reason felt this was Sam speaking -- even though the scene at the end of AHBL1 resonated as well -- You did a brilliant job with this piece, as it just speaks to all both brothers have been through -- Excellent!
Thanks, CatzEye! I think the title sounds more like Dean is the one dead since Dean is the only one to have a grave.
Dean cradling Sam in his arms at the end of AHBL was a major inspiration for the last part of the story. Both brothers losing their loved one is heartbreaking. Thanks again, B.J.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed)
11/03/09 09:42 AM · On:
Such a tragic, beautiful piece of writing. Your metaphors and analogies were stunning in painting the imagery of death stalking the brothers and their doomed lives. The unstopable rain moving in was brilliant - I felt the inevitablity of their fate and it made me very sad.This line simply broke my heart with its utter truth "...balancing on the edge of solitude as the reaper sought the last of my loved ones."
I had Dean's voice in my head very clearly from your first word. I don't think I'll ever get over Sam dying in his brothers arms and Dean's utter devastation. A reread with MS works well and yes, I can view it through a NRFTW lens too, but for me its more AHBL.
Hey, Cookie, thanks again!
Being a Dean gal, I do tend to write from Dean's perspective and him seeing Sammy die at the end of AHBL1 was totally devastating and definitely the inspiration for the end of this story. And he was always the one who worried about losing all his loved ones and ending up alone.
And yet I saw that same devastation and pain from Sam when Dean dies that last time in MS. Hence this story, both suffering unimaginable loss.
The inevitability of their fates is so very tragic and why Kripke simply must save them in the end. They deserve to live, deserve some satisfaction from saving the world, and then some happiness for themselves.
They have suffered so much loss. Thanks again, take care, B.J.
Reviewer: calUK (Signed)
11/03/09 04:10 AM · On:
Oh, that sent a shiver down my spine. Beautiful imagery - the storm that's an undercurrent in the show ("Storm's comin'.") suddenly a raging metaphor for the inevitable end. *sigh*
It worked as either brother, it is probably just me but the voice speaking changed as ?I read it, from one to the other and back again, so it really does work both ways.
It also works a third way - that this is a death in the future, at the end of the war for them, these lines:
"We still had time.
Time ended on a dark and dreary day. The last wisp of light slipping away as a murky blur of gray descended upon us. The rain came in a blinding fury as all hope washed away."
seem to speak of the hope they've both seen realised in the other's resurrection being lost.
Lovely, sad and a little bittersweet.
Now where's that phone number?
Thanks, I agree the voice changes subtly throughout the story, some lines sounding more like Dean and some more like Sam, but in the end they both share than commonality of losing their loved one. Poor guys!
The threat of a death in the future is very real and I think this story speaks to their impending fates as well, but I sure hope Kripke saves them in the end. They deserve to be saved and have some happiness in their lives after all the suffering they have endured.
Thanks for a lovely review. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed)
10/03/09 09:33 PM · On:
I was wondering which brother was speaking here, kind of ambivalent until I read
He never saw it coming, but I did...every nightmare pushed back again when morning came
This clinched it as Dean for me, I can see him having recurring nightmares about losing Sam, not that he'd ever admit it. And we know that at least some of Sam's nightmares are about Jess. So, after that, I pictured a rainy night in Cold Oak and it fit perfectly.
Then I read your ending blurb and realized how well that line fit with Sam's endless Tuesdays, too! Sue
Hey, Sue! Thanks for reviewing. I love that this story is open to interpretation, and hearing how the readers responded and their thoughts has been fascinating.
I do think both brothers have suffered such loss, such devastation. They share not only that brotherly bond, but a desperate fear of being left all alone.
I only hope Kripke saves them in the end, they deserve to live their lives. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed)
10/03/09 04:14 PM · On:
In this short piece , you totally brought the tears, and they're still falling as i type this.
I "felt it was both boys lament- but I clearly "heard " Dean screaming Sammy's name at Cold Oak.....OUTSTANDING writing!!!!
You are a artist with your verbage-painting the sadness, horror , and the inevitable that stalked the boys.EXCELLENT storytelling!!!!
Time... the elusive controller of all tings...it ran out......
You are the consumate writer.
Oh,Recca, you are too kind. I do love seeing how much emotion and truth I can weave into as few words as possible. This setting has all the potential to be powerful, poignant and paralyzing. What is worse for these boys than losing their brother? Glad I managed to accomplish what I hoped for.
