Reviewer: calUK (Signed)
01/06/08 01:24 PM · On:
Jane, I've been waiting for this, and you sure as hell didn't disappoint! I love the way you just let the story tell itself, giving us hints of the angst to come without using a sledgehammer - it actually makes for a wonderfully tense read, as I'm left waiting for the other shoe to drop... And I can't wait! (Especially to see if the lovely motel room gets a Winchester make-over, think my views on pink and lace are about the same as Dean's!)
I've re sent the email, so hopefully you'll get it this time!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I'm so pleased it hasn't disappointed, let's hope you enjoy the rest.
As for the motel room, unfortunately it was drawn from reality, a charming little place I stayed at many years ago in Somerset. How scary is that, as my views of pink lace and nylon are about the same as yours and the boys!! Still makes my skin crawl at the thought!
Next chapter should be up soon.
Thanks again Cal
x Jane x
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed)
01/06/08 12:51 PM · On:
What can I say..I am SOOOOO proud of you.
It takes such courage to post that first story and this one is well worth posting. I love your vision and turn of phrase, and each chapter of this just gets better and better.
Can't wait to read the bits of this story you still have to send me, and can't wait to see what you come up with next.
What can I say... I'd never ever have got it done without you.
It's been an absolutely terrifying experience that I wouldn't have missed for the world. You and Bev have been so wonderfully supportive and encouraging, I still can't believe I've got a chapter posted up here and that I'm now replying to reviews...I've calmed down a bit since this morning and can now almost type normally again as my hands aren't shaking quite so much!
The banner rocks!! I love it.
Thank you for your lovely review and for all the wonderful betaing.
Thanks a million. Big hugs
x Jane x
Reviewer: bia1007 (Signed)
01/06/08 12:13 PM · On:
Wonderful start!!! I definitely won't miss the updates, great job!!
Thankyou for your kind word and for reviewing. Update to follow shortly.
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed)
01/06/08 08:47 AM · On:
Well, I for one, loved it. I think it's working just fine. Definitely looking forward to the rest of it!
Thank you for taking the time to read and review and for your kind words. Nest chapter should be up soon. I hope it keeps working!
Reviewer: cheri (Signed)
01/06/08 07:46 AM · On:
I think you did a great job-I really liked it.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm delighted that you liked it. Next chapter up soon. Thanks Jane
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed)
01/06/08 06:25 AM · On:
There's much talent swirling around the internet and you're one of them! Can't believe this is your first story ever, you got of to a brilliant start, really, really good!
Thank you so much for your lovely review and kind words. I had no idea how terrifying posting my first story would be. I'm delighted that you are enjoying it and hope the rest doesn't disappoint.
Next chapter up soon.
Thanks again. Jane
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed)
01/06/08 06:22 AM · On:
Dean jogging around in his boxers? Conspicuous is not the word I'd use to describe that!
Good first chapter, like the boys interactions. Looking forward to seeing where this goes... Possessed tumble dryer, perhaps?
Who would of thought Dean about town in his boxers would draw so many comments!! Oh I think I need that drool busket again!
Thank you so much for your kind words and for reading and reviewing. Mmmh! Possessed tumble dryer...now you've got me thinking!
Hope you enjoy, next chapter up soon.
Thanks again. Jane
Reviewer: sassafras224 (Signed)
01/06/08 06:15 AM · On:
Your first ever story? Seriously?? Wow. You're a wonderful writer. This reads very smoothly-- lots of detail, excellent characterization, and natural-sounding dialogue. Looking forward to the rest of it!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and your very kind words.
I have to thank my wonderful betas Birdie and Bulletbabe, they took off a lot of the rougher edges!!
I hope you enjoy the rest, Next chapter up soon.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed)
01/06/08 04:59 AM · On:
See told ya you needed to stop sailing the oceans looking for pirates and bloody well write!
Who'd have known when we met ya that day in your posh frock that you had sucha talent for inflicting delicious violence on our beautiful boy?
A fabulous story and a lovely girl!
Snogs Bev xx
I couldn't have done it without ya, matey (bit of pirate speak there!)! Thanks for the e mail/late night phonecall support line, especially when it all just disappeared on me!!
I told you the posh frock was just for show, then I guess you'd figured that after my three pints of Blackthorn!
'Delicious violence', that just sounds so delightfully wrong!!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, not to mention your wonderful betaing, calming me down and bullying me into it in the first place.
x Jane x
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed)
01/06/08 04:39 AM · On:
Hurt Dean? as in physically, mentally or both??? this chapter is very very interesting, promises to be a good read....can't wait!!!
Although, you know, you might just want to make Dean go around town in boxers...i'm sure a lot of people will appreciate that!! LOL
Hurt Dean? I'd have to go with both!
I'm pleased you're interested, I hope it won't disappoint.
Mmmh! Dean in his boxers, going for the coffee and donuts, very, very tempting, but just imagine if he spilt the coffee!! Besides I've had to lock that image away cause I just wasn't getting the story finished.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. Next chapter up soon. Jane
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed)
01/06/08 04:11 AM · On:
Oh, nearly forgot: Awesome banner. Lou is an artist isn't she?? Ilka
Pleased you like it, I'll let Louy know! She totally rocks!!
