Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
Argh Louy - you're lucky I know what happens next or I'd be adding you to my 'list of people who need a good kicking for messing with Dean' right underneath Mr Kripke! Another excellent chapter. Loved big brother Dean mustering his game face one last time to try and make it easier on Sam. And the way he played with Sam's hair in the car as he spoke, it was so sweet, so Dean. And then we have distraught Sammy and worried Bobby but at least you won't leave them like it for the Summer, right? Right?? Good work. Kirsty x
Author's Response: LOL. Promise I won't be leaving them all Summer...hehehe. Thanks for this Kirsty and I know I keep harping on about it but I am so pleased you're casting an eye over this for me...you improve it so much, every time... Will have chap 6 for you real soo...if I can tempt my muse back that is...lol XXX Louy
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 25/05/08 06:08 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
As I just said on the IM, You evil, evil woman! Lou, honestly. You just can't leave your readers high and dry like that! (guess its the right expression... hm.)
on with the quotes. There so many today...
...cheesy view of what heaven was meant to be…just as he was getting ready to head in the opposite direction... Oh, I so feel for Dean here. And I really like the contrast of a beautiful morning doomed to end in an evening in hell-fire. Orange first and in the end. Always have colours in my head for places. (I know I'm insane, but at least I'm not evil!) Like England is yellow, Italy is terra cotta red...get the gist? ...his little shadow... owh, Sammy and Dean. My heart bled for the kids they used to be and the men they have grown into. ...Like everything in his life, even taking off a ring was a battle of wills... It truly never is the easy way for a Winchester. Agree a hundred percent. They have to have a little R&R in awhile. Maybe that's a note for a future challenge or story (*snatches up paper to quickly write down 'Vacation with Winchesters'*). .....finally the amulet from around his neck. In fact, anything that made him feel like him was hidden away inside that little box of living lies and false identities, and the irony wasn’t lost on him.... Yeah. Who is the man we all know and adore as Dean Winchester really? According to some hints I think he might be a vessel for the Endless or one of those creatures. But again, he is as unfathomable as those beings when he is just plain and “simple” Dean! That man is so complex... And the necklace. Well, if I were him, I'd keep it on... I know some bits about that little mystic thingy... *winks* ....pulled his brother away from the normal untainted man he had every right to be... All this self-loathing! Come on Dean! You saved him a million times over! Don't you dare blame yourself! Or... I'll.... I'll come and hit you! .... Toad.... palm rubbed the top of his thigh, lasciviously. ..... I knew there was something fishy about this guy. Demon, ha! Fits! Nasty turn of events for the girl though. Sorry for her. ...on a tightrope over a void, and it was terrifying... Uuuh. You just captured my worst fear! I am totally scared of heights – even more than of flying. Thus, this scene from David's dream is even worse!!! Love those dreams btw. Very poetical and multi-layered. Could write whole essays about them... ....like malachite or very dark jade.... yummy. Thanks for that. Just love his eyes.... incidentally, how many words for green are there in English? Might make a drabble out of that one... ...I don’t want you to remember me like this, Sammy, please... Awe, sniffle, stifling a sob. Big bro till the last second. Though I think he might also have wanted to keep Sam from seeing the terror in his heroic brother's pools of emerald green... ....Bobby .... need to look out for him, Sammy.... Atta boy! Love him, bless him. Selfless and caring. I wish I had a bro like him... or a boy-friend (Sorry Bunny, if you ever read this!). .....it really was Sam, sitting on that stone..... You made me jump at that. Like a very unexpected revelation in a movie. I literally JUMPED. Never had that before. And how cruel is that! To have Dean confronted with his brother's face... Gawd, what a terrific idea... ....naked feet .... did that for Bev, didn't ya? Always looking out for your friends. Awe, come let's give you a hug! ....Bobby? Why hasn’t he come out yet...? WHY HASN’T HE COME OUT YET, BOBBY?”.... I pictured this scene, this falling apart similar to the final episode. I could hear his voice. Silent the rising, thunderous and pleading at the same time. You ripped out my heart at that moment. EVIL! You know I'm so not a Sam-girl, but those two things, Sam's tears in the epi and your last few words, might have turned me around. Oh, it's torture... Well, Louy. I think this review is easily the longest I have written so far. A clear sign of how deeply touched and impressed I am by your work. Please, do us all two favours: One- update soon! Two- never even consider to stop writing! Loves ya, Ilka