Time has always been unkind to the Winchesters and their destiny has always hung over them, being the last of the Winchesters. I only hope Kripke lets them hold on to each other as the final episode airs, they deserve to win and live. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed)
10/03/09 02:43 PM · On:
You made me cry...soft sad tears of slow tormented loss and inevitable grief. It is a wonderful piece..tagging it as a fav hunny.
And who's voice did I hear? Both first, then Sammy and then Dean. It works...works real well...well, you made me cry!
Thanks for sharing...you wordsmith you!
Aw, lovely review, Bev... sorry to make you cry, but these boys and their lives just have that effect on ya.
It just goes to show how similar their lives and losses are, how interchangeable their grief is. I was hoping it would resonate for both guys, glad it worked for ya. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed)
10/03/09 06:33 AM · On:
Seriously...you've got Dean's mobile number?
*blinks hopeful puppy dog eyes*...can I have his personal thanks?
This was great, even though I don't usually read dark ones - and I honestly thought it was Sam up till the kneeling in the dark puddle bit, then I went - oh - it's Dean cradling Sam. I never even thought of Mystery Spot. Not any fault of yours - I'm just a little off the planet this week..... My friends have long suspected me of being an alien - I think I just proved it to them.
This was poignant and sad in all the right places, if that makes sense. And upon reading back, I can see how it could be for either brother.
Actually, I misspoke about the number... he went and changed it on me. I'm sure it is just an oversight that he hasn't called me with his new number. I'm waiting, Dean... call me!
*Wink* I think being an alien is good and I can relate. I've been a bit distracted myself lately, what with a new demanding job and no time for frivolous, necessary pursuits like writing. It is especially cool if you have the good sense to fall madly in love with Supernatural and our boys! *Hi 5!*
Personally I think the title and the word 'grave' might lead you to first think of Sam since Dean is the only one to actually have a grave. The kneeling in the puddle was totally inspired by Dean cradling Sammy and yelling out to him at the end of AHBL1.
I do love that MS is also in the rain at the end, not as obvious, but Dean's jeans are soaked and my friends and I always thought poor Jensen lying there on the cold pavement.
Both scenes are devastating, as is NRFTW. How much death and loss are our Winchesters expected to endure?
Thanks, Jules, really appreciate the comments... and Dean says thanks too. Later, B.J.
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed)
10/03/09 06:09 AM · On:
A very powerful one shot,beautifuly written.
At the beginning of the story i felt it could have been from both Dean or Sam's pov, however at the end i was taken right back to AHBL1,so for me i'd have to say Dean's pov,that's the beauty of this fic i think every one will see something different, excellent writing.
Thanks, I agree the ending is totally Dean holding Sammy at Cold Oak. I love having a story that is subject to interpretation and hearing everyone's comments has been great.
These guys have suffered so much death and tragedy, it simply lends itself to heart-wrenching words. All their emotions are always on their faces just waiting to be transcribed to the page. Thanks again, B.J.
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed)
10/03/09 03:20 AM · On:
I liked this, but I like dark and angsty. I couldn't decided which brother I though it was until near the end.
The title and the reaper line made me think of NRFTW and I thought it was Sam at that point. Dean's grave and being hunted down to his last day.
In the end though, as soon as you mentioned kneeling and calling out his name it was instantly Dean.
The scene at the end of AHBL1 was for me, one of the most powerful in the whole show, Dean's final cry of Sam is etched into my brain forever. I loved the image of Dean holding Sam in his arms, crying for his fallen brother - I get a lump in my throat everytime I watch it.
Loved that this story made me think of it again. It's what the show is all about. Love, loss and two brothers as you highlighted in this little one shot.
Thanks again BJ, Mary xx
Thanks, Mary, that is exactly what this show is about, love, loss and two brothers. I only hope they find some happiness and are together at the end.
I agree the title with grave mentioned and the reaper coming for his brother sounds like Sam losing Dean in NRFTW, but the final scene of kneeling in the puddle, that is most definitely inspired by AHBL1.
I agree, that was the most powerful scene ever, and for someone spoiler free, quite a shock that they actually did it. And now look at us, so much death and thankfully resurrection for our brothers.
Really glad you enjoyed my story and shared your thoughts. Take care, B.J.
Reviewer: mustang (Signed)
10/03/09 02:21 AM · On:
dark, but very beautiful..me personally I love the rain..
I felt the beginning could go either way..but at the end I felt you were speaking more for Dean..I can't watch that scene with him talking to Sam without crying..Thanks for writing.
I love that the story works for both brothers and examing the losses they've suffered. The ending scene is totally inspired by AHBL1. Sam's limp body slumping down and Dean desperately calling out his name, yeah, that is heartbreak!
Thanks again and take care, B.J.