Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 05:36 PM · On: Chapter 4 The fear that controls us
Beautiful. I can't wait to see what the plan is but this hunt is taking us through beautifully. You have season 3 Dean and Sam perfectly. Thanks for a great read!
Author's Response: Aha, the plan will be revealed, well mostly, in the next chapter although as usual not everything goes quite as planned...can't say anything else or I'll ruin it for you...lol Thanks for the great review lostatc X Louy
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 05:32 PM · On: Chapter 4 The fear that controls us
Thanks for another great chapter! Brett Hendry is a real class act! Lovely character. I tend to agree with Dean on this one. Now they just have to save their own butts and get that tire iron.
Author's Response: Y'know I actually toned him right down, didn't want to offend anyone but also wanted to express what a nast piece of work he was, much like Sam's target at the end of HOTH, so I'm pleased it worked for you. Thanks for the great review Shannon X Louy
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 05:23 PM · On: Chapter 4 The fear that controls us
You know, just typed my review to this chapter and realized login had timed out, oh well, Sheriff Earl's on the case so I'm sure all is saved! - lol! Nice humor image in the midst of the macabe, nasty work form those birds. Poor Dean, finally deciding he doesn't deserve to go to hell and then deciding that doesn't make any difference - no right thing to say to that. Wonderfully written, soul wrenching tale - Angela
Author's Response: Y'know that happens to me all the time...lol Thanks for the great review Angela, been trying to add a few touches of humor along the way in amongst all this angst, trying to provide a bit of balance but never sure if it works... Thanks for the encouragement and the stars, they always make me smile! X Louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 04:49 PM · On: Chapter 4 The fear that controls us
Another great update, Lou. Wow--the guy who was killed--that whole eyeball thing? Awesome. I liked your beginning too when Dean was thinking about needles and how they're invasive. Great insight into his character. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: I'm starting to think I may have a teensy weensy fixation on eyeball fiction..lol Thanks for the lovely review and the fantastic stars Ness, you have cheered up my week! X Louy
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 4 The fear that controls us
Lou. yeah me first reviewer (i hope write quick Bev!)!! You know there are people silly enough to pull out their own cannula and escape hospital in the RW as well! Go figure - they must be the full bucket load huh? I love the bit about John before he changed, and the image of him rufling Dean's hair is sweet and loving, a side we sometimes forget that big bear of a man has. And the description of the small bits that remained of Brett after your dickies had scoffed him? POEtic hun! (glad I've had my tea!) And I'm so so glad the Dean has his Sammy to watch over him, that last paragraph choked me up Hun! lovely job! bev xx
Author's Response: Yeah, first girl Bev, well done! Ehem, and we are meant to be writing from our own experiences aren't we? And POEtic...fner fner, very good..I'm impressed! And Sammy will be doing a lot of that in the near future - thanks for the great review and the smile Bev X Lout
Reviewer: mtee (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 11:11 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
That was creepy. Big birds bug me!! They are just scary.
Author's Response: They scare me too..lol And I'm afraid there's another Raven bit to come in the next chapter. Hope you continue to enjoy and thanks for the great review.
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed) · Date: 24/02/08 02:02 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
WOW!!! Lou, this just gets more fantastic with each chapter. I can close my eyes and see the scene unfold. Your visual descriptions are simply stunning. I absolutely love the works of E.A. Poe, another big plus. Can't wait for your next chapter. Crystal
Author's Response: Awe Crystal, thank you so much for that, and I have to agree about Poe, and lucky for me Gaiman quotes him as a big influence so it all kind of fits... Thanks again for the lovely review and the rating and I hope you enjoy the next one.
Reviewer: marian_dnsg4l (Signed) · Date: 24/02/08 12:05 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Ok, that was creepy. I'm reading this at 12:55, alone in my room, and it pretty much scared the crap out of me! I hate big black evil looking birds, specially in spooky cemeteries, sitting on tree branches staring at you... oh, and trying to eat your eyes! Crap, I think I heard something *looks at the window in horror* ... ok, just the wind... Great job, amazing description (maybe too good, I felt I was in there with those black birds and that creepy angel statue), love the story so far, looking forward to more!