Author's Response: Ilka, I don't know how you do it. You come all the way from Germany to meet us all in London, then you travel all the way back on the same day no less..must have been travelling for 72 hours straight and then you arrive home and spend another few hours writing review that's just inspire and encourage...Thank you so much for that. You are a unique and incredible person!XXX Louy
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 25/05/08 05:40 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
Lou. Love to hate Lomax, he's a shit! Love to love David, he's a doll! Heart breaking for Sam, and as to Dean being all brave and saying "I'm not afraid any more,Sammy." well all i can say is i've got a bit of something in my eye cause we Ghurkhas never cry do we?! Bev xx
Author's Response: OOOHHH I love a good bad guy don't you...and of course Mikey is one of the best, put's Lomax to shame actually... And OI, enough with the 'something in my eye' line or I'll use 'the brow'...consider yourself warned...lol...XX Louy
Reviewer: PropGal (Signed) · Date: 25/05/08 10:36 AM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
gorgeous. i love that you brought "when the lightening strikes" into this. it blends so well...and it was almost more heartbreaking to read from a pov outside of the boys'.
Author's Response: Thanks Anna, I'm so glad that bit worked, wanted to make sure it all fell into place so there was quite a bit of planning involved here, thanks for the great compliment, I really appreciate it. XXXLouy
Reviewer: PropGal (Signed) · Date: 25/05/08 09:57 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
how did i miss this last week? ah, Louy, thank god you're startin' rock the sequel. amazing chapter...again, totally hooked. i just love the way you write Bobby. And i couldn't be happier that David is making a reappearance. i'm so excited.
Author's Response: Yeah, had a lot of requests for the return of David, I think Bev has a crush!!!!! LOL, thanks Anna XX Louy
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 25/05/08 08:34 AM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
Wow, fabulous. I can't wait to see how this plays out. It's really bad when you wish a facfiction was how the show had actually played out - you know what I mean? Anyway, great story. I've enjoyed every word of it. I am fascinated to find out how all these characters come together and work through to the conclusion of this story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much...at the moment I have my fingers crossed that they DO all come together in a kind of conclusion...lol Thanks again my friend XX louy
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 24/05/08 10:04 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
excellent. Bobby is the master manipulator getting dean to walk on in.... I LOVE your chapter banners they are awesome!!!
Author's Response: He sure is, and thanks for the compliment about the banners, trying something a little different...lol Thanks for the review and the stars, you've made my day..XX Louy
Reviewer: Shade (Signed) · Date: 24/05/08 09:48 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
AAAAAHHH! "Losing my mind" is EXACTLY WHAT I'M DOING RIGHT NOW! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!
~Shade
P.S. Amazing chapter. Can't state it any better than Vanessa, so I won't. "Brilliantly poignant".
Author's Response: Thank you so much, what a great compliment...and I promise the updates will be regular. I'm working on chapter 6 right now, everything up to that point is ready so will post soon, I promise...XX Louy
Reviewer: amethyst (Signed) · Date: 24/05/08 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
AHHH! need an update in seven seconds? seven hours? please not seven lifetimes!
Author's Response: Hi amethyst, and thanks, I promise to update very soon, and it's a huge compliment to know you're enjoying this story, thanks. XX louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 24/05/08 05:11 PM · On: Chapter 3 Losing my mind
OMG. I started crying in the second paragraph and never stopped. Then eerily enough, just when Dean leaves to go down to the crossroads,, the song "Because You Loved Me" by Clay Aiken started playing, and listening to the words to that song while reading just made me cry harder. And at the last few lines, you leave me speechless with the sorrow. Brilliantly poignant.