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed)
01/06/08 04:08 AM · On:
Well, well, well. Jane!
First one! GREAT. I am glad you found the courage 'cos this story is so worth being posted. And I say if those next chapters are ready put em out and keep em coming!!! This story has got it all: humour, emo, brotherly banter, self-loathing Dean, protective Dean, grumpy Sam....
Now over to my quoting obsession:
...Hell, I’ll even try to get Sammy’s spit stains off the window... Dean and his baby. Love it when he gets overprotective on her behalf.
Banter: I could really picture those two brothers having this banter. Heard their voices and saw their faces. LOVED it.
...‘Barbie Suite’... HILARIOUS!!! Dean in Barbie's suite. Like GI Joe wearing a wedding dress. Just the picture of him lying in the lacy bed, hahahahaha.
...Barbie’s big in all the Right Parts.... Oh, well. At least he seems to have taken the time looking at Barbie thoroughly enough to register that! Maybe he even played with her? NOPE, scratch that, my whole supernatural world is shaking and tipping on its axis, NO FRIGGIN WAY!!
...A shudder ran through him as he sucked in deep breaths, trying to stem the tide of emotion that threatened to engulf him.... aaww. Dean. Trying to stifle his grief. Must be real difficult in those girlie surroundings not to succumb to a chick flick moment.
...Red-rimmed eyes, stared back at him from sunken sockets and dark smudges betrayed his need for sleep..... Nice. You know, Jane. I like me a weary and hurt/angsty Dean. And that description fully answers to my needs.
...“Lemme take a look at your arm, Sam, how hard did you fall?”.... Big bro' mode in full operation! Even when he is weary he pulls up enough strength to look after Sammy.
...I’m thinking of re-enacting that old Levis’ advert in the laundry room.... OH. YES PLEASE. Hm, yummy. Hang on, right back. Gotta get my drooling bucket... Got it. OK, let's have a look at that scene. NO???, sniffle.
...his rock, his anchor, his protector.... SOBS. Damn, just after that promise of some real nice drooling session. Great. Well. The bucket will help to soak up my tears...
....all his usual defences disappeared... Never a good thing. Feeling of forebodings creeping up my spine. QUICK. Where is the next chapter??
God. A range of emotions coursing through me. Can't wait to read the next chappie. Bring it on, Jane!
Thank you for your wonderful review, your comments are divine. Please feel free to indulge your quoting obsession, I think I've just developed a reading my reviews (I still can't believe I can now say that) obsession.
I must admit Levis advert and Dean, let me share that drool bucket. I'm afraid the girlie surrounding may just be a little overwhelming for Dean and as for playing with Barbie. That is just wrong on soo many levels!!
Next chapter should be posted in a couple of days. Hope you enjoy and thanks again for the lovely review.
x Jane x
Reviewer: belinda75 (Signed)
01/06/08 02:44 AM · On:
I liked it a lot, now I'm intrigued...more? soon?
Ooh, I've got someone intrigued! Thanks for reading and reviewing. More on the way very soon. Hope you enjoy!
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed)
01/06/08 01:05 AM · On:
Nice, dense writing, great conversation between the boys. Arguing over who gets the first shower sounds so Wincherster-y, I wish this would show up on an actual episode.
And you've discovered one of the perks of writing SPN fanfic, plunking the boys in the most hideously themed motel room known to man, and then describing it in loving detail.
There's a great slice of life feel to this intro, with the boys tired from their latest exploits, and needing to do laundry.
Love Dean's crooning to the Impala and mustering his gameface for Sam. Can't wait to see the action unfold in the next chapter, I'm betting something's going down in the laundry room.
Thank you so much for your lovely review and compliments.
I'm pleased you found the motel room suitably hideaous, the terrifying truth is I've actually stayed in the real world equivalent - right down to the knitted dolly toilet roll cover!! Lovely place in Somerset - Scarred me for life!
You might just win your bet, on the laundry room, but maybe not what you'd quite expect. I hope it doesn't disappoint.
Thanks again Jane
Reviewer: Harlech (Signed)
01/06/08 12:20 AM · On:
Be prepared for moaning readers who always want longer chapters and quicker posts! (g)
Your opening chapter is full of Dean and Sam and whats makes them so realistic as modern day heroes. I am so looking forward to the rest of this story and thrilled that you've been brave enough to take the risks that posting entails.
Thank you for telling us how many chapters...too...
At the moment moaning readers who want more sound pretty cool!!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I thought it was about time the boys did a bit of laundry!! Next chapter up soon. Hope you enjoy!
Reviewer: red11 (Signed)
31/05/08 11:54 PM · On:
Awsome first Chapter. More soon Please.
Reviewer: iluvsprntrl (Signed)
31/05/08 11:38 PM · On:
i agree, really good first fic, looking forward to the next chap.
Thank you so much for your kind words. First fic - pretty terrifying but such a Buzz! Next chapter up soon.
Reviewer: blackcatswhiskers (Signed)
31/05/08 11:34 PM · On:
Janger, this is great. Really looking forward to seeing where it goes.
Thanks for looking in and R & R'ing. My first ever review, OMG, my hands are still shaking! Hope you like where it's headed, I'll be posting Ch 2 in a couple of days. I just signed your petition for the Auscon.