Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 06/07/10 05:21 AM · On: Burning Inside
Ahh.... Serenity...
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 21/12/09 02:20 PM · On: Some Kind of Monster
You've got some really great mythology going here! Geeking out.....
Author's Response: / I worked really hard on the mythology. I have two folders worth of notes, and outlines for the main storyline that goes even deeper into the mythology.
And typos. The story has a lot of typos. I think I need to make sure I upload the "master" chapters from my LJ community...
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 20/12/09 12:02 AM · On: Burning Inside
Of COURSE I have to review the story! It's interesting, and pretty cool! I thought that her correcting the boys' latin was hilarious. I love the Circle of Enoch- VERY creepy. My grandparents were in Eastern Star, and my Dad was a Mason- I've attended some of the little ceremonies and couldn't help thinking of them as you were describing their activities.
Author's Response: I figured if anyone could make fun of the Latin, it would be Charlotte. And I'm glad it's interesting; I worked hard on the research and on making the Circle of Enoch suitably evil...
Though now I am re-reading it myself and have found numerous and embaressing typos. This is also the first SPN fanfic I had ever written, so I'm always tempted to go back and rewrite it but...it certainly shows my progression as a writer getting back into the swing of things. ;)
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 31/01/09 01:06 PM · On: Burning Inside
Rereading these, 'cos they're just too much fun. Caught the "Firefly" reference this time with the whole "This must be what going mad feels like." I absolutely love the look on Simon's face during that scene. In fact, I love Simon in that episode. Ah hell, I love Simon in every episode. People think I'm nuts, but Simon Tam is my favourite "Firefly" character. I know -- I'm a spaz. But who else, other than Dean Winchester, maybe, would be tactless enough to say, "That's assuming there's a head" with regard to reattaching Mal's ear? On a totally different note, saying "Christo" might well be the perfect way to call out a demon. Sort of like toasting Christ, no? "To Christ!" lol. This could definitely have gone in an e-mail, rather than a review. lol.
Author's Response: Simon is my favorite male character on the show. I am utterly fascinated by all of the women, though. River is my personal favorite character. <i>On a totally different note, saying "Christo" might well be the perfect way to call out a demon. Sort of like toasting Christ, no? "To Christ!" lol.</i> I hadn't thought about it that way. Not sure Charlotte would necessarily agree. Hmm... <i>This could definitely have gone in an e-mail, rather than a review.</i> It's all good. I sent you an e-mail today, actually... I won't belabor the conversation here. ;)
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 08/01/09 07:57 PM · On: Carry That Weight
So, I am now hooked! I couldn't read or even write anything else until I finished reading this! So I LOVE Charlie! She is a very well written character, multilayered and not a Mary Sue! Congrats! Then there is your AU which is totally intriguing! Very original universe you have put our boys in here! I like the whole idea of it...and that Dean would be an empath...it just seems so perfect to me, he really does seem to feel things in a way no one else can! My only question is what happened to get Dean out of that hospital if John didn't make that deal? Are we working on the assumption that Dean's injuries were less grave than what they ended up on the show? Oh and I love that you have worked in Missouri! She is an awesomely underused character! Great job...I will be checking out the other vignettes and the next story...but I must wait a bit as I have some writing and other things to do that I have been putting off! You sucked me into this! Actually, the beautiful image of Charlotte and Dean together in the Instructions on dancing that inticed me into checking this story out! Thanks for the great read! I look forward to what's to come! Gen
Author's Response: Wow, you have reduced me to one walking blush at this point. ;) Thank you so much for your kind words about Charlotte. She was the first OFC I created within the fandom and I worried a great deal as to whether or not she would work - especially the way I chose to reveal her character to the reader, which was basically the same way she revealed herself to the boys... The AU aspect is actually the result of some research I was doing for a story idea the summer between S1 and S2. I suspect it's actually some of the same source material used on the show, given that we both reference the Grigori (Azazel, for example) as bad guys. Making Dean an empath really worked for me, too. I actually pulled examples for my betas and they both agreed it was good. / To answer your question about Dean. I started writing this a couple of months prior to the S2 premiere, so I just went with a serious injury but one that obviously didn't require John's deal with the YED. So, um, I guess I didn't really deal with it. Missouri is my favorite female character on the show. I put her in stories whenever I can. Again, thank you so much for reading! I am thrilled that you're enjoying it so far, and hope the rest of the ride doesn't disappoint.