Author's Response: As ever Ness, you seem to know exactly what to say to make me rush back to the laptop and start writing again, thanks so much and especially for the stars my friend. XX Louy
Reviewer: jensengal3 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/08 05:46 PM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
sigh.... What a glorious image you left with us. So touching. I love bobby in this! And Dean, writing the letters... so so sad. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Sarah
Author's Response: Thank you so much Sarah, I promise this story isn't going to be sad all the way through, not sure anyone could cope with that much sadness after the season finale! hehe, Thanks my friend XX Louy
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 21/05/08 05:02 AM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
The image of Sam being the protector is so sweet.....i love it when Sam gets protective...it's like seeing a different side of him, and eve though it's also kinda weird at the same time i'm glad that Dean allowed Sam to be protective, before he left him!
Author's Response: I'm guessing it may be as side of Sam that comes to the surface in season 4, just speculation though...lol Thanks for the great review and the stars mymuseandi, always lovely to hear from you. XX Louy
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 20/05/08 01:13 PM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
Louy, I don'tknow where to start. You always manage to reach out to my heart with your stories. This chapter has been no exception to this rule. Still hurting for the boys. Quotes and scenes: THe shower scene was absolutely sexy, babe. Feel I should take one too, cold though. Your description made me watche this bit in slowmotion, I could really see every detail, every tiny droplet running down his body... mmmmh.yummy. The quip between the boys was heartbreakingly funny, made me smile through watery eyes. The moth simile, Lou, that's so worth doing an essay for a literature course on, great idea! The letter to Sam. Lemme just say, after reading this and watching the finale I was in tears. Dean finally managed to voice his feelings... I wonder who the other letter is to. Bobby? ...duckbilled platypus of the human species... sill laughing, and I detest that man wholeheartedly! Weasle damn right! ...A pregnant pause gave birth to more silence... that your own idea? My gawd. You so freaking rock... *sinks below her desk, trying to hide her envious scowl* ....Sam as the big brother, the protector, the one laying on a mattress to not only offer solace but to put himself in between his brother and the big bad world.... Oh. Oh no. Look at them! *sobs* Lemme help 'em, life is a bitch! Damn fate! How sweet is that idea, Louy, Sam being the strong and protective one, Dean being able feel safe and loved... *sniffles* Thanks for sharing your wonderful story. Will read Lightning now. Have to read the bros thoughts and emotions... C ya and please update soon. Incidently, who's that british bloke? Intriguing man... Hugs, snogs Ilka
Author's Response: Ah, the british bloke...hehehe, had to be one of those in there somewhere...Thanks so much for this lovely review, your words are a huge inspiration my friend. Thank you so much. XXX Louy
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 20/05/08 04:09 AM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
Hi Louy, Well, you know how much I loves me a good shower scene, and that was a corker. But then, you were just relaxing my guard so you could score a direct hit with the angst cannon, weren’t you? Loved the brotherly exchange on the landing, as Sam exited the bathroom and Bobby’s observation of it just being ‘snark by numbers.’ And of course there was the letter: perfectly ‘Dean Winchester’ saying so much with a few, seemingly throwaway, words. So much of the emotion in the show isn’t obvious, there are few overt displays of affection, but the feeling is no less present because of that, and you capture this perfectly. A prime example of this is the scene with Dean curled up on the bed with Sam stretched out beside him, between him and everything else. The way you wrote this from Bobby’s pov, set the exact right tone, giving the needed distance and perspective to appreciate the implications without being battered over the head with it. Perfect. In case it wasn’t clear, I really enjoyed this chapter and I appreciate you inviting me to join in the fun. And the angst... Kirsty x
Author's Response: Ah yes the angst cannon, I know it well...hehehe. And I certainly have one or two of those in my arsenal. Thanks for the review my friend, but especially for all the work you're willing to put into this fic to help me improve it...you are one in a million! Thank you...XX Louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 19/05/08 04:20 PM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
You've seen this already in an email, but I felt the need to make my feelings on this awesome chapter public. Soooooo..... OMG! Louy, hun, I cannot even find words to describe how I feel about this chapter. The typical ones just don't seem to apply. "Poignant" seems too ordinary. I cried. You capture that bond between the boys beautifully and eloquently. And yet when that bond is imperiled by the foreshadowing of what may come, it doesn't break--it grows stronger. (((sigh))) One of the most beautiful things I've ever read was the scene where Bobby sees the boys curled up on the bed--Sam being the big brother/protector. Stuff like that has been done in different venues and in different ways, but yours is absolutely top of the line. That's a scene I'll carry in my head for a long time to come. (Sorry if I'm being redundant.)
