Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/08 07:48 AM · On: Chapter 10
Hunting Ben may be the ultimate in heartbreak for the boys, although I'm not giving up on what he chose just yet. Gibbering Amelia beats the alternative if she has to stay amonst the living, hmm, maybe I shouldn't review until I have my Monday am coffee- great chapter
Author's Response: Yeah, I just couldn't go there with a relative of the brothers. I think even angry dad Dean wouldn't cross that line. I think this is going to be hard on the brothers also. Thanks for reading. Thanks for the review. Makes me smile and feel great!
Reviewer: Coldfire (Signed) · Date: 03/03/08 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 10
Poor Ben. I wonder what he chose. Great Chapter!
Author's Response: No ideas? Hmm, guess you'll have to wait to find out. Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 02/03/08 05:57 PM · On: Chapter 10
Ohhhh. this is exquisite! I'm speechless---thoughts spinning in my head. Just glad that Harker bitch lost her mind. Love it!!!! More please!
Author's Response: I really couldn't have Dean kill his grandmother, could I? People weren't happy with me when I hate him kill someone in 'To The Rescue' so I decided not to revisit that - especially witha relative. Thank you so much for the review. Makes a girl blush. I'll have more soon, I promise.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 02/03/08 03:25 PM · On: Chapter 10
Too true, when has life ever been fair, but this is a harsh twist of fate and makes for a very compelling story. Poor Ben... ...and poor Dean to be told Ben would have been alowed to stay with him, and now to have to hunt him down...wow And thank you for not letting Bobby turn too bad, at least he tried...lol Thanks for the great read and looking forward to the next update already.
Author's Response: I had to finally redeem Bobby before I was hunted down and exorcised. He never was bad he just didn't know the whole truth, just like no one else did. I really think his reaction was true to character considering but maybe I should have played up how bad a Nephilim is a little more. Thanks for the review and for reading my story! I really appreciate it!
Reviewer: Katric (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 03:24 PM · On: Chapter 9
This is an amazing chapter, so well written on so many levels, every emotional response it elicits is somewhat overwhelming...I'm at a loss for words, which may be a first for me regarding your work...
Author's Response: Loss for words my...... Anyway, thank you so much for so many things. You're the best. Kim
Reviewer: blackcatswhiskers (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 03:24 PM · On: Chapter 9
Another great chapter - keep up the great work. Rachel
Author's Response: Rachael, Thank you so much! I really appreciate your reading and the fact that you always review! Kim
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 9
OK.... I have no words to describe this so called 'grandma"-she needs to die slowly and painfully for what she's done to Ben - and i have the feeling what she wants to do to Sam. I was totally livid when I finished this chapter. And , if Ellen sticks with her- she can be scratched off the "to do list" also. I truly hope Bobby did try to help, because I really love that guy- but again, anyone and anything that threatens the boys-eliminate them. Whew...now I feel better. Verbage-timing-tone-all your words have vividly created a fast moving video in my mind. GREAT STORY!!! OUTSTANDING work!!!!!!! you are a great storyteller-AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!! Now...MORE PLEASE!!!! BRAVO!!!!!
Author's Response: Let it out, it's all okay! A little theraputic ranting is good once in a while. I am so unbelievably flatted by what you've said. Thank you so much. Thank you for reading and for a review that makes me feel humbled. I'm working on the next as quickly as I can. Soon, I promise.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 28/02/08 08:55 AM · On: Chapter 9
"Ben chulckled to himself; those two cracked him up." Perfect wording for a pre-teen! I had to chuckle myself. OMG!!! What an amazingly powerful and emotional chapter!! You must have been drained after writing it because I'm exhausted after reading it. I hoped when Bobby came into play that he was acting as a double agent---there to help Ben instead of hurt him. I'm glad he wasn't part of the torture. There are two paragraphs that stand out to me. the first is the one where Ben talks about missing his dad and uncle and missing his mom when things got too bad to handle and the fact that he wasn't old enough or large enough to protect himself. The second paragraph is when Ben is being tortured and he thinks how badly he wanted death and vengeance and retribution. He wants to make someone his victim and he is suddenly and adult in a child's body. If that isn't enough to turn someone into a Nephilim I don't know what is. Such exquisite emotions and expression of thought! My heart kept breaking for Ben, Dean and Sam. I hope these experiences don't force Ben to choose to become evil. Now I understand Dean's talk about everything being about the choice itself.
