Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/02/08 01:45 PM · On: Chapter 5
PLEASE don't let this be the last story with Sam and Dean raising Ben!!! I love Dean as a dad and Sam as an uncle! Let Sam take as long as he can in making his decision. I like how you explained Dean's reason for allowing Ben to lash out in anger. It makes perfect sense.
Author's Response: They are adorable as parents aren't they? I don't about another story, it'll have to actually hit me. I hadn't even intended to write this one. As far as Dean and allowing Ben to lash out...I've raised three of my own and believe that everyone has a right to their own feelings. It frustrated my kids to no end that they could tell me they hated me and I'd say that's fine, you can hate me all you want but that doesn't change the fact that I love you no matter what you do. My son would actually then argue with about whether I loved him or not. Kids can be such fun to mess with. Thanks again.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/02/08 08:55 AM · On: Chapter 4
This is so exciting! It's one thing after another.
Author's Response: Never ending...not true it will end all things do. Glad you're liking the story and thanks for all the reviews!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/02/08 08:20 AM · On: Chapter 3
The exchange in the tent after the werewolf hunt was funny. I know how frustrating it is to be awaken by your child when you're dead tired. It's only funny when it happens to someone else. Good to see Dean enjoys all the blessings of fatherhood! There's so much human reaction and interaction between the Winchesters. I love the tickle fest in the tent while Sam reads from the journal. And Ben's reaction is priceless! Ben is so sweet. His compassion is touching. It's interesting that although they don't have much, Ben realizes that they have more than a lot of people.
Author's Response: My friend was telling me about her son discovering himself and I just had to put it in a story. The journal was the only look we had into any of these three in childhood. Kind of sad really.... We had a five in the morning tent event with our daughter when she was about three. We finally had to lock her in the car so she wouldn't wake up the entire campsite as she screamed that she wanted to go and play.....of course this has nothing to do with my story but you reminded me of it. It is so frustrating when kids are awake and want something and you are physically incapable of waking up enough to respond. Thanks for the reviews and giving me a memory that made me laugh this morning. Kids are such a blast!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/02/08 07:34 AM · On: Chapter 2
Are they crazy? Taking Ben on a werewolf hunt? That's almost as dangerous as a wendigo! And their luck is never good. This is going to be bad. I love that Ben has his dad's (and I suspect his mom's) stubborn streak! It's so cute that even though he's angry at his father, he still cares about his feelings.
Author's Response: I really got the impression from the show that Ben was a strong kid but hadn't had a lot of guidance in that direction but with a loving mother he would very likely be an affectionate kid. So now he's learning to meld the two together. Yea, werewolves are great, aren't they? I like them almost as much as vampires. Thanks for reading and the review!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/02/08 08:23 PM · On: Chapter 1
Here I expected a long, drawn out adventure before they get the journals and all they had to do was go to sleep and wake up. Jo did all the hard work. Either Jo is really on their side or this is part of a bigger scheme. So glad you wrote another story with Ben in it! I loved The Rescue! I've read and re-read it.
Author's Response: I don't do long drawn out usually. Would you rather it had been long and drawn out? As for Jo, the juries still out. I hope Ben doesn't disappoint in this story, I'm having such fun with him. You honor me by saying that you read a story of mine multiple times. Thank You!
Reviewer: Katric (Signed) · Date: 16/02/08 07:09 PM · On: Chapter 6
I finished this chapter after having had numerous occurrences of goose bumps, gasps and uncontrollable heart-pounding moments. Loved the ending---I interpreted it as a "there's-hope-for-future" kind of thing...I'm sticking to that angle like glue. Expertly crafted. Breathtaking story.
Author's Response: As always thank you so much and I love the review! I'm so happy that this chapter worked for you. Hope is a good thing but there has to be a level of despair before hope can shine through.
Reviewer: Seriously Sam (Signed) · Date: 16/02/08 10:27 AM · On: Chapter 6
I love how I missed this being updated days before. Ugh. Anyways, I'm really pleased with this chapter. I was beginning to get weary last chapter, but this chapter totally made up for any weary feelings I was having. The basic storyline of Sam and Dean hunting with Ben again was great. Also, I loved the emotions and the dynamics you displayed in this chapter. It was really great, I loved it. Also, the ending! Gosh, do you have to be so cruel with the cliffhangers?
