Reviewer: bhoney (Signed) · Date: 25/05/09 02:15 AM · On: Chapter 4
I've said it before, and I'll say it again--I LOVE this fic!!! It is definitely a favorite, and I can't wait to see you write another multi-chapter. You did a great job with the flashbacks in here and with building suspense, giving us oodles of hurt!Dean and worried!Sam, which is always appreciated. The characterization was great and the hurt/comfort was lovely. And it was well-written, too. Great job all around! :) Happy Birthday!!
Reviewer: PADavis (Signed) · Date: 15/04/09 06:56 PM · On: Chapter 4
I decided not to wait to see this on fanfic. Thanks for leading me here to read the last two chapters. Loved the carbon monoxide poisoning, questioning about suicide - and the dreams were great. Phoebe
Author's Response: Hey Phoebe, Thank you for the lovely review, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it enough to track it down over here. The CO was the perfect tool to loosen Dean's grip on his self control - dangerous stuff...but wonderful side-effects. lol The dreams and flashbacks were great fun to delve into, I always felt poor Dean never got a chance to deal with his dad's death properly in the show. Anyway, thank you again. Jane x
Reviewer: TuckerCat (Signed) · Date: 03/10/08 08:47 AM · On: Chapter 4
Very good. I believe you captured the boys very well. Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Hey TuckerCat, Sorry, I've only just found your review, so huge apologies for not getting back to you sooner. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement and for the sparkly stars. :) I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Reviewer: mustang (Signed) · Date: 05/09/08 03:22 AM · On: Chapter 4
that was a great story..You wrote it wonderfully..Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Hi Mustang, Thank you for reading, the lovely review and for the beautiful sparkly stars. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. x Jane x
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 27/06/08 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 4
For a first attempt this is stunning, in fact for any attempt it would be stunning. So nice to read a story where Dean is still in peril but its not the usual supernatural beings that are hurting him. Very original. Really looking forward to reading more from you. Mary x
Author's Response: Hi Mary, Thanks for reading I'm delighted that you enjoyed it. Poor Dean, it does seem that everything is out to get him! Thanks again for the review. x Jane x
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed) · Date: 17/06/08 11:17 PM · On: Chapter 4
I loved it!! At the end, when Dean's looking at the last photo of his dad.......brought tears to my eyes! Great job!! Keep writing....I'll be watching for more of your stories:)
Author's Response: Hi Saltnburnem (superb name!) Thank you for your kind words and lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Next story should be a little more Supernatural in nature! Thanks again, x Jane x
Reviewer: bia1007 (Signed) · Date: 13/06/08 04:17 PM · On: Chapter 4
Wonderful story and great final chapter!! Loved the way you covered this special relationship, awesome job! The dream scene in here was just grand and Dean looking at the photos so sad and touching, very special moments! Can't tell how much I enjoyed this and I hope there's a lot more to come. THANK YOU!
Author's Response: Hi Bia, Thank you so much for your very kind comments and for reading and reviewing. I'm delighted that you feel the dream/photo moments worked in this one. I was terrified people would feel Dean was a little too emotional but the CO is a depressant, so I felt he could afford to let go a little...lol Thank you for the lovely sparkly stars too! x Jane x
Reviewer: alena (Signed) · Date: 13/06/08 10:44 AM · On: Chapter 4
Hello there Jane- a great end to a great story! You've kept up the mixture of humour, quiet moments, complete angst and mental torture very well throughout this story. I liked the way you brought round Dean's memories of his father to a point of understanding. The balance of understanding, frustration and heartbreak between the brothers was very good. I couldn't stop the odd "something in my eye" with Dean feelngs of safety when Sam was near and then the absence and fear... Muriel was a great character as well- loved the Hunters Lodge and OH NO- rabid raccons after the boys' groceries and lurking in their room!!! Brilliant! Lovely story, but I'm sad it's finished- I'm certainly going to be looking out for your next story... All the best, Alison
Author's Response: Hi Alison, Yeah! I've actually finished my first story, we'll have to work on you now!! Thanks you for your very kind comments, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I had great fun writing it. I'm glad you felt Dean had reached a point of understanding with John, the poor darling had to go through the wringer to get there though! Sorry about the 'something in the eye' moments, Dean is so sweet when he's all vulnerable. I did write a little spoof ending where Muriel reveals herself as a Demon hell-bent on killing the boys right at the end, but that wasn't true, she's just a sweet little lecherous old lady. As for the racoons, i'd kinda promised myself that they would be in there somewhere - just in case Sterlings out there in need of a fright! I'm playing with a few ideas at the moment for the next one, but it may be a while! Speak soon and hope to see you before too long. x Jane x