Author's Response: Yea! I think I may have done something right. I was hoping that the paragraph where Ben desired retribution would be enough to make people realize that this could be a major turning point for him. I tend toward subtlety and worry that I am too subtle sometimes (I hate being hit over the head with the obvious). Actually this chapter did completely wipe me out. I've never been so mentally exhausted by writing as I was with this chapter. The next one has just left me angry.... Sorry to be breaking hearts, I promise to put them back together before it's all over! Thanks for the review. I'm smiling and feeling great right now!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 28/02/08 08:30 AM · On: Chapter 9
You'd better have a fate worse than death planned for that woman, cos if Sam and Dean don't do it, I sure as hell will. This chapter made me livid, even angry at Bobby (and I'm a huge Bobby fan) so I'm pleased that it looks like he tried to help and got locked up for his trouble. Please update soon, I REALLY need to know what you have planned for that creature and how our boy's get Ben free. Awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm flattered that you are so moved to hatred....means I must be doing something right. I'm a huge Bobby fan also so I wouldn't worry too much. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: EarmuffedAmazon (Signed) · Date: 27/02/08 11:39 PM · On: Chapter 9
Oh! Superangst! I'm Waiting for Dean to Flay Grandma Alive....Dear Lord Don't Make Us Wait Too Much Longer for the Next Chapter! I Very Much Enjoy Ben, Dean and Uncle Sammy.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I kind of like Ben, Dean and Uncle Sammy myself. I'm grateful for the read and the review!
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/08 08:47 PM · On: Chapter 9
Not sure if my heart should break more for Dean or Ben - maybe I'll settle for hating Amelia - think she's a lot more power hungry ol' broad than deluded pseudosavior - great chapter - angela
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I so appreciate your reading my story and leaving a review. Hating Amelia is good, very good!
Reviewer: bernie62 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/08 05:46 PM · On: Chapter 9
awesome
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 27/02/08 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 9
I cant wait till the next chapter great work
Author's Response: Working hard on the next chapter. Thanks a lot!
Reviewer: Katric (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 02:17 PM · On: Chapter 8
There is so much that's right about this chapter, it's difficult to single out individual moments upon which to comment; but there is one scene that is particularly touching: "Do you know what made me finally decide to do it?" "No." Ben's voice was merely a whisper as he realized the effect his choices had had on his uncle. "I was afraid seeing you die that way would destroy your dad." Sam brushed away the lone tear that he saw run down Ben's cheek before it reached his ear. "I didn't say that to upset you." The emotional content is so delicately nuanced and precisely phrased, that this small exchange between Sam and Ben, is saturated with depth and power. It's an amazing scene, played out perfectly in its poignancy. With the introduction of Judge Alicia Quinn's scenes, the skillfull unfolding of the low-key action allowed for a satisfying peek into the Wincester mystique, while simultaneously carrying the plot forward. This was so enjoyable because it was handled with such deftness, the encounter came to life. Can't let the self-help group concept go by without at least acknowledging how much fun it was being there with them... And finally, with the unfolding of the ending, oh no, no, no---my heart skipped a beat again. This can't be happening...How much more "bad" can hit these guys? I was only able to desperately hold on to a small thread of hope because I knew Dean and Sam would fix this, they had to...
