Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 04/03/07 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 5
“You have just as much power to see what you need to – the power to help him and you run from it.” Loved that! “There’s always a choice,” Dean’s voice was getting fainter and Sam had to lean forward to catch the next part. “Always a choice…” “A choice about what?” Sam whispered. “Death,” Dean said, then seemed to sag a bit in the bed, finally giving in to oblivion. That broke my heart. Even more so when Dean realized that it was him who was going to go with Tessa. Sam suddenly realized Dean was counting. He saw him mouth six seven eight, then the verse changed and Dean began again at one. Sam sat down on the side of the bed, his back to Dean, and leaned his arms forward on his knees. He could see Brenna standing in the doorway, arms still crossed, face impassive. He felt the bed tremble as Dean’s body betrayed him. Sam dropped his head, his voice directed toward the ground. Yay! Dean counting rhythms to stay sane against the pain. I love this about your Dean. Other things I loved: Loved Sam trying to help Dean by putting his hands on his head and shoulder and concentrating. *smile* That was so great. Loved the seeking the bathroom scene as well. “What the hell?” Sam looked back over his shoulder at Dean’s comment. Dean was looking around the ruined room with wide eyes. “Dean, this is the third time you’ve seen this,” Sam said, spacing his words carefully. Poor, Dean. You know it’s been a rough go of things when you can’t remember a room you walked through three times. You taught me to fight, you taught me to survive, you taught me who I was and how to hold onto that, you fought for me, you killed for me, you resisted, you believed, you stayed… Sam’s introspection right there was awesome. “Look at that,” Dean said, a slight tremor betraying him only to Sam. “Turns out there is a reason to bring a knife to a gun fight.” Yes ma’am. Always keep a knife on that boy. Or else he’d feel “naked.” I loved this chapter! The brother moments were spot on. I can’t wait to see what happens at noon. This is so great, because Dean and Sam get to fight off humans. I always wanted to have a story like that. So hurry up with the next chapter!
Author's Response: Feeling naked is bad... being naked on the other hand... hmmm... ideas a-brewin'. :) Thanks for once again humbling me with your lengthy, detailed reviews. I look forward to them. A lot. :) It's such a treat to see what parts worked for you. I hope you enjoy the rest. I really look forward to what you think! :) PS Can't wait for your chapter 13... *rubs hands in anticipation* GS
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 04/03/07 08:26 PM · On: Chapter 5
Gaelic I cant even find the words to tell you how much I enjoyed this chapter - once again- you blew me away. I can only imgaine what it will be like when Jack gets there - I better rest up and take a deep breath now!!!! So till then - I'll be "right here waiting" - god I love Staind!!!!
Author's Response: I am a sucker for Staind... and that song has made me think of the Winchesters since "Shadow" last year... :) I'm glad you liked this chapter. Your reviews mean a lot to me. I hope you like the next parts -- I promise not to sneak-post next time. *wink* GS
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 01/03/07 08:52 PM · On: Chapter 4
Wow, this story has really captivated me! Good job! Keep going!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Ace! I'm so glad you like it. I hope the next parts work for you. Take care -- GS
Reviewer: Thru Terrys Eyes (Signed) · Date: 01/03/07 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 4
Great chapter Gaelic! I can see what an evil influence I am on everyone, people are puking in every story now. Very exciting! And your dialogue is is super sharp!
Author's Response: I added the puking just for you. Thanks for the kudos on the dialogue. I am glad it's working for you. :) And now I'm off to chew off my fingers because I am suffering from the "I know they're gonna hate the rest" paranoia... sigh...
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 28/02/07 10:16 PM · On: Chapter 4
You are seriously on a roll - I loved this chapter too! The emergence of Dean's memories from his time in a coma is a fantastic feature in the story, and I love the way you are exploring Dean's double standard when it comes to protecting Sam - but not letting Sam do the same for him. You have the dialogue between these very special brothers spot on -as usual. So, in short, you have made my day twice over. Firstly, I love this next installment (Dean's covered in bruises - what's not to love?) and secondly, I read in one of your author responses that the story of the brothers will keep you coming back for years. Wheeeee! I consider that a promise - and I'm planning to hold you to it! Oh, and by the way, having more than 6 chapters will never, ever be a problem. Many thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Wow -- you read my author responses... how funny. :) Well, at least now I know what I'm doing for the next several years. Hee. I'm glad you're enjoying the memories. If I do it right (I keep saying that in my responses... but I'm nervous every time I post) the memories will help Dean realize something important about himself. I hope it works for you. We'll have to see if it goes beyond 6 chapters. I had a very wise writer once tell me that all stories have a natural ending, so I'll just let the characters do their thing and they'll tell me when it's over... and then I'll just come back. :) Hope you like the next parts! GS
Author's Response: I meant -- you read my author responses to other reviews... that sounded funny above. I'll shut up now.