Reviewer: pranami3 (Signed) · Date: 12/06/08 10:56 AM · On: Chapter 4
Oh WOW!!!! this was great. I lOVED it, and especially "one well-worn chopstick spun crazy cartwheels as it sailed out of the passenger side window and away into the night." ........ I cant stop laughing at that, It was very funny way of giving it back to sam....hahaha. Well Good job, Keep it up. It was a one awesome one but feel bad that it was so short and ended so soon. Waiting for more stories like these....... :)
Pranami
Author's Response: Hi Pranami, Thank you so much, I'm pleased you enjoyed the story, I'm afraid that chopstick was destined to fly out the window from the very beginning!! I just had to get Dean snarky enough to do it! Hopefully more stories to come before too long. Thank you for the lovely review and the shiny stars. x Jane x
Reviewer: Nilah (Signed) · Date: 12/06/08 01:11 AM · On: Chapter 1
This was great! I loved it. You managed to hold my attention straight through. Loved your description of the Barbie suite and the Hunters' Lodge. Hurt, out of it Dean deserves an extra thumbs up. Hope you have another story in the works.
Author's Response: Thank you so much Nilah, I'm delighted that you enjoyed it, I had a lovely time playing with the motel suites, the Barbie one was terrifyingly based on a real one I had stayed in once in Somerset, UK - scary huh!! I must admit I'm rather fond of Hurt Dean myself! Next story only in very early plot stages at the moment. Thank you again for the comments and reviews. x Jane x
Reviewer: Nilah (Signed) · Date: 12/06/08 12:20 AM · On: Chapter 1
You have me. I need to know what happens next. I think you’ve got a nice balance going with your descriptive pieces, and your plotting. You’ve also managed to emote Dean’s feelings par excellence.
Author's Response: Hi Nilah, Thank you for the lovely comments and for leaving a review. Hope you like what happens next!! x Jane x
Reviewer: blackcatswhiskers (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 02:56 PM · On: Chapter 4
Fabulous story, Jane. When's the next one coming up Rachel
Author's Response: Hey Rachel, How's it going 'down under'? Thank you so much for the kind words and all your reviews. No sign of the next one yet, but there's a few ideas floating around!! I'll drop you a line when I get started. Speak soon. x Jane x
Reviewer: bunnykins (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 01:03 PM · On: Chapter 4
Woh this is your first story, thats amazing. I really liked the concept of this and the feelings of the boys about their dad. I can't wright at all don't have that talent. You however do, keep writing. Great story thanks for posting.
Author's Response: Hiya Bunnykins, Thank you for your lovely comments and reviews. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the feelings for John angle. Poor Dean was so mixed up, I figured he needed a little time to deal with it all! Thank you again, x Jane x
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 12:50 PM · On: Chapter 4
Hi Janger, Sorry to see this story coming to an end, I thoroughly enjoyed it! Really great fic, good job! Hope to see a new story on this site soon!
Author's Response: Hey Zuimar, Thank you so much for your kind words of encouragement and for the reviews. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Thanks. x Jane x
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 4
good job you did here Jane, especially for a first one. Enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Hi Fredo, Thank you for your kind words and for reading and reviewing. x Jane x
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 04:41 AM · On: Chapter 4
FANTASTIC JANE You've done such a great job with this and it still amazes me that it's your first fic... It's quirky, sad, angsty, funny as hell in places and well plotted, and I for one can not WAIT to see what you come up with next... Great to see you in that authors box mate...lol
Author's Response: Hiya Louy, I still can't believe I'm up there in the J's!! Thank you for everything you've done to help me get this up here in the first place, I'd a never done it without you! I'm going to spoil myself rotten with loads of R & R'ing before I start on the next one - as you know I'll have to go into exile again! I should have a bit more time now as the household has, as of this evening, gone back to normal. Thank you so much for the lovely review and shiny stars!! I can't wait for the 29th!! See you then. x Jane x
Reviewer: red11 (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 01:50 AM · On: Chapter 4
Great ending to a great first story. Thanks for writing and sharing with us. Hope to see more stories by you in the near future.
