Reviewer: rosie59 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/08 12:02 AM · On: Chapter 2
So far so good.
Reviewer: Silvertayl (Signed) · Date: 15/10/08 05:57 PM · On: Chapter 12
Please keep writing, don't make me beg.
Author's Response: Hm........
Reviewer: Silvertayl (Signed) · Date: 22/09/08 06:23 PM · On: Chapter 9
hurt dean and guilty Felicity, gotta love it.
Author's Response: And Sammy to the resue!!!
Reviewer: mvh37 (Signed) · Date: 18/09/08 05:18 PM · On: Chapter 8
Poor Dean; you're really putting him through the ringer! Please keep going, I'm looking forward to seeing Conrad get what's coming to him.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouragement!
Reviewer: Destra (Signed) · Date: 31/07/08 01:12 PM · On: Chapter 3
I'm enjoying it too MsOkieDokie (great name). Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yes, my name stems from the fact that I work in a Call Center and use that phase very very often and of course, my main man Dean W used it as well!!
Reviewer: Silvertayl (Signed) · Date: 31/07/08 02:39 AM · On: Chapter 1
I for one am enjoying your story, and I think Swellison was a bit harsh with her review of chapter one, she said Sam is a hunter and wouldn't fall asleep with the door open, well he is a hunter (durrr) but he is also human and we all get tired even the great Winchester brothers. I'd say it was obvious that the boys have been on an exhausting hunt or two or three and every word of such doesn't necesarily need to be written, it's up the individual reader to draw their own conclusions. Well done Ms Okie Dokie, keep up the good work. Silvertayl
Author's Response: Many thanks for the too kinds words of encouragement!!!
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 31/07/08 12:04 AM · On: Chapter 3
Ah, an encounter with Felicity and a spirit at the Conrad Mansion. The spirit won the first round, I think, with Sam, Dean and Felicity running back to the motel room to regroup. As Dean said, Felicity is feisty. Waiting for more. Sue
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 30/07/08 11:53 PM · On: Chapter 2
Hmm, well, this struck me 90% flirting and 10% story advancement. Unless you're introducing Danni for further appearances in the story? Sue
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 30/07/08 11:45 PM · On: Chapter 1
Well, I think you tried too hard to make this something more than the standard motel room opening scene. Unless he's sick or injured, Sam isn't going to be so exhausted that he collapses (on Dean's bed, no less) and falls asleep, leaving the door wide open for hours. Maybe I can see him dozing off for a few minutes, but most of the night? No way. He's a hunter, remember. Likewise, I don't buy Dean driving to the point of exhaustion, putting Sam and his baby at risk. He would've pulled over and found a motel room way before reaching that point. At least give a reason for them being exhausted - just finished a long hunt or a string of hunts, something. Or "Stupid wide open spaces. Why didn't you tell me Montana only has a cheap motel every 500 miles, Sammy?" Dean reacting to Sam's attempt to wake him up was totally believable. And the hunt sounds interesting. Sue
Author's Response: Thanks for reading......I think!
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 24/07/08 08:41 AM · On: Chapter 2
Great start to this story, can't wait for the further developments. Hugs, Vonnie
Author's Response: Many thanks for reading!
Reviewer: mtee (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 2
You can't escape the charm!!
Author's Response: Oh yes, the charm!! You look up charm in the dictionary and there is a picture of Dean Winchester!
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 2
Hi there! Nice start. I like the dialogue between the brothers, feels real. Interested to see where you are going with this. Mary x
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
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