Author's Response: I completely understand how this type of storyline can be difficult (for lack of a better word) and I know that the last chapter was even more so. I just thought in order to move things along it needed to be done the way it was. I do like it better when they're hunting and moving. I'm glad you gave it another chance and that you like this one better. Hope I can keep your faith going. Thanks for reading and for the review. Sorry about the cliffhanger but, seriously, after 35 pages I had to stop somewhere.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 14/02/08 07:23 PM · On: Chapter 6
good job!
Author's Response: Thank you. I love your short and sweet reviews! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 14/02/08 07:52 AM · On: Chapter 6
Wow, this is like a whole new story and I loved the urban legend at the start... The whole educational 'chat' between Sam and Ben was beautifully written and OMG what a cliffhanger you've left us with. Poor Ben, believing he's going to turn into the one thing they hunt... Long it was, but very very good!
Author's Response: It was such a hard decision whether to break that chapter up or not. Hopefully I made the right decision. That urban legend at the beginning was the story that scared me most as a kid and can still get me uptight if I'm in a scaredy-cat mood. I've been waiting to wirte a hunt around it for ages! Thanks so much for reading and for the review. Makes my day a happy one!
Reviewer: Katric (Signed) · Date: 12/02/08 04:37 PM · On: Chapter 5
Just finished reading Chap. 5 again, and have to say I am still amazed at how well so much information flows---the chapter caught hold of me once more, and I couldn't stop reading it! Great Work!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm so glad that it worked for you. I'm also terribly honored that you'd read it twice. I've read more times than I can count and I'm pretty much sick of it. It's even worse for the next chapter because I'm over 10,000 words and not done yet! Lord, help me. Thanks again. I really appreciate you reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: nightchills (Signed) · Date: 11/02/08 09:38 PM · On: Chapter 5
Can't say I enjoyed this chapter, had really liked the story up until too much angel talk and getting way too weird at this point.
Author's Response: I'm sorry that you don't like it. I know that angels stories aren't everyones cup of tea. I thought it would be pretty obvious that it was an angel story unless you haven't read 'Sword and Shield.' I do wonder though, is it the angel aspect or is it the amount of information ('too much angel talk') that you don't like. I fully acknowledge that this chapter was an information dump but it was done purposefully. If it doesn't work I'd really like your opinion on that so when I write later I can devise a way to change this. I've had another comment that implies the same thing but in order to set the foundation for what's to come this would've been one heck of a monster of a story because providing all that information without it being a dump would've required many. many chapters with something propelling those chapters along besides just imparting the information. Thanks for the review and I'm sorry if I've lost you as a reader.
Reviewer: Seriously Sam (Signed) · Date: 08/02/08 04:11 PM · On: Chapter 5
I have to admit, I saw this on fanfiction yesterday (I didn't know you posted there as well!) but decided to wait to review until it was up here for the sake of being consistant. Plus, I selfishly like reading review responses. Sarcasm! *glee* I love the family dynamics still. The whole angel thing reminds me so much of Buffy where Dawn was the key. I had flashbacks to my Buffy days, but I guess this storyline could turn out interesting. I'm weary of it because it's a hard storyline to carry well, but I'm putting my faith in you to make it utterly amazing. The explanation was a little too much in one chapter, but it was all right. Can I please of more of Ben next chapter? I love your verison of him to death.
Author's Response: Never watched Buffy but it's hardly a new idea - there are very few of those left in the world. I appreciate your faith and I hope I don't disappoint. Don't worry Ben is back in full force next chapter and being every bit of his ten year old self. I adore him myself but while I wanted everyone else to know what was going on he needed to be ignorant for a while - damn plot devises (what would I do without them. I agree it was a lot and too much for one chapter BUT I don't think it would've worked in bits and pieces either. I labored over this chapter for a long time and this was how I decided to work it out. Thanks for reading my story and for I review. I really appreciate the time, thought and effort.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 08/02/08 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 5
Wow good job will be wiating for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really appreciate your kind words! I'm working on it so hopefully it won't be very long before the next chapter's up.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 08/02/08 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 5
WOW - Crash course is right...so they have until next month and then it's ON! Can't wait to see what Ben decides and hope both Sam and Dean cope with it...either way that decision is both good and sucks at the same time... ...and Dean/Michael - Should have known. With eyes like those, an angel is all he could have been really...hehe
Author's Response: I've never heard truer words, those are a pair of the most amazing eyes I've ever seen. One month and it's on. Thanks for the review. I'm glad this chapter worked because I thought maybe too much at once but dragging it out felt wrong also.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 03:10 PM · On: Chapter 4
Good job will be waiting for the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you so much hoping for tomorrow on the update.