Author's Response: Hi Red11, Thank you for your kind words and for reading and reviewing. x Jane x
Reviewer: amethyst (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 12:23 AM · On: Chapter 4
I love the way you wrote both boys, they sounded so natural. You did an amazing job of this and I will definately look for your work in future
Author's Response: Hey Amethyst, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and your very kind words. I'm delighted you felt the boys sounded natural. Thanks. x Jane x
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 11:26 PM · On: Chapter 4
You did a very very good job if this is your first fic! You managed to capture both boys' 'voices' very well, and even though the story is not really supernatural i think it's great!! and the whole Bitch, Jerk joke never gets old! LOL Dean leant forward, slipping Metallica into the tape deck, cranking up the volume settling back into position. “I don’t think so, Dude.” Sam shot him a quick glance, “Remember, ‘Driver picks the music…Shotgun shuts his cakehole!” Laughing as he flipped over to the radio searching for the most unDeanlike channel he could pick up. This payback to Dean is justified! i love it how you manage to insert some parts of eppys from the series into the story, kinda come in full circle. And making Sam say the same thing as his dad when Dean woke up, i think that's symbolic too. Both Sam and John are very much alike, even more so when it comes to responding to Dean getting hurt. hopefully you'll write more in future... :)
Author's Response: Hi Mymuseandi, Thank you so much for your kind words and reviews. Yeah, my first fic, the only writing I did before this was the school PFA newsletter - not too much chance to vent the hurt and angst!!...LOL I'm delighted you think the dialogue rang true, they are so much fun to write when they're ripping each other!! I guess my next one will have to be a little bit more Supernatural in nature!! Thank you again. x Jane x
Reviewer: tvbatina (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 11:13 PM · On: Chapter 4
I can't believe it's over! Loved the story - I'm a sucker for HurtDean. Hope you have more hurtDean fics to unload on us in the near future.
Author's Response: Hi Tvbatina, Thank you for your kind words and for the reviews. I'm a total sucker for Hurt Dean myself, just so long as we get him put back together again!! x Jane x
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 10:27 PM · On: Chapter 4
Very nicely done! The hospital scenes were convincingly detailed without seeming drawn-out, the hospital staff was written with believability in mind. You transitioned very nicely from Dean's dreams to being awake, great echo w/him missing Sam in his dream/memory, then missing Dad when he wakes up. I like that Muriel explained the room mix-up and Dean ending up disliking the Hunter's Lodge more than the palace of pink next door. Some great banter between the boys, and I love the continuity of the chopstick. I can just hear Sam's protests as it went sailing out the window. Wonderful first fic, have you started on the second? Sue
Author's Response: Hi Sue, Thank you for reading and for your very kind and encouraging comments and reviews. I am so pleased that you think the hospital scenes/staff worked, it's not my area of expertise so it's a relief to hear they were believable. I'm guessing you have a medical background? The banter was immense fun to write and that chopstick was always destined for an unhappy ending! Not started on the second yet, but there's a few ideas floating around my head! Thanks again x Jane x
Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 10:21 PM · On: Chapter 4
Jane, great job. you portrayed the boys perfectly. Renee
Author's Response: Hi Rbliss, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and your kind words. x Jane x
Reviewer: Rochelle (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 09:16 PM · On: Chapter 4
I can't believe this was your first fanfic. It was amazing - had me on the edge of my seat. I hope you will write more. I reallyreallyreally hope you will continue writing more. Your a natural :)
Author's Response: Hiya Rochelle, Thank you so much for reading and the reviews. I'm delighted that you enjoyed the story. I can't wait to write some more - just gotta find some time!! x Jane X
Reviewer: Rochelle (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 08:59 PM · On: Chapter 2
Oh no! Dean!!
Reviewer: Rochelle (Signed) · Date: 10/06/08 08:52 PM · On: Chapter 1
aw :)
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