Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/09/10 09:33 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
Oh, poor Dean - just like that, he was reset, having no idea what his sweet side had been up to while he'd been gone - LOL. Loved the teasing, especially about the boots. Ah, if only they hadn't been so far away, they could have gone back to the diner - the waitress bringing Dean another glass of milk would really have cinched things for him, wouldn't it? *chortles*.... Thanks, Bev. Sorry it took me so long to get to this. Jules
Author's Response: That waitress wouldn't know what had hit her would she? Thanks for reviewing Jules. Much appreciated. bev x
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/09/10 09:21 PM · On: Chapter 7. Vampires.
Mental note....don't read this while eating lunch - lol. Loved, loved, loved Sam's desperate shout galvanising hunter Dean when he started to fade back into sweet fuzzy Dean and lose his momentum against the vampire. And loved the trap that Dean laid for said vampire before charging forward to take on the leader and save his baby bro. Oh, and we're back to the pool! LOL! Poor, sweet befuddled Dean has returned after being bonked on his poor head again. He's gunna need the good painkillers! Fight scenes worked fine for me, Bev. Jules
Author's Response: Oh I'm missing my sweet sappy boy! I might have to bonk him on the noggin again so I can write him some more. bev x
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:59 PM · On: Chapter 6 Bobby.
Something tells me this isn't going to go well..... Hmm, can understand Bobby saying what he did, but can't help feeling a tiny bit miffed at him as well. I know they're just trying to protect Dean, but....*shrugs*.... Jules
Author's Response: Jules Thanks so much for reviewing each chapter, it's a lovely thing to do. bev xx
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:51 PM · On: Chapter 5 Discussions at the Diner.
Could feel Sam's reluctance to crush his delicate brother, and his own horror at reliving two of the most painful events of their lives. But Dean wanted to know - had to know, to be able to fight his way out of the fog that is wrapped around his mind. Full marks to Sam for handling it as well as he did. The laughter at the end was unexpected, especially since it looked like they were gearing up for one of their usual fights - lol. And the bitch at the finish gives me hope that Dean is returning. Even though I'm going to miss sweet, innocent Dean. Jules
Author's Response: Yeah when I started writing this one I imagined it would be exclusively light fluff but it turned a little bit darker. But then isn't that their life? bev xx
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:42 PM · On: Chapter 4 Alternative music and sweet potato fries!
Oh, poor, sweet, befuddled Dean! Fancy having a predatory waitress - LOL. It was a touching moment when Dean admitted that he was too unsure to answer Sam's mobile, worried that he wouldn't remember who was on the other end and being a bit embarrassed by his current condition. But I wonder if he might start to remember some more when he finally sees their old friend and surrogate father. Touching and a teeny bit sad too, when Sam asked Dean to call him bitch...*sniffle*... And goodness me, fresh veggies and milk? The inner Dean must be going crazy! LOL Jules
Author's Response: Haha, see I have a secret belief that Dean really loves brocolli! hahahahahaha Bev xx
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:33 PM · On: Chapter 3 Paris Hilton and A Motel Pool!
Hmm, it's coming back to Dean in dribs and drabs - more like habits than memories, though. Still, it's an improvement....even though he seems to have fallen in love with the psychedelic curtains. That was sweet how he got up in the middle of the night because things weren't right - waking Sam to swap beds. Jules
Author's Response: When I was writing this one I was talking a lot to a very dear friend who had just had a really bad head injury and he would ring me in the middle of the night to ask the strangest questions. It was tragic but funny at the same time. Some of Dean's behaviors here were his. bev xx
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:23 PM · On: Chapter 2 The World is Full Of Wonders!
So sad that he didn't remember the Impala, but his reaction to her was funny - and the Harley. I could hear his child-like enthusiasm - lol. And then the hunter emerged at the sight of the weapons cache - just in time to give his poor doctor the fright of his life! Thank heavens for Sam and the fatigue. Loved Sam's quick save, and Dean's snark at the end. Jules
Author's Response: Hiya Wouldn't you love a ride on that Harley? I have some biker friends and boy I love those shiny wheels! Bev xxx
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 06/09/10 09:15 PM · On: Chapter 1 A bang on the head!
