Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed)
21/01/08 01:45 PM · On:
good job will be looking out for the next chapter.
Thanks so much for reading. Next chapter is well underway - it's a great incentive knowing all you wonderful readers watching out and waiting.
I appreciate your review very much!
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed)
21/01/08 12:47 PM · On:
Excellent job, Petra. John's heartbreak and fear for Sam is so devastating to witness. it really tears at my heart that he is forced to watch as his son's come up against this evil, and he can do nothing to stop it from happening!! I really love how you are showing this as if it were a movie, and all the demons are cheering Sam's demise along!! thanks so much for sharing!! bambers;)
Thank you so much for your kind words Bambers. Pleased you like my movie theme.
If I'm tearing your heart out, it's coz I learnt from the best oh Queen of-heart-tearing-out!!! lol
Your stars dazzled my day! Thanks heaps.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed)
14/01/08 08:10 PM · On:
Incredible! I can't believe this was your first fanfic. It's wonderful! Your expression of John's emotions and those of his sons as he watches the worst moments of his life are visually descriptive! This is a masterpiece! I can't wait for more!
Thank you so much Shannon, what a wonderful review! I appreciate your comment about my expression and I'm just glowing with all those compliments!!
Reviewer: POOKEE (Signed)
08/01/08 04:13 PM · On:
THIS PIECE IS A BRIGHT INTELLIGENT TAKE ON SOMETHING WE HAVE ALL WONDERED ABOUT AND SHUDDERED AT THE THOUGHT --- HELL. YOU SO BEAUTIFULLY AND AT THE SAME TIME, "TERRIFYINGLY" EXAMINED JOHN'S RELATIONSHIP WITH HIS BOYS. WE HAVE ALL QUESTIONED JOHN'S SOMETIMES PUTTING HIS QUEST FOR THE DEMON BEFORE HIS SONS, BUT THIS FIRST CHAPTER REVEALS THAT, YES JOHN MAY HAVE BEEN MISGUIDED IN HIS QUEST AT TIMES BUT HIS BOYS WITHOUT A DOUBT ARE HIS LOVES - HIS LIFEFORCE, HIS INNER STRENGTH.
AFTER READING THIS CHAPTER, THE FINAL SCENE BETWEEN DEAN AND JOHN IN AHBL2 MAKES PERFECT SENSE. THROUGH JOHN AND DEAN'S EYES AND EXPRESSIONS - THE FATHER IS SO PROUD OF HIS SONS AND SO LOVES THEM AND WITH A SIMPLE NOD GIVES DEAN ALL A FATHER COULD EVER GIVE BACK - LOVE.
YOU HAVE CAPTURED THIS COMPLETELY.
CARRY ON - GREAT WRITING.
Thank-you so much Pookee, what a wonderful review!
John's love has been fierce if not conventional, a fact no one-one on Team Winchester would ever dispute. I'm stoked that you liked this in my work.
"Beautiful and terrifiying" such high praise - I'm glowing!!
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed)
07/01/08 01:10 PM · On:
wow, cookie, this is so awesome. john's emotions are just so raw and powerful. my heart was just literally breaking for him having to watch everything that was going on and having the demons chanting in the background. what an awesome first story and well deserving of a featured stop. look forward to more stories from you. bambers;)
Thanks so much bambers! Such a glowing review from an author of your calibre is to be cherished.
Thanks for your comments about my story being featured, it sure was a buzz! I appreciate you saying how I portrayed John's emotions and how that affected you.
"What an awesome first story" - I'm basking in that comment!
Author's Response: PS And stars! They have added to an already shiny review. Thanks heaps!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed)
07/01/08 01:07 PM · On:
Congratulations on the Featured Cookie, that completely rocks. You're first story huh, well, let me say nice job. Well I mean not nice that John's being tortured,...lol. But your depiction was excellent. Loved that you took the season and twisted it, very cool. I look forward to the next three chapters.
Thanks K! yeah, does rock doesn't it!! Pretty exciting!
Your lovely comments have added to my excitement, thanks so much.
And yeah, not nice for John, and I'm afraid it's not gonna be much better in the next chapter, but hey, no Winchester-pain, no Winchester-gain, right?
Thank you so much for loving the way I had the demons twist the Season for John, that's a great compliment!
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed)
07/01/08 04:05 AM · On:
Honestly, I had been wondering were you had gone to... now it all becomes clear. What is also crystal is what an articulate, talented and creative author you are!
This was amazing, you provide us with an utterly convincing version of John's hell. What else would be fitting for the fallen hunter but to witness the consequences not only of his deal but the path in life he chose for his boys... and not be able to do a damn thing about it. Liked the image and references to watching the scenes like a movie - the twisted hellish version of his life flashing before him? The way his unending torment feeds the evil masses around him is a powerful and disturbing image and I love the way you vary the descriptions of each new torment.
Your description of the boys low moments through their fathers eyes is brilliant work - so emotive, so full of despair and a sense of guilt and shame at his contribution to the horrors in their lives. There were just to many well turned phrases for me to list them all. But this broke my heart: "The laughing of the demons blended with the sobbing of one son and the crooning of the other. John wasn’t sure if he could hear his own sobs or his baby’s, before the demons chanting overtook it all."