Author's Response: WoW you're brave reading any SPN past midnight...lol I'm glad it had the desired effect and I managed to scare...hehe, and there is one more Raven scene to come yet. Thanks for the lovely compliments and the rating, I'm always blown away when someone gets swept up in the story. hope you continue to enjoy.X Louy
Reviewer: Huey Riley (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Hi Bullet!! So finally we meet, I've been tryna catch you on the box so we can have a chat, to no avail. Had to come see if your stories were as good as your HOT banners! I'm not only intrigued but very impressed by the quality of your story telling. Very powerfully written, your words jump off the page and surround me in visuals, makes me feel like I've fallen through a hole and landed in the story, thats how clear your descriptions are. Rocking chapters, emotion, humor, brotherly moments and neil gaiman. What more could could a guy ask for? Throw a comic at me and I'm Dean;) Corey xxx
Author's Response: Corey, with reviews and ratings like this you're gonna have your own army of fan girls before you know it...lol And a Gaiman fan to boot, damn I've found a kindered spirit, you're not a Zeppelin fan by any chance are you? Thanks for the great review and the shiny stars, and don't hesitate to get in touch through the contact on the bio page any time, especially when you write your first fic and want a banner...!X Louy
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 10:44 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
“We’ve landed in freaking spook central, dude.” hehehe, don't they always... "And did that mean that Sam was turning into him? He hoped not, the kid sure didn’t deserve that as well as everything else. Shaking off the thought he returned his focus to the compass." damn low-esteem complex Dean... And the birds? yikes! not an hour ago i told Kelly to come over read this story as soon as she can, but she hates birds! I won't tell her about the birds, she wrote once an appaling story about spiders, this is gonna be indirect revenge...;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much fredo, I'm very glad you're still enjoying this and it always gives me great pleasure to see people quote lines. Thank you for this great review and I hope you enjoy the next one as much!
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
The visual imagery in this is wonderful, a pinch of Hitchcock, dab of Poe, throw in a bit that's all Lou.... Not like I wasn't creeped out by ravens before. (Lived near a Poe museum as a kid once, 1 visit and I was a nightmare case for weeks). Even the fun images are great (brothel in the Vatican, lol, there are a few centuries where that wasn't so far fetched). Still loving this story, top notch! Angela
Author's Response: Thanks so much Angela, I'm very very pleased this is working for you, and..you lived next to a Poe museum?...wow! How jealous am I. The whole Poe thing came about because Gaiman quotes him as a major influence so it was nice and logical for me. Thanks for the great review and stars Angela, they do keep me motivated!
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 01:28 PM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Lout. Bugger missed being first reviewer, blasted work! Hey Hunny, I love the whole Dean being disgusted at Sam's 'scary big bird' routine so much so that he can't even drum up the effort to snark back! Mausoleum - very very atmospheric, very Poe and defo capital R needed for these F**K-Off Ravens! Loving the whole Masks we wear analogy with the otherworldliness of the watchful birds (or would DeNiro say boids? Nah that's Brando!) More Hun so get tapping away! Bev xx
Author's Response: Promise you will be first reviewer again soon...now don't sulk! Thanks for all your input into this one mate and all the little titbits I'm saving for the next one...You rock! X Louy
Reviewer: lekelly (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Been watching thr Birds Lou? Very well written, can't wait for the next chapter well done Lorraine
Author's Response: It was one of the biggest and worst nightmares I had as a kid, so yeah, guess I'm chanelling...lol Thanks again for the great review and the stars Lorraine. X Louy
Reviewer: lekelly (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 11:16 AM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
Great chapter lou! And even better there's a next button to press. Many thanks Lorraine
Author's Response: Thanks so much Lorraine, and glad you could move on to the next button. Thanks for such a great review and for the shiny ones, always love the shiny stars...lol X Louy
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 06:52 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Awesome! I loved the intricate description of the cememtery and the mausoleum! Adding the ravens was a stroke of genius! Who hasn't had nightmares after watching Hitchcock's 'The Birds'? I was breathless just sitting in my chair! You have to post again SOON---PLEASE!!!!!
Author's Response: Shannon, thank you for such a great review, I really wanted the whole description of the graveyard to work well so I'm glad it did. Hope you enjoy the next one just as much. X Louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 06:50 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
OMG! Louy, this was simply fantastic. I absolutely loved this paragraph: Dean was ‘God of the game face…master of the mask’ and was a pretty damned fine actor to boot. He’d growing up fooling social workers and teachers first, and later he easily outwitted law enforcement officers and seduced frisky women, all due to his ability to put on the right mask, become the right shade of ‘normal.’
And the scene with the ravens--awesome--one of the creepiest things I've ever read, I think.
Author's Response: Awe, thanks Ness. Been trying to come up with something that's not a 'wall' analogy, used so many of those...lol Thanks for the great review my friend.X Louy
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 06:10 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
You are taping into the despair that Sam must be feeling over Dean's deal beautifully. He's little thoughts of Dean that come through without being obvious makes it very clear that his every thought is on his brother. I never thought I would come across a Raven scene that would be comparable to 'The Birds' many have tried and all have failed until now! Brilliantly done! My heart was pounding and I was instantly transported back to seeing that movie as a kid and being terrified. It is also so remnant of 'The Raven' by Poe with that freaky bird watching from over the door.....well done. I'm not often completely taken by a story but I have been by this one. I can't wait to see how this plays out and I'm going to have to break down and buy some Gaiman (you're not the first to suggest that I should check him out.) And now I wait patiently for the next installment.
