Ok so now we're moving into a whole 'nother level of the story. We're moving deeper into the inner workings of Penny Hillsworth. Still with the same great linguistic style. Very well written indeed. Good job blending the two different characters too. You not only made Penny fit in with the Winchers' lives, but you molded Dean and Sam around her life as well. AND BOBBY. VERY nice tease with Penny being the seventh child. Hoping we'll hear more about that later. I love the mysterious air surrounding her mother's ordeal. It makes for a great tease and it keeps us interested. I love that you rounded off the story with a happy note. Not sure I can handle too much heartbreak in one take. Very nice - and long - story. Thoroughly enjoyed it. I love that you, by making Penny comfortable with stories of The Old Ones, create so much more space for the story to develope. You bring so much potential into the story by making her aware of the things in the dark. You're opening a lot more doors as you progress in the story rather than closing them as the information is given and the endresult narrows. What I mean to say is, I often struggle to keep a story full of potential for as long as I possibly can, by keeping the details to a minimum. But what you're doing is to actually limit the information and make it work FOR the story, rather than against it. Very nice job with that.
Uhh, what else....
I have a feeling that we're gonna see more of Penny as she joins the brothers on a few hunts? If you let her character hijack the plot, that is :) No, but seriously. I'm a little ambiguous about seeing Penny hunting, because that would automatically put her in a new class with the other supernatural-hunter-babes (like Jo and - to a certain extent - Ruby) Tough women who help the brothers fight the things in the dark. I'm honestly not sure how her character would change if that happened. I don't mind saying that I'm a little apprehensive and intrigued at the same time to see what she would look like then :D Because her curiosity and apprehension to the world of hunting is very much a part of her character, as far as I can gather (feel free to correct me if I'm wrong) :)
But again, I love what you're doing with the characters. You don't have to worry about not sticking to their personalities as defined on the show. Very good job :) Looking forward to more.
Whoof! That was a long one. I'm done... for now...
Cheers, Andi :D
Author's Response: No worries about the length. I am forever writing long comments to reviews. I think I scare people.
OK, the one thing I can say is that I have never - ever - planned on Penny becoming a hunter. Her background is somewhat unique - and you're one of the few people who has ever made the connection with the seventh daughter scenario - and it does have bearing on the 'verse and on her role within the AU. There are specific themes I wanted to explore that never materialized on the show, so I created a 'verse of my own to explore them.
That being said, I'm doing my best to provide a reasonable development for Sam and Dean based on the changes I've made in S2 by incorporating the Hillsworths.
Oh. Penny hijacked the plot by going to the Roadhouse. That wasn't supposed to happen, but I went with it anyway because that's where Penny wanted to go.
I don't want to ruin the rest by saying more but...thank you so much for the review. As always. ;)