Author's Response: Ness, you are wonderful. When you sent me this the first time, you reduced me to tears...in a good way (and if you tell anyone, I'll have to kill you cos I have this tough reputation to uphold...)So thank you so much my friend, your words mean the world...XX louy
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 19/05/08 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 2 About being sad
Lou. What can I say? You know how this whole chapter just moves me to tears. I think it is the finest piece of beautiful, raw, heartbreaking writing I have ever read and I am in awe of the talent that wrote it. I don't care how many times I read it it is always utterly compelling, elegant, restrained and finely crafted and you should be fiercely proud of it. I am proud of you for writing it. Love ya and you so owe me yet another box of tissues! bev xxx
Author's Response: Mate, all I can say is thank you so much for all the work you put into this story, it would never have been posted without you...Thanks my friend! XX Louy
Reviewer: jensengal3 (Signed) · Date: 15/05/08 02:39 PM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
ok so heres my review,ha sorry i didn't know it was weird to review before reading! Great start! Some of the lines and words you chose took my breath away! "When he didn’t feel the all encompassing need to memorise every line on his brother’s face, every gesture, every emotion however fleeting, because he was living under the very real threat of never seeing those things again." ....wow. I feel like you already know this story is great, and it puts me at ease when reading, knowing someone is in control. You're doing a wonderful job. I'm a complete amateur but i know good writing when i see it. Sarah
Author's Response: Not weird at all, just a huge compliment... ...and thank you for this review too. It's a fantastic feeling to know you have faith in this story and as far as 'knowing someone is in control' is concerned, that has to be one of the nicest reviews I've ever had! Thank you so much Sarah and I hope you continue to enjoy this one, I'm working on chapter six at the moment, so quite ahead of the game, will be posting the next chapter very soon... Thanks again my friend XXX Louy
Reviewer: jensengal3 (Signed) · Date: 13/05/08 02:19 PM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
Ok i still have to read it but i have to say YAY! the sequel!! Can't wait to follow this one too, Best of luck in writing it,if you dont already have it finished, you wont need it though!off i go to read! sarah
Author's Response: WOW...This is a first for me..I've NEVER had a review from someone who hasn't read the story yet..I'm clapping and jumping up and down as we speak...lol Can't wait to read what you think of it...and thanks for the vote of confidence, that means so much! XX Louy
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 13/05/08 06:30 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
Oh, this sounds freaking interesting...and it has a differrent feel to Dream, i think...Dream, for me, has a more dreamy feeling to it -don' t ask why- while this story's starting to feel more grounded.....just ignore me if you have no idea what i'm talking about...hopefully you'll update soon! and hope you had fun at the Asylum convention!
Author's Response: Yeah, I know what you mean. Dream was more abstract but this one is very much grounded in emotion because of what's going on with the deal and the way each of the boys and Bobby handles it. I'm very glad you picked up on that and hope you continue to enjoy this one...and Yeah, I had a blast..you must come next year!!!! It would be great to meet you there. XX Louy
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 12/05/08 11:12 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
very nice.
Author's Response: Thank very much Jackie, I appreciate that.
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 12/05/08 09:45 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
Hi Louy, Do you have any idea how much I worry that I'm sticking commas in the wrong place now? Never mind. A great start with wonderful descriptive (especially all those bunching muscles!) I am really looking forward to seeing this pan out. Good work, m'dear. Kirsty x
Author's Response: Kirsty, all I can say is thanks for improving this story no end, and I'll try to put in a whole load more bunching muscles for ya...lol XX Louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 12/05/08 06:27 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
This is a wonderful beginning to this sequel! The emotion you draw from a person is astounding. I mean, Dean's deal gets me going anyway, but your words illustrate the dread, the despair, the coming horror so eloquently. Even knowing that Bobby and Sam have that plan doesn't relieve the awful choking, tearful ache that takes up residence in my chest and throat as I read. I'm positive that this story is going to be extremely popular. Superb work, my friend.