Author's Response: Now that's what I call a compliment and it's a good thing I'm sitting down!!!! I loved writing that whole scene but to hear it worked that well for you has completely blown me away, thank you so much for that. The graveyard is revisited in the next chapter, hope it works as well. Thanks for this great review, as always your words are a great encouragement, and thank you for the lovely stars. X Louy
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 05:33 AM · On: Chapter 3 The rules we live by
Your description of the graveyard is so detailed it made a shiver crawl up my spine when i read it....i can just picture it in my mind! Ditto goes for the description of the ravens watching the boys when they attempted to break into the masoleum....i understand why you put in lines from Poe's The Raven... the poems complement your story perfectly...... The story's getting more interesting by the chapter....can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Lyn, thankyou very much for that. I'm all about the description. For me it's one of the most powerful devices out there and I always spend more time trying to get that right than any other part of the story. I'm so glad you think it works for you. Thanks for the great review and the stars. X Louy
Reviewer: marian_dnsg4l (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 08:21 PM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
OMG!! "And there was only one reason for that…he had something that John never had. He had a brother. He had Dean. Always there to pick up the pieces, always there to brush away the ash and the tears and make it all right" ... that totally killed me! So heart wrenching... I hope Bobby's right about the plan, he has to be, Dean can't die. I'm so curious about it, I wonder what it is all about... and if it will work! But it is Bobby, so it has to work right? *starts to panick* Please update soon, I'm dying to read more!
Author's Response: Hehehe, please don't panic. In my world the boys will always stay together and Bobby is always their 'go to' guy so you never have to worry - well not too much anyway...lol Thanks for another fantastic review marian and the great rating. I'm VERY pleased you're enjoying this one.X Louy
Reviewer: marian_dnsg4l (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 07:30 PM · On: Chapter 1 The truth we cling to
Wow... that was just... wow. I don't think I have words to describe how awsome this chapter is. I'm sooo lucky there's a Next. Great job!
Author's Response: Marian, thank you so much. Both for the lovely review and the rating. I'm so glad you moved on to the next chapter, and chap 3 is on its way any day now...just need to get it beta'd. Thanks once again and I hope you continue to enjoy. X Louy
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 04:47 PM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
I love the little bread crumbs you drop to get our minds thinking! Wonderful chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you for the great compliment Shannon, next chapter won't be long and hopefully there will be a whole lot more breadcrumbs in there too...lol Thanks. X Louy
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 14/02/08 06:25 AM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
Hooray for Bobby!!!!!!! Yup, if Bobby is marching straight into Hell and dragging Dean out, then i'm all for it!!! I don't know how Sam is going to win the war or survive without Dean...let's hope it won't come to that!!! Can't imagine Sam with the car alone, driving to nowhere and trying to save other people without Dean beside him.... The quotes are all by Gaiman right? I have to go hunt his books now and have a browse....... And hey, thanks for liking my nick! The feeling is definitely mutual.. :)
Author's Response: Love Bobby, and Sam will never be forced to drive that car alone, well not in my Universe anyway...lol Yep, all Gaiman, (and a bit of Poe) but there will be a few others in later chapters....if you get stuck let me know and I'll tell you what books they all come from...lol. Thanks for the great review and the stars, they always make me smile!
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed) · Date: 14/02/08 12:47 AM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
Lou, This is such an emotional piece, there is very little that can console the pain of knowing there is nothing you can do to save one of the most important person in your life. The feeling is so overwhelming. Crystal
Author's Response: I'm very glad the emotions are coming through in this Crystal, thanks for that comment...going to be getting more involved with the actual 'hunt' next chapter so I hope you continue to enjoy. Thanks for the great review and the stars. X Louy
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 13/02/08 03:37 AM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
…but it hadn’t. And there was only one reason for that…he had something that John never had. He had a brother. He had Dean. Always there to pick up the pieces, always there to brush away the ash and the tears and make it all right. wow, Louy, great great update. This plan has to work, I trust you!
Author's Response: And it will, I promise. I'm so glad you picked out that line. I love the idea that Dean is the only reason Sam didn't follow John's path. Thanks for the lovely review fredo. X Louy
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 12/02/08 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 2 The lies we tell ourselves
good job will be waiting for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks very much Bookworm, won't be too long. X Louy
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