Author's Response: I don't even know how to respond other than to say thank you. You catch what I throw out there and that's a great feeling. Thanks again, for everything!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 25/02/08 10:38 AM · On: Chapter 8
Oh no! It can't be coincidence that a shooter was in the school at that time and that the only person missing is Ben.
Author's Response: There is no such thing as coincidence, at least not in a Winchester's life. Thanks for reading and for the reviews!
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 23/02/08 08:48 PM · On: Chapter 8
I will deffently be waiting for the next chapter good job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am so happy that you are reading. I appreciate the reviews! Thanks again!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 23/02/08 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 8
Now this chapter took me right back to the first story, just beautiful and isn't Ben turning into a miniature Dean? Very cool! Loved all the chat between Sam and Ben...and that's a nasty cliffhanger you have there, I'm sure they sell a cream for that...lol Awesome chapter as always, and can't wait to find out where Ben has ended up...X Louy
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I do know if going back to the first story at this point is necessarily a good thing. Some people didn't like how ruthless Dean got when Ben was missing last time. But, not to worry it will be wonderfully ruthless this time too. Thanks for reading and for the review (especially for the banner)!
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 23/02/08 03:41 PM · On: Chapter 8
Arghh no! What did I say about cliffhangars? Where's Ben? How am I supposed to sleep now? Dammit! Still loving Sam & Ben bonding and enjoyed Ben getting to be a kid - the play between the boys and girls was really well observed. And the judge spotting that Ben was a heart throb in the making... well duh! With those genes, could he be anything else? Like the idea of a 'self help group' for all the Changeling families - can just imagine a talk show about it - "Have you or someone you know been affected by Changelings? Maybe your child was swapped for a lower level demon look a likey who killed your husband and sucked your life force before spontaneously combusting. If so, call this number and you could appear on our next show." Or not ... Fab update, looking forward to the next (better be soon, bloody cliffys!) Kirsty x
Author's Response: OMG that was hilarious. I would watch that epsiode of Jerry Springer. It just seemed so middle class america to get together and discuss but do nothing about it. I am so, so, so sorry about the cliffhanger....not really but things do have to stop at some point I can't just keep writing and writing.....I have to sleep, I have to eat and I have to think. I'm working on the next just gotta work out one major kink and then it will all go together. Thanks again and THANK YOU for the laugh that was great! Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 03:00 PM · On: Chapter 7
This is fantastic. I usually wait until a story is finished before reading (cliffhangars drive me mad!) but I loved all of your other stories so much that I just couldn't wait any longer. I have read your other reviews (I live vicariously) and can understand the discomfort some people feel, especially about Bobby, but I don't think a bit of controversy is a bad thing. This is a well thought out, thoroughly researched and intelligent story. I feel you have given a lot of information in a way that was easy to digest but does take some thinking about afterwards for the full impact. You have classified this as AU but (as you said) everything in the Supernatural universe could be seen as AU and I think if you have demons you have to have angels too. Only fair, right? As well as enjoying the storyline, I just love how you write the Winchester trio I can see and hear them so clearly in my head. It was obvious Dean would be a great dad as he had raised Sam and the way he deals with Ben is very believable. But I am particularly enjoying the growing relationship between Sam and Ben. Their interactions are so sweet and well observed (as much like a step parent as an uncle, trying not to overstep the boundaries) and I like the way Ben seems to bring out Sam's lighter side. I had a much better thought out and succint review going around in my head after reading this last night but, as is always the way, a good nights sleep turned it into more of a ramble but I hope I got across that I am loving this - it is so different to anything else I have read and I hope that you update again soon! (Did I mention I hate cliffhangars?) Thanks for sharing and making me think. Kirsty x
