Reviewer: deansangel462 (Signed) · Date: 25/11/10 03:29 PM · On: Touch the Other Side
You are over describing things and making the Winchesters sound like cry babies!! I don't like it, I tried to keep reading, thought maybe some sort of action or actual story line would come about but it never did!! It only kept losing my interest, and confusing me!! I am sorry but next time don't use so many adjectives and use more fighting scenes! You have them all crying more in this story than fighting!! It's just not beleivable!!
Author's Response: I'm sorry you feel that way - there is an element of action in this story, but it simply was never going to be the focus for the tale. Some of the most striking scenes in the show are emotional, reflective ones, and that was something that fit the storyline more than fighting. Thank you for the feedback.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 10/01/10 08:32 AM · On: I Tell To You My Story
If you hadn't mentioned there is a sequel coming there would be an angry mob carrying torches outside your house. Still leaving this chapter as you did is E-Vil. I love how you interspersed Jack's ministrations with Sam's desperate pleas for Dean to come back to him. It was heartbreaking to have the clinical and the emotional intertwined. "Don't go. I can't stop them if you go. I can't stop them taking you, or me." When you added the 'or me', you showed us how broken and scared Dean was. I felt a little tingle up my spine and had to sigh with sympathy for the poor boy. "I won't," he whispered top the dark, shutting his eyes against the sound of the lie in his own voice." How horrible for Dean to feel so vulnerable and know that no matter what he did, he'd never be able to protect himself or his brother from the revenants.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 10/01/10 08:05 AM · On: You Shoot you Lose
"...he sought his brother's eyes, searching for the reassurance that had always been there, even when he hadn't realized he needed it. It wasn't there now." Poor Sam! That broken life-line gave me the shivers. "And he finally knew just what it would take to break Dean Winchester." Oooohh! So ominous and chilling it almost took my breath away. I just stared at the words for the longest time contemplating all that they implied.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 10/01/10 07:40 AM · On: Hollow Heroes
Excellent chapter! Love and hate the evil cliffhanger! John's panic and despair were described so realistically that I found myself racing through each sentence just to get to the answer at the end (an answer that I knew would be bad news but there's always hope). I'm racing off to the next chapter.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 09/01/10 09:28 PM · On: Touch the Other Side
A fantastic chapter! I especially liked the end when John's concern for his sons drives him over the edge. Never piss off a parent. Obviously, that revenant never had children. :) "They were drawn to people, to the living but forever isolated from what they had once been, left watching greedily from the edges of the dark." What an eloquent explanation of the conundrum of being un-dead. It's so sad when John whispers to Mary that angels never were watching over them. And when he kisses his ring...heart-breaking!
Reviewer: IHeartSam (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 04:25 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
awesome fic, really well written and full of suspense- can't wait to start on the sequel now :) xx
Reviewer: IHeartSam (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 03:10 PM · On: Among the Dead
love the start-can't believe this lttle gem got past me!x
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/12/09 08:37 AM · On: Trying to Find Where You Belong
A wonderful chapter! I knew when Sam saw the flint of the Impala that Dean wouldn't be inside but I didn't expect it to have been trashed. Poor Baby! Now I want to know who could do that to such a sweet girl. The sprinklings of the caring, lonely father you ration out are so touching! After reading about the destruction the revenant bikers left behind, I understand why John always feels it's necessary to leave his boys. I like the paternal John Winchester that your story embraces. I'm eager to continue reading! You have an intriguing plot (or should I say plots?) and your descriptive words put me right in the middle of the action.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 11/12/09 05:04 PM · On: Among the Dead
I thought it was cute that John missed the days of tucking his boys in to bed and ruffling their hair then I read the part about Mary doing it to him and talking of their future---beautiful! I think every parent of a teen has turned on the car and nearly been deafened by the music on the radio. A wonderful little touch! As different as Dean's life is, he's still a teenager and some actions are just universal. Good to see he has some of the typical teen traits. How sad that at seventeen Dean had to be responsible for sheltering and feeding his younger brother. And I like that you alluded to what Sam really wanted to ask when he said, "is he coming back?" No matter how brave Dean is, that terror that their dad might be dead would turn even the most mature teen into a lost, frightened child.
Reviewer: mustang (Signed) · Date: 27/07/09 03:26 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
Very good story..Liked the way you wrote all 4 characters..Don't like the ending..lol..Glad theres another part to start reading.. Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Hope the next part, when it comes, makes you like this ending more. I never wanted these stories to be standalone - I guess I could've put the dreaded 'To Be Continued...' on the end! Glad you enjoyed it
Reviewer: lkapp (Signed) · Date: 28/02/09 08:09 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
I really liked this story. It made me cry. Especially the weechester stuff, when Dean thought Sam had been turned and was in the hospital. I'm looking forward to you finishing the sequel.
Author's Response: Thanks! This was a bit of a rollarcoaster to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it. The sequel is finished and being beta'd, so hopefully there wont be any major delays in posting and I hope you like 'Darkness' as much as this one!
Reviewer: youthere (Signed) · Date: 12/01/09 07:18 AM · On: I Tell To You My Story
A cliffie for an END?! Dude, your evilness reigns supreme. A preview? Yes, please. Duh. Actually, you're probably safer behind that rock until we get one :) A vet? Ouch, I guess that's National Insurance, Winchester style :)
Author's Response: was gonna put 'to be continued...' but i figured the screams would be deafening... preview coming up! and when i said rock, i meant more of a mountain. And hey! I know some very nice vets! ;) thanks hun - your support through this story has been nothing short of outstanding!