Reviewer: secret (Signed) · Date: 28/02/07 12:50 AM · On: Chapter 4
Wow! What an incredible read! I had been away for awhile...read througth to catch up and the next thing I know....I am at the end of chapter 4! Your story is very captivating and I am so enjoying the visualization that comes along with it. I am thoroughly hooked and like everyone else, I am anxiously waiting for the next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading! I'm glad you're enjoying it. Next part should be coming soon... GS
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 08:59 PM · On: Chapter 4
***poor Dean, so much angst*** Not as much music in this story to get him through. OK--I've read all four of your stories now...just can't seem to put them down. Anxiously awaiting the next chapter! I think I'm going to have to go back and read them in order this time. As it is, I keep scrolling back to pivitol points. Don't stop writing you have quite the talent.
Author's Response: Yeah, I've been bumming about the music, too, and working to figure out how to get it into the next parts -- nothing since the conversation in the kitchen seemed to lend itself to a good music moment. I'm so glad you're reading my stories! I'm seriously flattered. I hope you enjoy the re-read and that they stand up to the the test of familiarity. I hope to get more music in soon! GS
Reviewer: freyja529 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 07:40 PM · On: Chapter 4
I'm loving the flashbacks to IMTOD - it's always bothered me that Dean has no memory of that time and the way you've had it return in bits and pieces seems very real. The fire scene was so well done. I swear I could smell the smoke and feel the heat on my skin. The line about Dean's double standard was perfect, too. And now human "monsters" threatening Brenna while Dean's still recovering from the lingering effects of the wraith's attack and the fire...can't wait to read more! I also liked the conversation between Sam and Brenna when Sam says that just because she sees things in him doesn't mean she knows Dean. I've always found it interesting that the boys know each other so well and yet remain blinded to certain aspects of each other. And because Dean is not one to willingly open up, Brenna is a great tool for showing what's going on inside him without having him volunteer it; you manage to keep Dean true to character and yet still allow us a peek at the emotions under the surface. Well done, you. You get an extra slice of cake;)
Author's Response: An extra slice?! You are too kind. But I'll take it. ;) I've been waiting for this review all day. Thanks so much! I really hope I don't disappoint with the next parts. *wrings hands nervously* I'll just console myself with cake... GS
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 4
Wow! As always, a fabulous chapter. Keep flexing those authorial muscles - love the differing POVs. While I am about as patient as Dean, your chapters are always worth waiting for, especially for the details. I love how you are slowly bringing Dean's "coma" memories back and how he is paranoid about Sammy leaving again - all things I'm missing from the show.
Author's Response: I miss them from the show, too! I keep hoping Dean will remember something... just like I'm hoping that they'll have Sam remember more from the possession... but who knows. I'm just glad you like the way the story is unfolding. If the story entertains you, then I am happy. :) I hope you like the next parts! GS
Reviewer: Phoenix_Song778 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 12:40 PM · On: Chapter 4
Seriously, Tuesdays are becoming my favorite day of the week! The day I get my fix! It just keeps getting better and better! I knew Dean was going to get his stubborn self into trouble....and the mental image I had of Sam running through that burning church, screaming Dean's name...powerful stuff. I love how Dean is remembering bits and pieces of what happened in IMTOD...nice continuity....they should really do that on the show. Looking forward to next week already...hoping there will be more than 6 chapters.... ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this! *BIG grin* Now I really want the baby to go to sleep on time tonight so I can get working on Chapter 5! I'm so glad you're enjoying the repressed memories from IMTOD -- I hope that the end result that's planned works for you! And as I go, the characters keep trying to break out of my outline... so it may end up being more than six chapters after all... guess we'll see, huh? Thanks for reading and taking time to send me a review. :) GS
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 12:27 PM · On: Chapter 4
Good grief dude! I sure hope you fix up Dean soon - he's running out of blood - hahahaha! I gotta tell you- the sheer mental image of Dean as a bullrider- that will last me for days! Although- Sam would never come near the rodeo - all those damn clowns- hahaha! I will mark the calendar for next week - and head back to my own wokr for now- thanks for the wonderful diversion!