Oh, dear - Dean's memory needs re-booting. This is going to be a hoot. I started reading this ages ago, but I lost track of it somehow. Came across it in my travels the other week and made a mental note to get back to it. Amazingly, I remembered! Loved Sam's confusion at his blank-slate brother's behaviour, the hug, the questions about his clothes - lol. And that was a really sweet line, actually, when Dean said he hadn't remembered Sam being his brother but he knew Sam was important. Awwwwww.........I feel all warm and fuzzy..... Reading on, Jules
Author's Response: Hiya Jules. I'm so pleased you're reading this one. I know it's not perfect but it was a story I really enjoyed writing and I have a soft spot for. I think sweet, sappy Dean is adorable, makes you wanna protect him doesn't it? Love Bev xx
Reviewer: Glitterbelle (Signed) · Date: 12/11/09 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
This was a great story. Well written and I read it all the way through today. I enjoyed reading sappy Dean, he was so sweet, its almost a shame that "Proper" Dean couldn't retain more of his innocence and lighter perspectives on the things around him. Sam was wonderful, looking after Dean and being so patient with him, I felt so bad for Sam and how he was feeling, having to tell Dean who they really were and what they really did. I can imagine that it wasn't pleasant for Sam to have to rob Dean's innocence again in a way and plunge him back into such a dark world again. I loved Dean's fight with the vampires at the end, the instinct to protect Sam and help Bobby winning out over his lack of memory was nice to read, I silently cheered to see that Dean was coming to the rescue. The banter at the end with Bobby and Sam teasing Dean was also very sweet too, poor Dean, he's not going to live some of his actions down for a while, if Sam can help it. And what a cool addition with Dean's horror in finding out he didn't rememberhis baby, very clever insight into Dean's mind there. Thanks so much for sharing this story. Gem x
Author's Response: Hey Gem. Oh I'm so glad you liked this one! I really enjoyed writing sweet sappy Dean and allowing him to be young and free for a little while. Hey I've just looked at your biog hun - you're a brit. Cool! Gonna send ya a pm hun and many thanks for another really lovely review. bev xx
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 15/06/09 04:13 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
A fabulous ending! Especially the little joke about Dean hugging everyone like a fan-fiction girl meeting her idol for the first time. Luuuuv it! I can picture Sam and Bobby's relentless teasing so vividly.
Author's Response: Hey Shannon. I'm so glad you read this one. it's still one of my favorites. I know its silly nonsense essentially but i think dopey Dean is so sweet! Oh and having been to Asylum (Britcon) just a few weeks ago and behaving totally like a fangirl it seems so relevant just now! heehee Thanks so much for reviewing. bev xxx
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 27/02/09 04:22 AM · On: Chapter 3 Paris Hilton and A Motel Pool!
Earl was indeed gross and deserves salting and burning for being mean to Dean...The story continues, lurching from hilariously funny, to poignantly sad. Very nice flashback. I'd like to add, Bailey is as lickable as ever!
Author's Response: haha Earl was coolio wasn't he? See i can sorta do flashbacks! And yeah creamy, dreamy Bailey! Bev xx
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 27/02/09 02:58 AM · On: Chapter 2 The World is Full Of Wonders!
Okay, let's have another go, last one got binned out and crashed the computer... Another delightful chapter Bev, poor, sweet, terrifyingly lethal Dean. It's testimony to his training and programming that it is all still there, intact, just below the surface. I loved his reaction to the Harley and the Impala, so sad he doesn't recognise his baby. Brilliant reaction to the gear in the trunk! Sam is being so wonderfully caring and protective, whilst enjoying the role reversal and the childlike innocence of his befuddled big bro. Loving it hunny, Thanks! Jane x
Author's Response: heehee hey dude! Isn't he sweet? I'm reading it myself as you review as its a long time since I wrote it and I have to say I like it! And Spammy-Fritter is coming across pretty well! Almost as creamy as Bailey! Bev xxx
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 26/02/09 01:20 PM · On: Chapter 1 A bang on the head!
Hey Bev, I've been dying to read this for ages, and I am soooo not disappointed. A gorgeous first chapter, with our boy getting increasingly delightful as you reveal the extent of his memory loss. It is lovely to see this innocent, incredulous, confused and totally enthusiastic version of Dean... Dean minus the cool. The dialogue is absolutely priceless, Sam's gentle prompting gradually revealing the huge gaps in his brother's memories. At least he knew Sam's name, if not his own or their surname. Dan doesn't have quite the same ring to it!!! Well, I'm off to the next one, hunny. Big hugs... Jane x
Author's Response: Yeah I'm so glad you're reading hunny. he is lovely like this isn't he? 'Dan' was for Kirsty...her hubby is Dan! Bev xx
Reviewer: Themis (Signed) · Date: 26/10/08 05:07 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
Very good one !!! thanx for the story :-)
Reviewer: Angelbird94 (Signed) · Date: 16/05/08 05:52 PM · On: Chapter 4 Alternative music and sweet potato fries!
i defidentally think Jensen would sing it right. your story is going well and i think this is probably the bit where sam starts to think dean has gone nuts right??? keep writing!!!