Reviewer: Seriously Sam (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 4
I hope you had your jollies totally beating up Dean this chapter. Poor Dean getting hurt while Ben and Sam come out virtually unharmed. You're evil and sadistic towards Dean. Does it make me evil and sadistic if I enjoy reading it? I think it just might. Okay, WTF? What happened at the end? You can't just have a cliffhanger like that. First, Dean's all out of character and then he's being hurt - yet again. Oh, wait. It's an "arch-angel". Am I right?
Author's Response: Sarcasm? I love it! They say its the basest form of humor but oh man when its done right - too funny. I do love beating on poor Dean. And don't worry Sam and Ben will have their day....I'm not hinting though. I was told recently that I'm pretty good at cliffhangers so I had to prove them right. Don't worry I'm hot and heavy in the next chapter and it's working out beautifully. I'm for a post in time for Supernatural Thursday....what that's tomorrow. Gotta run and I'm not saying who that was ..... not here at least.
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 11:20 AM · On: Chapter 4
I just gave the updates a quick look and finally realized that this was a sequel to "To the Rescue". I really loved that story and the way you described Dean as a father was wonderful. I could so see him as Ben's dad. Ben is a great kid and I am looking forward to reading more of this story. The interaction between all three Winchesters is just so well written! You left us with a real cliffie here - what's happening to Dean? Poor Ben, this kid has been through so much already, he doesn't need to see his dad or uncle in constant danger. I love how you portray him: a tough kid, ready to fight, yet still just a small child who needs alot of love and clings to his dad when he is scared. Great job so far!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really can't put into words how much I love writing Ben. There really is something special about boys - well, kids in general (can't be unfair to my daughters). I admit freely he's easy to write because I put a bit of my son in there, a smidge of Sam and a whole lotta Dean. Of course every kid tries to emulate their father so it's be expected. Thanks again!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 4
Fantastic update as always lostatc. The whole escape from the mansion was so well described it could have been showing on the TV, and I love the idea of Dean being out though by Ben about the gun, that was a lovely touch. Once again you have all three of their chatracters to perfection with great one liners, almost too many to mention or the review would end up as long as the chapter...lol And the mystery at the end of this chapter has reeled me in even further, hints of Roy Lestrange about that - what is he doing to Dean...my imagination is chugging along here... Read your response to my last review and have to say it always surprises me when I find a great and well written story like this one, with only a handful of reviews or readers, in particular some of NovembersGuest and even some of gaelicspirit's early work had the same problem, but trust me, skill, talent and a great story WILL win out in the end. Just keep up the great work. Don't know if they help but if you would like a banner for your story drop me a line, I'd be happy to fix you up with one. X Louy
Author's Response: I so appreciate any reviews that I get so I really don't think about the ones that I don't. I can usually think of reasons why not - in this case viewers weren't real big on the Ben story (I loved him!). I just try the best I can and reveal in what I get. I get such a happy 'high' whenever I finish something that I've written (story, chapter) that it almost seems selfish to get praise on top of it. Thanks again and I really appreaciate everything you've said and the wonderful reviews.
Reviewer: Seriously Sam (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 3
Can I just say that I'm so angry that I didn't realize before now that you're writing a sequel to "To the Rescue"? I was so hoping that you would write one, because I simply adore your Ben. Not to mention, I adore the dynamic between Ben/Dean/Sam. It's a wonderful family dynamic. I'm a little concerned about the major plot. I don't want to be cheated out on some great Winchester moments, because I feel like these relatives are going to get in the way. I also feel like I should read the other story you mentioned in your notes. I have a feeling its a story about Dean being an arch-angel? I'll have to read that soon, so I fully understand this story. Anyways, great job so far. I just love Ben and Dean. I simply don't understand why more people don't write about Dean being a great father to Ben. So thank you for writing Ben.
Author's Response: I'm excited that you're happy about the sequel to To The Rescue. I love Ben myself so it was bound to happen I guess. Reading Sword and Shield would be a good idea but since you've figured out the punch line you could get away without reading it. Don't worry about the extra family dynamic it will always be about the boys. I've been a bit confused why people aren't more into the Ben idea myself but it makes me happy - at least I'm doing something a little unique. Thanks for reading my story and espceially for the kind review. It makes me a very happy person.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 03/02/08 06:01 PM · On: Chapter 3
good job
Author's Response: Thank you.