Author's Response: Fix him? But... but... he's so pretty when he's all wounded and stuff... oh, okay. I guess I'll fix him. At some point. ;) LOL -- I hadn't actually thought of Sam and the rodeo clowns! That's a good point. I was too focused on Dean's sexy bow-legs and trying to think of a plausible reason for his bruising... clowns. Hee. You're more than welcome for the diversion -- thank YOU for reading. Means the world to me. No really. It does. GS
Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/07 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 4
“Because I just need you to trust me on this without twenty minutes of exposition!” Sam yelled. “He went back to the church is hardly exposition, Sam,” Ha! I loved this "argument", with Sam and Brenna getting at each other over who knows Dean best. Sam was really defensive! *laugh* Which was great! Then Dean...*shakes head* Just had to go back. And his confusion over that memory! The odd memory was haunting him. Who was that woman? Why was he thinking of her now? Was Sam in trouble? Maybe it wasn’t a memory… maybe it was like one of Sam’s visions… but he’d be damned if he let Sam die a warriors death, honorable or not. Sam was not going to die. Not if he had anything to say about it. An then...You had me crying by the end of that scene...No seriously. I wanted to save him. Screaming at my screen got me some weird looks. And Sam! He saved Dean from a fire. How beautifully poetic! I was going to go with her -Guh! He's learning what happened in IMTOD? The double standard talk. So necessary! I love how Dean thought leaving a note justified everything. *shakes head* Them running from the police at the end was so great. And poor Brenna... Six chapters eh? Well here is to hoping that there's more than that. Awesome work!
Author's Response: Hee. You screamed at your screen. *laughs* I'm so glad you're enjoying this story! I really liked writing this chapter. I love that you saw the poetry of Sam saving Dean from the fire. And the bond and sacrifice between these brothers will keep me coming back for years to come...sigh. Brenna will play a bit of a necessary plot role coming up, but if I do it right, it will only serve to show the brothers a bit more about each other, and themselves. Here's hoping you enjoy the rest... Thanks so much for reading!! GS
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/07 02:58 PM · On: Chapter 3
i really enjoyed reading this chapter...love that you don't make sam seem so weak in comparision to dean...loved the ending where dean goes out on his own to "end it" great job...look forward to reading much more!!
Author's Response: Sam is always strong in his own right, but to me he really shines when Dean isn't 100%. I love writing their dynamic almost as much as watching it. :) Thanks for reading and for letting me know what you think! GS
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 3
First of all, I love the quote at the start of the chapter. It's so true. Great parallels between what John did and what Declan did - and Dean feeling guilty that he didn't save eiher of them? And I just know it's a mistake for Dean to go off on his own now - but I love that he left a note for Sam. Can't wait to see what happens next. Pleeease update soon. Being able to read 3 chapters at once has totally spoiled me. Many, many thanks - and again, welcome back!
Author's Response: Forgot to say thanks for the welcome back in your earlier review -- so thanks! :) I think that someone like Dean can't help but feel the burden of responsibility when someone else feels pain... it's part of what makes us love him so much! Hope you like chapter 4. GS
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 09:25 PM · On: Chapter 2
The two POVs are working well for me so far, I like the insight into relationship that you get from being inside both of their heads. The dialogue is excellent, I loved this bit from Sam "Oh for God's sake.... Brenna help my brother. Dean don't look at her eyes. I'm going to get our clothes" And I think Dean remembering bits and pieces from the hospital is brilliant. Can't wait to see what else he remembers! On to chapter 3. Yay!
Author's Response: I really wanted/want Dean to remember his time in the hospital at some point, so... I just decided to make up a place where he does and see what it does to him...
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 09:07 PM · On: Chapter 1
So, so, so happy to see you back! After just enduring the most miserable 3 weeks of computer-induced misery I have ever experienced, it was wonderful to finally get back online and see a new story from you. Loved this first chapter: Dean's not sleeping; Sam had John's voice in his pocket the whole time; Dean snarked all the way through the fight; Dean couldn't make Sam hear him but Brenna could. Loving it, as always. Going straight on to Chapter 2 now!
Author's Response: Hey -- it's you! I love your reviews. :) I'm really glad you're enjoying this one... AND that you left me chapter by chapter reviews! Chapter 4 should be posted tomorrow... hope you enjoy it! GS
Reviewer: Thru Terrys Eyes (Signed) · Date: 23/02/07 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 3
I just realized i hadn't read this. Bad me. Love the knife stuff as always. Love the last part especially! Nicely handled. Delicious....
Author's Response: You know I love to see your reviews whenever they get here. :) Glad you liked the last part. I liked writing it. Ahem.
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 08:03 PM · On: Chapter 3
Dude- so very freakin awesome here- sorry I didnt get by sooner to read this- but I assume you know where all my time has been spent lately. I promise to be better- cause once again- you have me snared!