Reviewer: Renate (Signed) · Date: 14/12/08 09:26 PM · On: Carry That Weight
Excellent job! Your writing is wonderful and the characters have such depth. I like the length, thank you very much. It made for a monster read!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This is the first story I've written for Supernatural and it turned out being a bit more ambitious than I originally intended. I'm thrilled that the length worked for you - I hadn't originally intended a novel-length trilogy but that looks like where it's headed. And thank you so much for the feedback on the characters. I was particularly worried about the OCs, both primary and secondary, and hope that they worked for you. I am particularly fond of Ellie, myself. ;-P And, last though not least, thank you for your kind comments!
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 14/12/08 11:39 AM · On: Carry That Weight
So this is the end? Have you started working on Beneath the Hollow? And John knew all along that Dean was an empath, and encouraged him to bury it deep inside? *grumble grumble* That's so what he would have done if Dean did have powers. High five for including any kind of Beatles reference. Now I've got the "You Never Give Me Your Money/ Carry That Weight" medley in my head.
Author's Response: I have begun working on Beneath the Hollow but it's only two chapters in beyond the prologue... I do have some vignettes in this 'verse related to this story that I was hoping to post before I started posting BTH. I really tried to remain fair to John as a character. I believe he did the best he could under extraordinary circumstances and, while I don't agree with all of his methods, I can understand the behavior. I had to get the Beatles reference in there somewhere. ;) Thank you so much for staying along for the ride!
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 13/12/08 02:34 PM · On: Up Around the Bend
"I've been really tryin, baby. Tryin' to hold back this feelin' for so long! And if you feel like I feel baby -- come on! OW! Come on! Let's get it on...." *hums to self* 'bout time! Dean and Charlie finally just went for it (while not under the influence of succubus poison). I really, really hate the demon inside Sam. It's disgusting, sliding around his ribcage. Every time I read that description my skin hurts. Bleh! Awesome chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, as always! I did figure that it was, indeed, time for them to just go for it. Earlier than I had originally intended in the series, actually. I've unintentionally created something of a monster in that regard. ;-P And I'm not particularly fond of Shemhezai, myself - though it's good that its description creeps people out. Means I did my job right there.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 12/12/08 08:26 AM · On: Under Pressure
Ahh, thank GOD! The state you left Sam in in the last chapter was pretty flippin' dire straits. You're not allowed to do that anymore, I've decided. Even with stories you wrote ages ago. I'll be watching you. *gives stink-eye*
Author's Response: Um... I can't make any promises, even for stories that are coming. ;-P But I will say thank you for hanging in there with me through the story. I didn't realize how long it was going to be when I first started writing it - nor that it would engender vignettes and sequels. So I'm hoping you stay along for the ride on those as well.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 10/12/08 10:29 PM · On: Here Comes the Flood
Oh holy GOD! I feel like I'm going to puke now! The angst in this chapter, while writing it, must have had you twisted up in knots. Seriously well done. POOR FREAKIN' SAMMY!!!! FYI -- the buttons on the suspenders in Office Space were called "Flair."
Author's Response: As always, thank you! And also... Sorry?
