Oh Cal, you know I love this piece. And as I am in position of knowing how the series will continue, I can only advise people to stick with this epic masterpiece. It's like the show on TV... only a little more twisted - in a calUK-good kinda way.
OK quoting session about to start:
Staring blearily out through the thin gap, caged by his lashes, ...... mmmmh, love it when they do that, luckily they always do it, so always love it, hahha... even though this is Sammy... I think I am starting to like Sam. Even on the show. Like as in *drool all over him*. He is pretty sexy this season. Dark, fierce, potentially demonic. Aw, bring on January 15! Glad you've started this series. It will shorten the time to pass...
the dawn light creeping through the thin gap in the curtains, gilding the hollow motel room with a beautiful lie. ..... beautiful! just brilliant. And very eerie. A beautiful lie creeping in with daylight.... A sentence worth an essay in a literature course...
John scene: You do such a lovely and distraught yet strong John. A father, a worrier, a widdowed husband... a hunter and Winchester. Family and job. Love the way the signs underline the waning proximity to the boys and the concentration on the job growing accordingly. Terrific!
In a perfectly choreographed chain reaction, his feet tangled up in the packets and he staggered again, legs hitting the couch at an angle and he went flying, the shopping crashing to the floor around him as he landed awkwardly on the cushions..... skilled hunter and cat-like grace! More like slapstick. Love me a clumsy Dean. He always gets so pissed off if he messes up. And I LOVE me a pissed off Dean. *drools*
He struggled to hold it at his side, trembling, knowing at least half of the anger wasn't directed at his brother at all, but still barely able to contain it. ..... Good thing Dean leaves otherwise there might have been punches thrown and bruises to attend to... Wait. Did I say it was good that he left? Love me some cuts and bruises. And btw: Teenage testosterone tantrum. Short TTT. There should be an entry in Gray's Anatomy (not the show but the book for medical studies!) covering this very common and incurable disease. Maybe they will invent a cure some day?
What if he isn't coming back? ... Aw sweet vulnerable teen!Dean. Lemme hug him till he's better. Do I sound like a bad, perverted person? Honestly, no smutty intentions. My heart just bleeds for the boys... They really had a sucky childhood!"Dammit..." he ground out, vision blurring as he hung desperately onto the rough bark, head down, fighting to breathe through the nausea and pounding headache, black spots dancing across the fog behind his eyes. ... I'll make an exception to above mentioned opinion. Even teen!Dean is yummy when hurt and weakened. I am speaking as the eternal teenager living inside me. The teenager that fell in love with Dean Winchester. The teenager who is a total FANGIRL!
"You got a nice burn going on, Dean. Look like a lobster." "Shut it, runt." "Or maybe a baboon's ass." Lovely humour and brotherly banter. Made me grin and finally (on reading the baboon's ass) laugh out loud and clap. Way to go snarky Sammy! *grins*...... *is flustered* Um. Sorry Dean. Um. ehem. me bad, bad, bad Dean-girl. *goes to hide behind sofa*
he didn’t need to read minds to know the question wasn’t the one his brother had started to ask. .... even at that age... they can already read each others thoughts, perfectly in sync.... love this.
"No. Carpet sucked. Even before you redecorated." Lol... Just like them. Very in character humour in this story, Cal. Great!
And just like that, it was okay again for a while. .... That's just the way it is for them, isn't it? They laugh and then for a short while everything falls back into place... for a while their lives seem normal. Ah, I so hope they had a fair share of "normal" even in their weird lives...
OK. That's it. It's official. I LOVE THIS. Roll on the next one... Brilliant start of series...
Hugs and snogs, Ilka
Author's Response: oops, haven't responded... sorry! glad you (still!) like it - and love the TTT - so true. it should definately be in Grey's! Later hun!
Cal