Author's Response: Hey Jen. Thanks for the sweet review. And yeah Jensen would so sing that song huh? And it's be purdy! Oh and yup, Sam does think Dean's a little nuts but god he's cute...oops sorry you're a Sammy girl I see! Bev xx
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 23/04/08 03:49 PM · On: Chapter 4 Alternative music and sweet potato fries!
What a wonderful chapter of sensitive and tender moments with plenty of humour thrown in to sway my emotional tears to those of the hiccupping variety. The whole idea of Dean waking early to routine clean weaponry without an iota of understanding of what they were for was so poignant in its irony. Such a complex man. Loved this reflection “Dean was the only person he knew who could trip out so totally on the smell of gun oil and powder residue.” So true! I love your ability to showcase the boys emotions through nuances and interactions with each other, your words here a beautiful examples of this “Sam bit back his earlier rather insensitive retort, seeing how dented Dean’s confidence really was” and “Embarrassed green eyes dipped to the table at Sam’s question.” You make the boys emotions come alive and leap out of the story. It’s like I’m looking into those embarrassed eyes and recognising it with Sam as well as feeling it with Dean. That whole scene with the boots on the wrong feet had me laughing my head off!! But behind our laughs is sadness seeing a man who’s naturally in such control and so independent struggling with everyday things. “They’re on the wrong feet, Bro!” I just KNOW Sam’s gunna pay out big on that one!! My heart broke for Dean when he you revealed his reluctance to answer the phone was about his fear of not recognising the caller. Your description of Bobby’s concern was gorgeous, we so love this man. This imagery put a lump the size of a football in my throat “Sam met his brother’s sad eyes and saw a regretful lack of recognition for Bobby there. He nodded his understanding” *reaching for tissue” And Dean automatically and simply assuming Sam is the driver!?! Oh boy, our Dean REALLY is out of it!! Are you finished with shocking surprises yet Birdie?? Country music!! Not just in the Impala but Dean knowing and singing every word!?! He’s gunna spew when his memory returns!! But seriously, you couldn’t have picked a more appropriate song. Just reading those lyrics with our boys in my head was an emotional experience. Great work, loved the scene, loved the music choice. And I have to comment on this one - “Mullet rock? You are kidding me? Don’t I have any taste, Sam?” Ouch!! Watch it Bev, them’s fighting words!!! You absolutely ripped my heart out with your bitch-jerk scene. Sam’s need for brobonding and a connection with his brother and Dean’s confusion and lack of understanding at something so intimate and personal that is just between them and no one else in the world was stunning – it was the ultimate in showing the boys ‘lost’ and to read of Sam’s pain was so sad. Awesome thinking, awesome writing. Dean’s totally uncharacteristic reaction to the flirty waitress was hilarious but again a sad reminder that we are grieving for the real Dean. His shyness and inability to handle a situation he would normally relish was pretty cute. And Bev “full teeth and tits showstopper”!!!!! What a freaking riot!!! And here I sit gob-smacked with Sam!! Milk?! No fries!?! Green vegetables?!?! No way!! This was a total hoot - “You should have more respect for your digestive system, that’s stuff’s full of cholesterol and saturated mono tri glyceride doodahs!” I cacked myself with the picture of both boys expressions you planted in my mind. Poor Sam left to eat the glyceride doodahs, that’s brotherly love for sure. Loved your whole diner scene to bits!! So now Dean wants to know what they do? Brace yourself Sam! Brilliant chapter Birdie, great work!
Author's Response: Petra. I am humbled and delighted and honoured by your ever thoughtful and kind words. Your reviews should be bottled and given out at self esteem clinics cause the elixir that is a cookie review is a heady and restorative brew! Thank you (too little a sentiment) but sincerely meant!  Bev xxxxxx
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 22/04/08 08:02 AM · On: Chapter 3 Paris Hilton and A Motel Pool!