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 03/02/08 05:38 PM · On: Chapter 3
OMG! this was a fantastic chapter, loved every bit of it. It was filled with so much tension and action. Ben's interaction with the other kids was great, and I liked the way he handled and reacted towards each of them -all three of them stirring up different feelings in him. I also love the way you have one case going on through the story, but still lets them hunt different things, much like in the actual tv-show. Ben's and Dean's reaction to what happened with Randy in the middle of the story; Dean explaining they have to act towards what they can do something about -the werewolf and not Randy's family problem -that was a scene I liked very much. I simply love how you make Ben and Dean react towards each other. And it's all so realistic (in the supernatural kind of way, of course:), them going through the ups and downs -still you can see how the connects and bounds -awesome. Sam playing uncle is cute too:p I'm happy every time I see an update on this story and I have to admit that I always read it on ff .net first cause it comes up there first, but I wait till I can review on this site cause it's more personal -hope you don't mind. Keep them coming!!!
Author's Response: Reviews are reviews - I love them no matter what. I do think this site is much more personal. I also think that the level of reader here tends to be better so the reviews here mean a lot to me. I like to have the ongoing story yet still have them hunting. It makes for exhausting story writing because I refuse to cheat the hunt and I refuse to cheat the story. I hope that it is apparent that the hunts apply to the overall story and not just hunts for their own sake. It's all well planned out in my demented little mind. I have a 12 year old son and one moment he and I are yelling at each other, the next he's crying and the next he's wanting to cuddle on the couch. I'm enjoying writing the interaction between Ben and Dean so much because it's helping expend my excess energies when it comes to my own little monster. Don't worry Sam won't always be just the cute uncle, but he's still getting his footing when it comes to Ben. They'll have their moments too. I'm working on Chapter 4 now but I've already written Chapter 5. So once I conquer the mess I'm in the middle of there should be two chapters coming out rather quickly. If the powers that be here would give me rights to posting without being checked it would all be on at the same time as ff.net but I understand and agree with how they do things here. Makes it a better site! Again, thanks for the review! It really means so much to me!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 03/02/08 05:01 PM · On: Chapter 3
Y'know I wish I hadn't started reading this till it was finished because it's the most frustrating thing in the world to be so engrosed in a story, only to come to the end of a chapter. And this is a particulaly good one...love your style, the growing relationship between the boys and Ben, the whole action packed hunt, the banter, the rough and tumble at the end...in fact loving every bit of this... Especially the little touches like Ben's reaction to hunting...it's such a parallel for Sam and Dean, you can see them having gone through that same turmoil as kids with John. Going to be looking out for the next update straight away...keep up the great work. X Lou
Author's Response: I really meant to be further along in this before I started posting so that I could have just a few days between posts but then....well, I've rearranged the chapters that I've already written and added ideas that I haven't written yet. Good news is I'm a fast writer and unless work decides to kick me in the booty I should be able to keep things moving along with only a few days between posts. As I said with To The Rescue I love the idea of seeing how Dean and Sam were raised by watching them raise a boy themselves especially by having to raise him within the hunting world. Much better than flashbacks - nothing wrong with flashbacks, I've written my share of them. Thanks so much for the psotive words. No one is reading this story so I've been disappointed but I like enough myself to just keep going with it. Your reviews make me smile and keep me going. Thanks again!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 10:13 AM · On: Chapter 2
These journal entries giving a glimpse of Mary's life are absolutely fantastic..and I love the way you've twisted it on it's head to include the last thing she ever said to Dean about 'angels are watching over us'. And Dean's recluctance to admit there may be a posibility that he is more than he thinks he is...spot on for his character. And to finish...the worry Ben shows for his father and the very last couple of lines are just beautiful... Another great chapter, thanks for the read!
Author's Response: I don't think Dean will ever admit he's speial even if he evenutally admits that he has a life worth living. Like I've said a couple of times I didn't like writing Mary's journal but it had to be done for the story. I'm just glad that they're working. Thanks for reading and for the review. I'l be getting to 'The Rapture' today!
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 07:51 AM · On: Chapter 2
Another great chapter! Liked the little insight we got on Mary's life. You gave us just enough to make us curious, but didn't revile to much. I also think is cool that you we ingrained "sword and shield" in this too.
Author's Response: Thank you so much those journal entries scared the heck out of me. I don't like writer about characters that exist but we don't know much about them. I don't feel it's my place to establish their personality. Unfortunately had to be done for this story. Thanks for the review and for reading my story.
Reviewer: bernie62 (Signed) · Date: 31/01/08 04:44 PM · On: Chapter 1
good story. i am really enjoying it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story. I'm glad that you are enjoying it.
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