Reviewer: sammarinade (Signed) · Date: 17/04/08 11:17 PM · On: A momentary pause for a commercial break

Ohhhhh...duh duh duhhhh... Okay sorry about that I just like the ending there where Dean was talking to the manager.  So far so GREAT keep it up so I can reads more!

Reviewer: sammarinade (Signed) · Date: 17/04/08 11:05 PM · On: How long can you hold your breath

I'm going read the rest of the chapters you have now!  I loved this chap and want more...loved the "look of a wounded puppy" line!

Reviewer: Kumaproogey (Signed) · Date: 10/03/08 08:22 PM · On: Run, run as fast as you can

 Great descriptions, example:

The snow swirled more violently around him, biting at his exposed skin and stinging his eyes. The skies once ashen now turned a deep indigo, clouds overshadowing the pale moon. Night had descended with a vengeance, winds howling and rushing past him with ominous veracity. A whispered voice carried on the breeze, so faint at first Sam was forced to crane his neck to hear it. Louder and deeper the voice grew, its tone rich and silky smooth.

Good storyline. The beginning was a little abrupt, I felt like I was thrown into it & like I was missing something.  Maybe you meant do that because that's how Sam felt, I don't know.  If it was on purpose it worked perfectly & was a genius idea.

Very interesting & unique story.  Loving it so far & eager to see what happens next.  

 

Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 01:25 PM · On: A momentary pause for a commercial break

hm......cool.  So now I gotta wonder if the winchesters stumbled into the the motel of fun on accident or if they were led there by something.  Can't wait to see Sam one up the player of games and to figure out Dean's place in all of this.  Great chapter I'll be waiting for more - K

Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 01:12 PM · On: How long can you hold your breath

Okay so, we've got a protective Dean watching over Sammy, not that I think it'll stop the nightmares..lol, we've got Sam trapped into playing a deadly game...hm.. this one sounds like a winner.. I've gone ahead and bookmarked it, and I look forward to reading more. - Kel

Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 09:36 AM · On: Run, run as fast as you can

great chapter,sick sam,protective dean,love it

Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 29/01/08 07:42 PM · On: A momentary pause for a commercial break

I knew it!  I knew that motel manager had something to do with that "player of games"....Gameshow huh? like a demon gameshow...very very evil! Looking forward to where you're going with this!

Reviewer: Rosilee (Signed) · Date: 29/01/08 03:43 AM · On: Run, run as fast as you can

dying for the next chappy here!!

Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 28/01/08 08:34 PM · On: Run, run as fast as you can

"You’re okay when I say you’re okay, an’ right now you’re not," Dean stubbornly declared, using his ‘I’m your big brother and it’s my job to take care of you’ tone of voice.

So very Dean! Great handle on the boys...the dialogue is great. You are doing great!

Aww Man it had to be bees...killer bees no less....ugh inside his mouth... Gonna be hearing buzzing all night now!

Great job! This "player" is really evil! Hesitantly looking forward for what comes next though I am worried for poor Sammy!

Author's Response:

 I'm happy to hear that I am getting the boys right so far, wasn't all that sure about it. Hate bees myself they're always nasty, so I am glad they worked in this situation. Thanks for reading and for the review.

Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 26/01/08 09:27 AM · On: How long can you hold your breath

excellent job. i really liked the mysterious voice, very creepy. Not a good sign that Dean only thinks it was a nightmare. looking forward to more. Bambers;)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. Glad you liked the creepy voice guy and enjoyed the chapter.

Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 25/01/08 09:01 PM · On: How long can you hold your breath

Wow! That was intense and this "player of games" is very scary...something attacking Sam in his dreams...how's Dean gonna fight it?

Can't wait to see where this is going! Great Job!

Author's Response:

I'm so glad to hear you think the story is intense and scary so far. Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 25/01/08 09:49 AM · On: How long can you hold your breath

Very intriguing.  I can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Glad to hear you find the story intriguing so far. More to come soon. Thanks for reading.