Both boys were just so darn cute in this chapter. Dean’s situation is peeling layers off each of them to reveal a glimpse of when their guard is forced down. You write Dean’s innocence with such honesty, we see him as he was before the fire and what his childhood may have looked like after. Love Sam watching out for his brother, you write the compassion we knew is an innate part of this awesome little brother so well. Amongst my grins at Dean’s behaviour and comments, your words of insight grabbed my attention. This one got to me big time - “The lump returned to Sam’s throat as he savoured his shaky brother’s trust in him…” Lovely, you captured the moment precisely. And Dean’s disappearing act? “Oh Crap!” I’m with Sam! Another insight which packed as much a wallop for your readers as it did for Sam –“The young hunter felt the rising panic that he realised Dean must have felt every time he’d been left with the responsibility for his baby brother…” I think we all panicked with Sam here! You got us into Sam’s head, I felt it all. And I really wanted Sam to smack Earl one with this insult “You with Einstein here?” You raised all our Winchester hackles here Birdie! Can I tell you that description of Earl spitting -EEOUUW!!! I wrinkled my nose with the boys, such an icky visual! I absolutely LOVED this – “Sam nodded to the odious man, stepping protectively close to his brother, as Dean smiled in relief” Just beautiful, Sam’s subtle threat and Dean’s understanding that he would be safe, you let the boys bond shine through to this slimeball. “Paris Hilton” gave me a giggle as did Dean’s innocent “Well, maybe he’s got a point? What is my name again, Sam?” although it made my heart beat a bit faster too. And Sam’s arm around Dean all the way back to their room *sigh* such a nice touch, you nailed Sam here. Loved your little subtle reminders that Dean is still Dean. This one was pretty cool – “Dean snorted giving Sam a look that was pure “Dean”, and said “you’re a shithead!, without actually saying the words” hee hee! And “You’re Samuel Winchester, my freaking ginormous baby brother!” snark as well as wiseass, loved it! Thanks for the reassurance that our Dean is still in there. The whole ‘pool’ conversation had me in stitches! You drove Sammy crazy! You drove me crazy! You are truly the Queen of analogy and weaving words, loved this “Sam’s voice raised an octave as the surreal conversation clogged up his logic gland making it itch” Perfect! And that Dean’s reaction to that room!! If ever there was a line to show exactly how big that bang on the head was – “I like it, Sam, the patterns are sort of …soothing!” - this is it!! Are you kidding me!?! “Yeah, Dean, picked it right outta ‘Better Homes and Gardens’ recommended section!” Ooo Sam snark! Freaking hilarious! Your description of Dean asleep on the bed, relaxed, young, innocent was absolutely breathtaking. I stared with Sam. So different without that nervous, alert edge that being a hunter and a big brother 24/7 imposes upon him. Sam’s realisation just jumped out the page. Your writing to describe this whole scene was stunning. This paragraph a work of art -“He seemed smaller somehow as he lay there, his lithe strong body utterly relaxed, and Sam was shocked to suddenly realise that normally even in sleep, Dean did not really relax. There was always a tension about him, an alertness or wariness as if he were waiting for some danger to manifest, some horror to strike.” Fan-freaking-tastic! Your description of the choice of beds was incredible. Sam’s level of discomfort that it was out of the ordinary, Dean’s instinctive understanding that something was wrong and his compulsion to change, Dean intuitively knowing his knife was missing and relaxing with it in his grasp, was just so Winchester - you put a knot in my stomach and tears in my eyes. Sam’s need to connect to his brother and your depiction of his emotional reaction was so powerful. I sat here stunned, you made me catch my breath. But for me the scene stealer of this whole chapter was Sam’s flashback. Not because it was a flashback (although that was spectacular in itself) but the fact that Sam’s memory of such a significant event in their lives together was triggered by that familiar jacket that is so integral to his big brothers identity. That whole scene left me speechless…but you know when I review that doesn’t last for long! You built the tension of the hunt, the fight, the emotions (the boys and mine!) to a crescendo. The picture you painted of these brothers, one hurt and protecting, one terrified and sobbing, huddled together in that jacket waiting for their Dad until they fell asleep – is it any wonder I couldn’t breath! It must have broken John’s heart to find his sons like that. And then you drop that line that finished me off, Sam echoing his brothers sentiments from so long ago - “Love ya Dean. I’m proud that you are my brother!” *little sob* This is a phenomenal fic – the explicit funny premise that has me giggling but with the hard hitting implicit emotional thread that steals my breath. This was a dynamic instalment. Congratulations Birdie on a great piece of work, I am in the palm of your hand once again.