This was the most difficult of all of the chapters to write but it was integral to the storyline as a whole, so... I didn't hold back with what needed to be said. And you're absolutely right about the Flair. That was one of those mistakes I didn't catch until a year after I finished the story. ;)
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 10/12/08 05:20 PM · On: Comfortably Numb
Aw, this chapter was just so sad. Poor Dean, being a dick on purpose to try to save Charlie from her own martyrdom. I also get the sinking feeling that he's falling for her a weensy bit. :)
Author's Response: This was a hard chapter to write. Not as hard as the next one, but hard enough. And you really don't expect me to respond to that sinking feeling, do you? ;-P
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 10/12/08 10:14 AM · On: Don't Turn Your Back
Dean Winchester screwed the pooch when it came to being friends with a chick. Hell, he screwed the chick. Ahahahaha! Too funny. Loved the Akira reference. Apparently they've redubbed it with different voice actors, and they pronounce all the names differently. It's weird. I liked it better when the dude who did Leonardo's voice from TMNT was Kanata. (don't know how to spell it, sorry). Great chapter. So both Sam and Dean are all blue and glowey on the inside. Very interesting... Can't wait to find out more about this little girl.
Author's Response: One does one's best. Dean gets all the good one-liners in his POV. ;) Thank you so much for the feedback on the chapter. I tried to put in cultural references that the boys would know. And, yep, they are all blue and glowey on the inside...
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 11:22 PM · On: The Baby Screams
Sad little king of a sad little hill... Ah,Firefly. Another great chapter. I wonder why you haven't been getting many reviews. It sort of baffles me. Maybe because these stories are kind of intense and dense (and by dense I mean thick in the literal sense, and not in the figurative sense), and require time and energy? lol. Loving it, though. :)
Author's Response: Well, in all fairness, it's a *long* story and wildly AU, which is not everyone's thing. ;-P And I am still thrilled that you are loving it so far. I hope the ending does not disappoint.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 10:33 PM · On: A World Without Heroes
Charlie either needs to kick his ass or jump his bones. lol. I'd pay to see both if there was oil of some kind involved. *wink* Mmmm... greased up Dean....
Author's Response: *heh* Any other response would be giving something away. ;)
Reviewer: d6l2j7 (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 07:55 PM · On: Comfortably Numb
This story totally rocks!!!! I really like the whole Sammy is the key to saving the universe. Dean is being his usual obnoxious self. Charlie really needs to kick his ass and call it a day. Seriously though I really love how the story is progressing. I can almost visualize myself being in the same room as the boys and Charlie. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! It's the first thing I wrote for SPN and it took on a life of its own - there's already a sequel and several smaller vignettes set in the 'verse. The next chapter will probably go up sometime today. ;)
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 05:45 PM · On: Some Kind of Monster
"The only thing scarier than the glances shooting between them was the thought that this was quickly leading to little Geek Emo babies." Ahahahaha! This one had me roaring. Awesome! Ah, yes, and Cibo Matto. Favourites of Joss Whedon and oft-time guests on Buffy.
Author's Response: This was actually one of the more amusing chapters to write, because Dean is so completely out of his element. Cibo Matto looms large in the legend that is Charlotte. ;-P Thanks so much for the feedback!
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 04:37 PM · On: Burning Inside
Ok, I got the"Serenity" reference right away this time (even without the River thing immediately after it). That was one of the best freakin' shows ever (next to Supernatural, of course). Great chapter! I love where you're taking this -- wherever that is! lol.
Author's Response: I adored Firefly. Sam/River is my crossover OTP, and I imagine I'll get around to posting that 'verse eventually. ;-P And thank you do much for your kind comments. I did worry a bit about this story because of the OCs (Charlotte is not the only one) and the fact that it is squarely AU. You've helped to alleviate my fears in that respect.
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 09/12/08 03:46 PM · On: Hot-Blooded
Are you caught up with season 4? Because the whole "fucked by an angel" comment is particularly funny. ;) I must be daft, but I completely missed the Firefly references (and I've practically got the entire series memorized).
Author's Response: *heh* I am caught up through Season Four. ;-P For better or worse, this is the first SPN fanfic I wrote - started it back in June of 2006 - and it's horribly AU. I used the same source material as Kripke, methinks, because I even pegged the name of the YED before the show announced it.
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