Reviewer: mizpah (Signed)
01/02/11 07:22 PM · On:
I had wondered how the storyteller knew what was said in the house - lol. Neat way of getting the situation resolved enough for the boys to do the salt and burn - having a third person for the ghost of Patricia to inhabit, and have her step in.
Poor girl though - she really got thrown in off the deep end, didn't she?
Great way of telling the story, hun. I really enjoyed it. Thank you.
And yes, I think Patricia's ghost might have been influenced a bit by the Winchester brothers and their bond, so different from the brothers she knew and loved.
Author's Response: Thank you! This was my first story, and I was SO nervous about it! The core story is actually based on an old West Virginia tale- I figured it was okay stealing from folklore. :)
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed)
20/09/10 06:51 PM · On:
What a neat story. I love that you told it as a ghost story told to a boy, who obviously has a disability. Sounds like cerebral palsy or something. Anyway, it's very intriguing and interesting and the little twist that the one that tells the story was actually involved was surprising and nice. Hugs, Vonnie
Author's Response: *grin* Thank you!! This was the first story I wrote, and I was really trying to blend what comes easily for me- telling a story, and what comes hard for me, which is WRITING the story. It all came together when I had a character to tell the story TO- and yes, it was CP. I am so glad you liked this! You just made my day!
Reviewer: Star (Signed)
12/08/10 01:49 PM · On:
I'd like to think that Patricia seeing the love there was between Dean and Sam is what caused her to stop that re-enactment but I guess we'll never know... Great story!
Author's Response: You may be right....she's seen two brother's hatred over the years, this time she saw what it could have been. Thank you for your review!
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed)
11/11/09 11:09 PM · On:
Nice one. I like the breezy, storytelling style of the narrator. A uniquely different outside view of one of the boys' hunts.
Author's Response: Thank you! It had been so long since I had tried to write anything, it was easier for me to try it as a storyteller. Someone telling the story came later, and made it work even better. I'm glad you liked it!
Reviewer: rahne (Signed)
25/01/09 09:39 PM · On:
Very nice. Storytelling style is very different, but I like the outside look at our heroes sometimes. And this was an interesting , tragic little ghost tale that worked beautifully. I'll be watching for more from you.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am so glad you liked it!
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed)
03/01/09 06:21 PM · On:
Wonderful story! Worth every star. I love the way you've written this. Very original and interesting. It made me want to know more about the storyteller. :)
Congratualtions with your first story. I can't imagine a better "midnight-read".
Great job hun. Cheers, Andi.
Author's Response: Oo! I made a midnight read! I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you!
Reviewer: JenaRey (Signed)
24/11/08 08:46 AM · On:
And here you were all worried, you big spazz. :) You did a fantastic job. The pacing is good, the details very nice. There are a few points where the transitions between the story and the David interactions could be smoothed, but for the most part those are really well timed to break up the story where it needs it for pacing. Not an easy skill. So yay!!!!
Author's Response: LOL! You found it! I was just sitting at my computer thinking I should send you the link. Thanks, sweetie!
Reviewer: justannanow (Signed)
18/11/08 02:49 PM · On:
Loved it. The plot, the narration, the ghosts, everything was perfect!
Author's Response: I am so glad you liked it! Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed)
18/11/08 09:37 AM · On:
this was AWESOME!!!!!!!!
I really like your style of writing and how well everything flowed-OUTSTANDING job!!!!!
Your vivid verbage and excellent sense of timing made it that much above and beyond the norm.
You definitely have the boys MO down.
you are a master writer!!!!
thank you for this !!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! You just made my day!
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed)
18/11/08 06:14 AM · On:
This was a great story, i loved the way you wrote it,just amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Midge (Signed)
18/11/08 05:58 AM · On:
That's a nice story, told in an interesting and unusual way. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed)
18/11/08 04:10 AM · On:
Well hello primrose!
Awesome storytelling! But then again, it's what you do, isn't it? I remember you from The Vaults. You did a great job here. Like listening to a real person telling a real story. I liked the angle... Like you actually told a true story! And that story around the actual one. Liking it big time!
Best line (coz it made me laugh!) "I stopped to drool." So what I'd have done, hahhahaaaaa. Go ask Cal about my drooling issue. She'll tell ya!
And isn't she a wonderful person? She showed me the banner for your story and I made a mental note to go and check the story out as soon as it was up. I gotta say: NO REGRETS! Keep 'em coming. Like your style. Very precise and down to the most important things. And, awh. Those boys are such loving brothers. I guess that's what really stopped the haunting!
All in all: I WANNA HEAR ANOTHER STORY, PLEASE!
Author's Response: Thank you. This was very scary to do..and very exciting too! I'm glad I had such good encouragement.
Reviewer: mustang (Signed)
18/11/08 01:28 AM · On:
That was a great ghost story. I liked how you wrote it..Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: copycat666 (Signed)
18/11/08 12:37 AM · On:
this is different but very good ! congratulations !
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thank you!