Author's Response: Kirsty, Thank you so much. I've managed with a little help from family and friends to convince myself that controversy is a good thing. I am to the point that while I take a deep breath before I read a new review, I no longer dread them when that little message pops up in my email. Luckily there were a couple otherwise my ego would've taken a little to reboost. I went into the angels specifically because I read an interview where Kripke said he'd never go there. Means it was fair game for me to play with without being out-cannoned later (I just made that term up) since that often happens in fanfaction especially Supernatural where characters die regularly. I also like to look into the polarity of things and this works well with this story. Thank you so much for you kind words about my writing, my characters and the work I put into researching my stories. It is nice to have that stuff recognized. I love three together also. They write so easily. I'm glad that you like the growing relationship between Sam and Ben, I've been having fun helping that grow. I also like Sam being a counter balance to Dean's protectiveness because only Sam would understand what it means to be over-protected. I hate cliffhangers too. That's why my chapters are so long in this story. I could really have broken them up a lot more and dragged this on a lot longer. I had intended to not post until I had the entire thing written but I couldn't control myself. I was writing very fast until my most recent reviews and then a friend pulled out of my self pity and now I'm working again. I'm usually pretty fast at this so hopefully the next chatper will be up soon. Thanks again! And thanks for reading when you normally wouldn't that makes me feel great! And the long reviews....I must be doing something right. Just so you know - and anyone else reading this - the reviews were welcomed and only left me wondering if I'd gone way off track. I would never not finish a story and I appreciate what the reviewers had to say. But, I will always defend my ideas where as suggestions on writing improvements are taken to heart and worked on diligently. Kim
Reviewer: Seriously Sam (Signed) · Date: 19/02/08 04:11 PM · On: Chapter 7
I read this yesterday but failed to review for lack of anything to say. So, I came back today to leave a review since I never read and don't review. I understand the premise of the story and how you're trying to develop it. It makes me sad though, at points. For instance, I can't believe that Bobby would turn against the Winchesters. It doesn't make sense in my mind, and I'm trying so hard to wrap my brain around the basic storyline. I really want to give a meaningful review to you, because I loved "To the Rescue" so darn much, but I don't want to say the wrong thing and discourage you with this story. I'm going to stick with it, because I have the faith that everything will make sense in the end and have some sort of happy ending. This, as a sequel, was not what I was expecting at all, but I'm willing to stick with it if you keep writing it. Does that make sense?
Author's Response: First of all I really appreciate that you always leave a review. As a writer I am so appreciative of the time that you give to every story that you read. Now, for my response. I don't think the assumption should made that Bobby has turned on the Winchesters. He's as uninformed and misguided (thank you Katric for the words) as Ben and Sam are. I never had any intention of this being an easy story. I knew all along that the premise would not necessarily be a favorable one. And that's the main reason why it's taken so long to get up the courage to write it. It can be a theme that seems preachy and pompous. I hope that I'm not coming across that way because I'm really not trying to tell a religious story. I am merely using religion and angels as a device to tell what I want to tell. I'm so glad that you like 'To The Rescue' and I appreciate you're faith that I will come through in the end. I can't promise a happy ending but I can promise a conclusive ending. If you're at all curious where I began with all of this do some research into a hero's tale. I'm not telling the hero's tale, I'm telling the tale of a hero's guide.
Reviewer: Katric (Signed) · Date: 19/02/08 02:05 PM · On: Chapter 7
In all honesty, the conversation that took place when Dean was struggling to explain to Ben the true parts of what he had read, the consequences of those truths, and the choices that would result in the future because of all these facts, provided such clarity for me, I actually had a "eureka moment". I did understand the paths Dean and Sam had to take to guide young Ben. I understood the necessity of not spelling it out, as this would deny Ben the choices that he had to make. But I couldn't figure out how this situation could be put in understandable terms that someone so young could grasp, until Sam proclaimed in exasperation, "Damn it Dean, he's only ten and I couldn't get it when you dumped that crap on me at 24." A brilliant transition, topped only by Dean's cryptic response, "It's the truth." I'm still grinning. Now, at last while Dean spoke to Ben, a path, clear and true, for Ben to follow: signposts being identified (what should he try to focus on and see with this talk), markers being presented (questions being put to him that guided him to answers that had been eluding him), and a superbly crafted arrival at his destination (the signs that had been followed had deftly empowered him to discover his own truths out of all of this confusion). In this story, the ideas are wonderfully executed, elegantly written and wholly believable. And when I found myself just starting to relax (having witnessed a very large dilemma being solved in such a satisfying way), the danger to Ben is pulled to the forefront, as once again, the outside world threatens his future. All the wrong information that was twisted and damaging and outside of the two brother's control, came rushing back into their lives, in the person of their misguided and uninformed friend, Bobby. Reality check---every direction Sam, Dean and Ben look, holds almost insurmountable dangers. It is going to get worse, well before it gets better. Tension, danger, backs against the wall---it doesn't get any better than this!
