:: Supernaturalville

Reviewer: Bugsbunny2 (Signed) · Date: 22/12/08 06:33 PM · On: Nazis

This is good, and I like the story so far. You have captured their feelings perfectly. well done.
But, there is one thing, I think you need to punctuate the story a bit more in places. In some parts, it is a bit difficult to understand.
Maybe you should get someone to read over your story before you post it, to check the puctuation of it.
Other than the punctuation, this is a great story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it :D Well done.

Reviewer: copycat666 (Signed) · Date: 22/12/08 04:00 PM · On: Nazis

sweet but so short , anyway update soon !

Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 22/12/08 12:26 PM · On: Nazis

loved this please update soon!!

Reviewer: copycat666 (Signed) · Date: 16/12/08 03:21 PM · On: Prologe

This makes me very curious ! The words you choose are filled with a hole lot more then contents ! Great job !

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