Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 29/05/08 07:11 PM · On: 5 Months and 4 Days Later...
Good job! Interesting beginning chapter! I like the abrupt transition from Sam talking about Dean's death to him running out of the room after killing the therapist.
Author's Response: Thanks Shannon! The abrupt transtition was the beginning piece that started this whole fic off and which i expanded into.. :)
Reviewer: blackcatswhiskers (Signed) · Date: 29/05/08 05:02 PM · On: 5 Months and 4 Days Later...
Your drabble was really interesting (although I don't like Sam turning evil at the end), however I found it very difficult to read because it's not broken up into paragraphs and spaced out a bit.
It's a credit to how good your writing and ideas are that I actually continued reading past the first few lines. If it's tortuous to read, I usually don't stop reading. Why don't you re-submit it splitting it up into paragraphs. Rachel
Author's Response: Hey Rachel, I'm so sorry it formed into such a large paragraph, i absoltley despise reading fic that isn't broken down so i really appeciate you reading the story all the way through. Thanks again for the great review! I've now re submitted it :)
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