Author's Response: Petra.  I've died and gone to heaven! This was, I think, my fav chapter so to have you say these words is just totally and utterly wonderful. Love ya Cookie thank you so much Bev xxxx
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 19/04/08 08:17 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
“True as my ass is sitting on this fine leather, Dean. You have been hugging everyone you came across with the enthusiasm of a fan-fiction girl meeting her idol.” Hahahahaha.....and we all know how enthusiastic a fanfic girl can be!!!! ah well....it's been a tremendously fun ride for this story...all the tear-inducing humour, the hysterical pool jokes, and of course the role reversal that the boys went through... i love this story...i only wish that sweet Dean would be around for much longer...although i'm relieved the old Dean is back! Sam started and followed Dean’s wide green eyes down his long leg to his foot and the boot that Sam was carefully tying the laces of. Sam smiled sheepishly and dropped his hands as Dean pulled his foot further back towards himself, possessively reclaiming the laces and the task of dressing himself. This is so sweet and funny...Sam just does things automatically.....*wipes tears from eyes* and a vision of young Dean tying up Sam's laces when he was younger flashed through my mind.... “I did remember my baby, didn’t I?” Dean kept his voice low so his baby would not overhear, as he asked the question that to him was tantamount to heresy. Aww.....don't worry Dean we didn't forget..... :)
Author's Response: Lyn. Heehee, well we fanfic girls can be enthusiastic eh! Thanks for being a lovely and loyal reviewer Lyn i have really loved you comments and youhave cheered my day with each review. Very much hope to talk to you via future stories or give me a buzz via messenger or the contact box if Singapore ever gets lonely! bev xxxx
Reviewer: beth9874 (Signed) · Date: 19/04/08 10:40 AM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
'with the enthusiasm of a fan-fiction girl meeting her idol'<-- made me luagh out loud. well done it is a good story shame it had to end =[
Author's Response: Hey hun. Funny, i wondered for ages whether to put that line in as i thought it might give offence and it's something a few people have commented on! Glad yoy liked it and many thanks for reviewing bev xx
Reviewer: Winchester_Warriors (Signed) · Date: 19/04/08 12:00 AM · On: Chapter 1 A bang on the head!
*delurks* April here. I usually review only at the end of stories. This one, birdie, was fabulous! I absolutely loved it! And while I too will miss sappy Dean, I'm glad things will be back to normal. It'll be less stressful for them, ironically enough. :D Thanks for the wonderful story! It really made my day! *lurks*
Author's Response: Hey April. How cool two warriors for the price of one! So hi to Kelly too. Fantastic name! I am real pleased you liked it as I had a real blast writing it. No way I could leave him all vulnerable tho, so yup he had to get back to his usual and adorable self. big thanks for reviewing and hope to hear from you again maybe. bev xxx
Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 18/04/08 10:47 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
Bev, i am sad that this story has to end. i was loving Dean like this. best line for me came from Bobby "Are you two boys gonna spend all night playing pet the Impala or are we gonna go eat?" Too Funny. so something he would say to both of them. you captured each character perfectly in this story. Dean getting his memory back and having Sam and Bobby remind him of past days was great his shock or horror at being other than himself was expressed through great words that had me laughing and picturing his facial features as he was saying these words you had written. this kind of an episode would be hilarious to watch Eric Kripke and his writers need to buy some of these stories and film them. You are still number 1!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Renee
Author's Response: Renee. Awh gee shucks hunny you are just too kind. Dean was just sweet as candy like this wasn't he? and it has been a great joy to write. Oh and any time you wanna let Kripke know your thought is fine with me! Haha Hope to see you on future stories and you are a sweetheart for your fab reviews. bev xx
Reviewer: PropGal (Signed) · Date: 18/04/08 08:35 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
A fitting ending, my dear. It's just as sweet to watch Dean cringe while Sam and Bobby rib him as it was to watch him be free in earlier chapters.
Author's Response: annA. Heehee I can see you are a true Dean girl if you enjoy his sweet torment as much as his sappiness! thanks for reviewing hunny, reviews are like the warm embrace of a tall, rugged Winchester! bev xx
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 18/04/08 08:16 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
Wow, this is a great ending to your 'let's scramble Dean's brains' story. Part of me wishes that Sam had joined Dean in singing the song, in understated Winchester harmony. Sue
Author's Response: Hey Sue. Oh I'm glad the ending worked out for ya, did think about Sam joining in but seeing as it was a bit of a mystery how Dean knew the words thought both of 'em might be a push! Many thanks for your time to review much appreciated. bev xx
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 18/04/08 05:45 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
lovely ending to a great story.but i'l miss sappy dean.
Author's Response: Lindsay. Thanks hun and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I loved writing Dean this way and I'll miss him too. Thanks so much for reviewing and I hope to maybe see you on future stories. bev xx
Reviewer: gater91 (Signed) · Date: 18/04/08 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did ya get a bop on the head or something?
great job! i loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks Gater and i loved it that you came to review. Your a hunny! bev xx
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