Author's Response: I'm humbled. You've managed to express what I'm trying to convey in my story. There is nothing more humbling as a writer then to know that the message may just be being heard by someone. Thank you so much. I truly appreciate the time you've taken to evaluate and expound on my story.
Reviewer: bernie62 (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 05:52 PM · On: Chapter 7
I wasn't so sure that after I found out that Dean was an arch angel if I would be able to stay with this story...if I would be able to get past the feeling that it had, I think they call it "jumped the shark"? I can safely say that I am "all in" to use a poker term. You are keeping Sam connected to Dean very closely and I think that is important to keep the story going cause the angel thing is "way out there". Keeping the pressure on Ben's life is also keeping the story vital. I am in suspense and as a writer that is where you want to keep your reader. So you are doing good. I am enjoying the story. I am enjoying Mary's journal additions and Dean and Sam's angst. There was a little bit of "contrived" feel to the "hunter world" all knowing about the angel thing...but its good Anxiously awaiting the next installment and keep up the good work. You aren't afraid to go out there on a limb and I admire that especially since you seem to be able to make the fantastic, plausible. Just be careful about the shark line.
Author's Response: Okay, not sure if I got patted on the head or b**ch slapped. Since I'd never heard the term I had to look it up. Can't see where it applies when I look at the website that claims to have invented the term but maybe I just don't get it. Can't really be careful about the shark line because the story is already fully outlined and is just requiring the writing of the details. I'm not sure when Supernatural would go from .... where ever it is at and the move into the rediculous. The show is about demons and ghosts afterall is it such a long stretch to believe that angel would exist in all of this. I apprecaite you reading and the fact that I've managed to intice you to like something that you find rediculous. Thanks for reading and for the review.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 7
Lone Tree, Iowa is about 20 miles from my town! Right in my backyard! OMG! The fight between Bobby and Dean was intense! I've never felt so horrible! PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE update again soon. I'm dying here!
Author's Response: Well, I;m glad that I didn't describe anything then because last time I got close to someone's home town I got in trouble - just kidding. I liked that sound of the name. I like places with unique or fun sounding names. I lived near a street once called Winch Bottom Road. I loved it. Then Hanging Tree Hill. I wanted to live on those streets. Sorry to make you feel bad. I knew alot oe people weren't going to be happy with my use of Bobby here. I'm working on the next chapter but I've no idea yet when it will be done. Thanks for reading and for the review.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 12:18 PM · On: Chapter 7
good ob will be waiting for the next update
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/02/08 05:27 PM · On: Chapter 6
You have got to update SOON! This is awsome! Dean and Sam should have known that Ben would research this on his own. Cripes, it's what they taught him to do. He practically told them he was going to do it, he just wanted to hear it from his dad first.
Author's Response: Dean was in a bit of denial and Sam has yet to get involved with Ben on that level. I don't think he really sees himself as a parental figure yet. As parents kids give us all sorts of warnings and chances but it's hard to hear through the noise of our days. I've finished the next chapter. I'm proofing now then it's a matter of waiting the the UnGen powers that be to approve my latest. Thanks for the reviews! I'm so glad this story is working for you.
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