Author's Response: Ness, thank you so much for these kind words, your reviews are always such an inspiration and a joy to read, much like your stories... Thanks my friend for the review and the rating. XX Louy
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 12/05/08 06:02 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
LouLou This is writing of the highest quality, it is lyrical, emotional, elegant, mature and it ties the reader to the soul and psyche of your characters so well that I feel in the moment with them. Hence, as you know, I spend large proprotions of my time either gasping for air, sobbing, or sighing with pleasure. I envy your skills and talent as a writer and aspire, one day, to have some of the qualities I see in this work. I am honoured to be somewhat involved in its being. Wonderful, bravo! Bev xx
Author's Response: Way more than 'somewhat involved' mate...and see if you can spot all the little naked feet littered throughout this story just for you...lol XXXXX Louy
Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 12/05/08 05:13 AM · On: Chapter 1 Long as it takes
Louy. I'm so glad you finally posted the sequel. You know I was desperate to find out about Sam's and Bobby's secret plan to save Dean from the pit. And I hoped you'd bring Burgess's grandson on again. YOU DID! Mind-reader that you are.
So I really enjoyed the first chapter. And what a lovely idea to put a banner on each chapter. Cool thinking. Kind of sets the mood for the chapter nicely.
So now, my omnipresent quotes:
....Singer psychology 101.... Hilarious. Have a bit of Bobby in my new chapter 13 too. Psychology however. That's hilarious.... ....Raw muscles rippled under hot skin, bunching and expanding with every effort, and with a lifetime of honing his fitness and stamina this body wasn’t about to give up any time soon.... Drooling. Thanks for that sexy image bobbing up and down in my mind, bullet. Awesome. ....too much they were hiding from Dean... Yeah. Shouldn't do that. Sam tends to do it a lot. Even on the show. Makes me feel uneasy. Such secrets are bound to come back and slash out at ya when you least expect it. Know what I mean? ....When he didn’t feel the all encompassing need to memorise every line on his brother’s face, every gesture, every emotion however fleeting, because he was living under the very real threat of never seeing those things again.... TEARS. Tears in the morning. On my day off. Is there a better (haha) way to start a day but with tears spilt on the boys behalf. I don't think so. ....“I trust you.”.... Oh, if that wasn't a moment of openness. A real moment. He shared an innermost feeling here. Quick, go check if demons are building a snowman in hell, 'cos I think, hell just froze over. No. Seriously Lou. How wonderful that Dean found a way to tell Bobby how much he means to him. And then the softest voice.... owh. I can really watch that scene in my head.
....a cold wind blowing behind his eyes... what an image. Cool writing, Lou. Gotta make a mental note never to forget that simile. Awesome.
....The crack in the younger man’s voice... Oh, poor Dean. He's definitely loosing it, ain't he? So close to tears, him and me in that particular moment. Told myself to suck it up, for cryin' out loud! After all it's JUST a story. No, didn't work but thanks for asking. Hang on. Gotta go check if there are any tissues left.
....added ingredients, rancid oil, beeswax and salt.... What an interesting idea. Salt in the paint. Yeah. Likin' it. Should send that to Kripke, Lou. He'll like it, too. The dreams..... Powerful images, very emotional and deeply complex. Poetic to some extent. Very impressed. *kneels down and kisses ground you walk on*
That's it. Great update again, Louy. Biding my time till next week...
Hugs & Snogs
Ilka/RC
PS Hope I'm still first reviewer but don't think so. Took too damned long to type.
PPS Had to re-edit my first review. Too many mistakes. So might not be first anymore. But I used to be!!!
Author's Response: Ilka, got to say your review left me breathless, and sooooo happy. Bev was gutted you beat her to the punch...lol I'm so stoked you liked this first chapter, especially as I'm admiring your work more and more with every chapter you post. Thanks so much my friend! XX Louy
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