Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 23/05/09 02:34 PM · On: Chapter 2
OMG you certainly had me going in the first chapter. I was so sure it Sam lying in the bed. Never ever occured to me that it was someone else, let alone Layla. Wonder what happened to her mother? I'm sure she was still alive at the end of the episode.
Author's Response: Yeah, Mrs Roarke was alive at the end of the epi - but the story needed Layla to be completely on her own. And you shoulda heard the screams when I sent off that first chaper to beta... I was looking over my shoulder until I sent her the second!
Reviewer: sam (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 2
Your welcome. A bit confusing to me, but it was still a clevaer stroy. Thank you.
Reviewer: sam (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 08:17 PM · On: Chapter 1
I'm asuming that the one in the hopis bed is Sammy and something went wrong.
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 22/07/08 12:55 AM · On: Chapter 2
Ok, let me confess something: i actually fell asleep between the first chapter and this one, cuz i was so tired and it was almost 2 in the morning that i thought, what the heck, let me sleep!! Having said that, i think it's a good move, and having Layla being the one there is horrible, although not nearly as horrible as having Sam there. and who would blame him?? Layla certainly hadn't, and i don't think she would begrudge him any way if she did. Great story! and yes, i think you might have scared at least a year off my lifespan. :)
Author's Response: oops, sorry! thanks for the review - tho' i hope you mean horrible in a good way? now get back to sleep!
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 21/07/08 11:08 AM · On: Chapter 1
Aww....it's a sad start!!! and Sam's the one lying there???? sounds like Sam...and i don't want it to be either of them!! Ok, i'm reading the next chapter now before i hyperventilate...
Author's Response: hmm.... Sam? Someone else? who knows... hyperventilating not allowed! hope you like the next chapter, thanks for reviewing
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/08 01:52 AM · On: Chapter 2
OMG - Nice twist! Very clever having Sam give the reader the fuller picture, with his take on events. This chapter had some amazing use of language, powerful, lyrical in places, loved;"brittle light, glittering in wrecked green eyes" and "clutching the wheel, like it was the only solid thing in a world turned fragile and unsteady." these and others like them just draw you in. Sam's "handling" of his brother was just amazing - wanting to be there but waiting on Dean to direct the way and allow that ever ellusive Winchester hug. The last paragraph was so touching, Dean finally leaning on Sam, and Sam being more than up to the task. Very SAD, BUT so very worth the read!!!!! Thank you.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review - thrilled that the suspense in the first chapter seems to be working - just hope I haven't scared anyone too much!
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/08 01:38 AM · On: Chapter 1
Wow - this is so moving - you want to comfort Dean, there is just so much guilt lying round him, I am intrigued as to who this could be!!!!! Your descriptions are vivid and actually just enforce the feelings of helplessness and grief he seems to be experiencing. Loved this "Someone else asked the question, used his lips, his breath to form the sound" - dark and true, like much of this first chapter - your empathy for that time just before you let go of someone is amazing. Onto next chapter - as I can't wait to see who this is.
Reviewer: maxbobabe (Signed) · Date: 19/07/08 08:11 PM · On: Chapter 1
Oh, man, that was haunting. The description of Dean's guilt was wonderful. Then seeing the scene was from Sam's POV was an excellent touch. Thanks for the story filler. Phyllis
Reviewer: youthere (Signed) · Date: 19/07/08 04:08 PM · On: Chapter 2
Oh, that was devious! (my favorite kind of twist :) )
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 19/07/08 07:40 AM · On: Chapter 2
That was beautifuly written, very sad.
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 19/07/08 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 2
OK. Uhm. I am still seeing through tears here, Cal. And I am glad you wrote this. Because I always wondered what had happened to Layla. And how Dean would react. He is so guilt-prone (dunno if that word exists, but it should be invented just for the two brothers), they both are. ...heart shuddered as he saw his brother’s shoulder’s jerk... And so did mine. The sight if Dean crying is worse than... than seeing him die. ...“I prayed, Sam. Just like I said I would. Just like I promised. But it didn’t work.”... Made me mentally shake my fist against the heavens. Why does he have to loose the tiny rest of his faith in the Good? In God. ...It was never your fault. It was mine.... Awh. Sammy. Don't. You had to do it. What would've happened if Dean had died? TV-Show cancelled. All those beautiful fanfiction stories never written. (Feeble attempt at gallows humour, hasn't worked for me.) ...the tears streaming down his cheeks merged with his brother’s to rain onto the rough, cheap tiles below them as the door clicked shut and he pulled his brother closer against him, let the sobs rip through them both in the dark... OMG. That is definitely the saddest and best I've ever read. I can (*sobs*) clearly picture them there. Tangled in each other, guilty feelings in both their souls. *sobs* Love the title as it so clearly connects to the episode and sums Dean's state up. Like the absence of Sam in chapter one: Makes you wonder if it is him. If you go back to it after reading them both (which I did) you can clearly feel how nothing else matters than her. Not even Sammy. Until she finally dies. Then he turns back to Sammy, reaches out to share his grief. Gawd. Tears still there. Just the thought of them hugging, sobbing. Hugs, Ilka
Author's Response: Wow, sure you liked it? all those tears? sorry! but thanks for the review hun - and i did like the gallows humour... and i'm glad you liked the title - spent as long trying to decide if it gave too much away as i did writing the story!
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 19/07/08 03:19 AM · On: Chapter 1
argh. Uuuuhuhuhaaah. That's too sad, Cal. I think I have something in both of my eyes. NO. Really. This is seriously angsty. And I can't wait to read on. Who is it in that bed??? Hugs and *wipes tears* snogs Ilka
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 18/07/08 05:14 PM · On: Chapter 2
Cal. Ah Layla. OK you got me! It's lovely Cal. Fills in a blank for me and fills it with a quiet, soft sweet sadness. You hide a wonderful depth within the shadows that you surround yourself with. Wonderful bev xx
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 18/07/08 05:01 PM · On: Chapter 1
Cal. It's still hauntingly sad and beautiful, and I am still desperate to know who and why? Going for chapter two. loveya babe Bev xx
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