Author's Response: Hey! It's you! So excited that you're reading. Seriously. And no worries on the when -- I know what you're up to. ;) I hope you like the rest -- and can't wait to see what you think! GS
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 07:41 PM · On: Chapter 3
Great Story! You have really captured Sam and Dean's personality through the dialogue. the recap/transitions work well. I really like the Brenna character even though I haven't read your other stories yet. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Wow -- thanks! I leaned a lot on "stuff" that happened in the other stories with Brenna and the boys for this one, so I'm thrilled to see that you like this one despite not having read those. :) Yay. Thanks for sticking with me and I hope you liked the next parts. GS
Reviewer: freyja529 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 04:55 PM · On: Chapter 3
This was my favorite chapter yet. From the opening quote (how perfect was that?!) to "you already belong to someone else" to The Scene (loved how you tweaked it to fit and you know what that line about him pinning her to the wall with his hips does to me -guh). I also loved the line about Sam figuring out how to be a person somewhere along the line but Dean questioning his own level of humanity. And the scene in the church was so vivid - I felt like I was there! When I read that Sam had landed next to a wrought-iron fence I was like, "Oh,no...surely she won't...Whoah! She did!" And now Dean's off to fight the good fight all by himself - this does not bode well. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: YAY! I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you are enjoying this. You of all people know how this gabs me, and I thank you for your support. I just sounded like a Bartles & James Wine Cooler commercial. I really hope you like the next parts. :) Cake.
Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 03:34 PM · On: Chapter 3
Sorry I didn't review until now. You must have snuck this one in last night. Well, I must say that if I did my usual cut and paste method...this review would be 2000 words long. *laugh* You packed a lot into this chapter and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Just the tragedy of Dean's pain and purpose makes me wish the world for him...you lay out his pain on all levels so beautifully. Mental and physical. As always, in love with all the Zeppelin and Brenna. That scene at the end...very well done. It spoke volumes about both the characters...but I think gave depth to Brenna and really established the role she plays in Dean's life. Also very sad and tragic. “Even if I wanted that… which I don’t… I know it’s not possible, Dean. You can never belong to me – you already belong to someone else.” True. Painfully true. Excellent character development this chapter, and great job teasing away layers in Dean's complexity. Loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this! I did sneak it in late last night. Once it gets beta'd I have no patience. Must. Post. Now. What I hope you see over the next three chapters is that Dean/Brenna's relationship helps Dean realize something about himself -- exactly what I don't want to say because if I do it right, hopefully you'll see. ;) If I don't, then I'll tell you. I'm so jazzed that you're enjoying this story. And except for being worried about YOUR time, I would never care how long your reviews are. :) Now... I'm sneaking off to see if you've posted chapter 12...
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 04:24 AM · On: Chapter 3
o man awesome chapter:D can't wait till the next...I like the whole "u belong to someone else" awww sammy and dean:D...it's so odd in like all other tv shows I'mm all for the love relationships....but this one....no way lol...i just want it to be the brothers and only them lol
Author's Response: My intent with the relationship between Dean and Brenna (other than allowing for some random fantasy writing) is to reveal more of Dean... so to speak. What he keeps hidden from even himself. I'm with you -- if they ever developed permanant relationships for either of the boys it would take something away from it all... Hope you continue to enjoy this story, though. :) GS
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/07 01:52 AM · On: Chapter 2
awesome job!! poor Dean!! you must really love him to torture him so much!! i look forward to reading more!!
Author's Response: You got it, sister. We only hurt the ones we love. But if I do it right (and that's a big IF), Dean will come out of all of this having learned something vital about himself that will help him keep his promise... Hope you enjoy what's to come! GS
Reviewer: Phoenix_Song778 (Signed) · Date: 20/02/07 11:46 PM · On: Chapter 3
Whew! What a ride! This chapter was so worth the wait. While I've never really been a fan of Declan, but I was saddened by his death...more on Brenna's behalf then anything else I think. I loved her line about how she could never have Dean because he belongs to someone else. Truer words were never spoken. And the whole Dean-Brenna interaction at the end...very tastefully and effectively done. Now Dean goes off to get himself in over his head...as usual :-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for sticking with me -- and you know I love the reviews. :) Declan's life was a lesson in misjudgement... his death will be a catalyst for Brenna. And in some ways for Dean as well. Hope you like what's to come. Three more chapters left. GS
Reviewer: NovembersGuest (Signed) · Date: 19/02/07 09:47 PM · On: Chapter 2
I can't wait to find out what Dean is afraid of, what he's hiding. Knowing you, it'll be something brilliant that'll make me clap my forehead and say, "Why didn't I see that before?!"
Author's Response: Oh, I don't know about brilliant... Dean's fears are multilayered, though... even he doesn't always know what it is he's afraid of (IMO). Part of it is revealed in chapter 3, but there are more layers to peel before Dean's heart is revealed... Thanks so much for reading and for posting your reviews.
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