You seem to be having some technical difficulties.  Your "Characters" chapter is blank and your last two chapters are exactly the same.  Hope you can fix all of this as you still seem to be on track for a good story.

As a general rule, I refrain from commenting on incomplete stories, and as you have very little here as yet in terms of plot, I confess that I don't have much to say in any case. 

That said, however, I do wish to compliment  you on your handling of Sam and Dean. You have quite competently captured their tone, as well as the atmosphere of the show, generally.  Pretty impressive so far and I hope you can keep it up.

The hard part will be the flashbacks.  Weechester/Teenchester stories are tough because the characters are not yet the men they will become.  So you have to make them different, and yet still recognizable as Sam and Dean.  We have to see in the boys the men they will become but are not yet.  That takes skill, but the indications are you've got the talent.

Best of luck.

By the way, I have been to Iceland, and found it a fascinating and uniquely beautiful country. I really look forward to your incorporation of Icelandic lore into the story.  (Which I understand it involves elves and trolls if I remember correctly.) I bet that is something that even the great Mr. Kripke never thought of and it should be very interesting.

Again, keep up the good work and best of luck.  This, as I said, looks very promising. 

 

Author's Response: Thanks a lot. And yes, Icelandic lore involves mostly elves and trolls. Especially elves. Some places are actually forbidden to be disturbed by law because elves are believed to live there :)