Reviewer: snchick12 (Signed) · Date: 11/01/09 12:25 AM · On: I Tell To You My Story
i can't believe you left dean like omg can't wait for the next one
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 09/01/09 02:02 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
AHHH!!!! NO! Don't leave it like THAT!!!! When are you posting the sequel????? Tonight's good. Really.
Author's Response: hehe - not tonight, sorry, but soon! *rubs hands together with glee* Thanks hun - and when are YOU posting?!
Reviewer: bia1007 (Signed) · Date: 09/01/09 01:43 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
A final chapter that literally takes your breath away!! Only knowing there will be a sequel does calm me a bit, what a ride! It's not over yet for them and definitely can't end this way for Dean, to see him so completely broken is terrible, but I know Sam won't give up, he will find a way throughout all this darkness and despair to reach his brother and bring him back again (he did it once, right?) and as the word is, dawning even ends the darkest night. Brilliant!! And I'd absolutely appreciate those snippets you talked about!
Author's Response: thanks! writing these stories has been something of a rollercoaster - i've just sent off the final version of the sequel to the beta's, but i've got at least two more lined up in this 'verse, so it's great to know you're enjoying it! (And have you seen the banners i posted? 'cause your scarily close to the sequel title there... lol) snippets coming up!
Reviewer: justannanow (Signed) · Date: 09/01/09 04:16 AM · On: I Tell To You My Story
Wait! You ended it there? What the hell? Nononononono, this can not be. Need more, like right the hell now.
Author's Response: patience is a virtue - besides, it's being beta'd - and trust me. you want it beta'd. but thanks! glad you're hooked!
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 09/01/09 01:41 AM · On: I Tell To You My Story
Well Geez! Please don't leave us hanging long with this terribly sad ending. Sam so sad and despondent over Dean. I hope Dean can snap out of it. He is so lost, I hope he doesn't give up. I'm biting my nails until the sequel!!
Author's Response: Ration yourself - half a nail a day! Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: CatzEye (Signed) · Date: 08/01/09 05:23 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
Wow! -- This was an excellent read -- scary and tense and emotional to just the right pitch...! Definitely looking forward to the sequel! Oh-- and snippets would be great:)-!
Reviewer: copycat666 (Signed) · Date: 08/01/09 03:11 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
this story was just so great and it made me very quit..that means it's engraved for all eternity ! You should receive a ribbon for this one !
Author's Response: well, here's hoping... ;) thanks, glad you enjoyed it!
Reviewer: pendays (Signed) · Date: 08/01/09 03:09 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
i cant wait for the next part!!!!
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 08/01/09 02:39 PM · On: I Tell To You My Story
YOU CANT LEAVE THAT THERE!!!!!! *rips out hair* - deep, cleansing breath, Tree... in...out... in ... out... Okay- I think I'll be alright... just hurry up and get that sequel going! I absolutely loved the way you wove what happened to Dean back in 1996 with the present... crafty... nice mix and it flowed so beautifully. Sammy's worry/greif were palpable... his silent mantra to his brother agonizing as he begs Dean to come back.... *sniffle* okay- *composes self * Are you writing yet??? LOL
Author's Response: *evil snigger* would i leave you there? really? well, yes, actually, though not for long. sequel needs a few tweaks, then its off to be beta'd... That final scene was really where this whole story came from - its an image that's been kicking around my head for a while and I finally found the story to go with it! Writing the past and present together was the idea that made it work, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! thanks for reading, and thanks for reviewing - seeing the 'boss-lady's' name on the reviews is an amazing kick! *rubs hands together with glee* now off to tweak and nag beta's...
Reviewer: youthere (Signed) · Date: 07/01/09 10:34 AM · On: You Shoot you Lose
Sam thought for a moment, slowly pulling himself up the wall to his feet. He remembered the short time they'd spent in this house, the late summer nights starting to cool as the season wound to a close and they explored the place. It didn't take long for him to recognise the shadowy room where he'd woken up in the memory; the basement had felt different to the rest of the house even then.- I love how you place this story, reading it feels like actually being there. Excellent update, can't wait for the next :)
Reviewer: iluvsprntrl (Signed) · Date: 05/01/09 10:57 AM · On: You Shoot you Lose
Amazing update! I loved it.
Author's Response: thanks!
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 04/01/09 01:52 PM · On: You Shoot you Lose
Great day! I had to hold my breath the whole time I was reading this chapter! Seems like they did break Dean. I wonder if they made him believe that it was Sam that died? I hope now that Sam can fix Dean. I can't wait to read the next chapter.I hope this isn't a death fic, that chapter note at the end really has me worried!
Author's Response: no, its not a death fic - i would've warned you! but that's not to say it isn't dark, and things are gonna get a whole lot worse for the boys before they get better... glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: bia1007 (Signed) · Date: 04/01/09 08:51 AM · On: You Shoot you Lose
No, how could you stop here, you are killing me, it can't end like this, not when Sam finally found his brother! The whole chapter is nothing but stunning, the way you write this makes you physically feel the terror and anguish but always too what makes this bond between Sam and Dean so strong, their unconditional affection for each other, complete trust and dedication and so I still have hope Dean is not broken beyond repair, cause his Sam is there and he won't let go of his brother. Can't wait to find out!!!
Author's Response: wow, *buhes* thank you so much - if i can make you feel something like that, then i know i gotta bed oing something right! Hope you like the last chapter...
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