The demon re-hash of events was the perfect touch - how the YED reinterpreted the events of WIAWSNB, and twisted his deceptive argument round John's broken heart. “Suicide, John! The coward’s way out. And this is the end he sees fit in his perfect world. Now he’s watching out for Sam, improving his life!”
I can not wait to see what "the best" is - though I fear I know. Your format, tone and timing was right on the money, fitting John's anguished experience perfectly - you leave us in no doubt that for John Winchester this was beyond hell with no glimmer of relief.
Congratulations on your very well deserved feature. It has been an absolute pleasure to write this review, not only because I really did enjoy your inventive first chapter but because as a reviewer you have been such a source of support to other authors (myself amongst them) and taken such care and thought in your praise of them, that ANY opportunity to return that is one to be ceased!!
Looking out for chapter two - goes without saying;-) !!!!
Such a stunning reveiw! Now it's me feeling ten feet tall!! Thank-you SO much for the detail and effort you put into this review, you have left me glowing and speechless!
The two liness you have highlighted were my favs and to know you noticed them enough to quote them is awesome.
Thanks heaps for your high praise, thoughtful comments and congrats *smiling madly*
Author's Response: PS I've just found your stars! Thanks for adding the sparkle!
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed)
06/01/08 11:01 PM · On:
Fantastic job!! What a cool idea.....John's POV from Hell. Love it. Chapter 1 is just GREAT!! Keep up the excellent work!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Another enthusiatic review to make my day!
Yep, the idea of what John was going through played on my mind all through Season Two. I just couldn't imagine such a dynamic character and fierce hunter, not to mention loving father (and I never for once believed John was not!) just laying down and dying, just fading out . His impact on the boys and theirs on him is just too significant to be ignored.
Thanks for your comment "cool idea", I'm thrilled that so many readers have agreed with me and wondered the same!!
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed)
06/01/08 12:29 PM · On:
After all your awesome reviews and seeing your great critical eye for detail and deep understanding of emotions and motivations HOW COULD I EVER EXPECTED ANTYTHING LESS THAN THIS AWESOME STORY!!!
Wow, a review in caps, thank-you Jude! I am stunned at your lovely comment. You have put a big smile on my face that I don't think I'll be able to wipe off for hours!
I'm so grateful to you for your advice and encouragement to "have a go." Thank-you so much.
Author's Response: PS Jude! Stars! Your words were enough, your stars are extra special! Thank-you very much!
Reviewer: Dewyeyed (Signed)
06/01/08 10:19 AM · On:
WOW!!!!!!!! I was in hell right beside John, what a genius piece of writing. I can't believe this is your first attempt. Such detail that everytime the fire flared up at John I found myself getting hot!!!
It has a poetic flow to it that just wraps you in its words. I could see and feel everything that Papa Winchester was going through, the poor man.
Beautiful, scary dark hell;) well done
Author's Response: Thanks for such an enthusiatic review! I'm stoked that you found yourself living the story, that's a fantastic compliment. Your thoughts about the way I wrote are much appreciated!
Author's Response: PS Your stars Rock!! Thanks heaps!
Reviewer: cowgirlfromhell (Signed)
06/01/08 01:13 AM · On:
I usually don't read more than a few lines of other author's work (fear of inadvertently using someone else's ideas) but today I'm breaking my own rule. Your story reached out, grabbed me and held on tightly until I finished. Exceptional piece of writing! I can not wait to read the rest. Brava!
What a huge compliment! "...reached out, grabbed me and held on tightly until I finished" is a phemonenal accolade in itself, but in light of your rule, it is exceptional. I'm honored that you decided to break your rule for my story, can't get bigger than that!
Thank-you very much.
Author's Response: PS Stars! Added to that awesome review I'm feeling very spoiled! Thanks heaps!
Reviewer: catchme21 (Signed)
06/01/08 12:54 AM · On:
Holy darkness! Always wondered what hell was like for poor John, he spent a whole year there.
Awesome start! Wouldn't be able to tell this was your first. :)
Looking forward to more!!
"Hoy darkness" !! What a wonderful, appropriate comment! I just love this site - the reviews reflect the creative genius as much as the stories!
Thanks heaps for your encouragement. I particularly appreciate all the comments about this being my first attempt at fic. I feel braver to continue with the next chapters...
Author's Response: PS Holy brightness! Your stars are beautiful! Thanks so much!
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed)
05/01/08 06:16 PM · On:
Cookie -- so very well done. First fic or no... I felt myself curling in, collapsing inside, felt my mouth turn down in a frown as I knew what was coming, what John was made to witness...
What an excellent premise, and as this is a four-chapter story, my imagination is rampant on where you're taking us in the next three. I look forward to more.
Gaelic, to get a review from you is just awesome. You know how I feel about your work, so to know you are reading just blew me away.
Thanks so much for letting me know how my writing affected you and you liked the plot idea. It's an awesome feeling to affect an audience - one I didn't understand until now. How exciting that I'm making the imagination of an author of your high regard rampant!!
And chapter one is just the warm up...
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed)
05/01/08 04:42 PM · On:
Despite all the work of being an admin around here- one of the rare perks is being able to read stories from new writers before anyone else- when I read this one- ealier today- I knew it would be a hit- which is why I Featured it - glad to see I wasnt wrong- and wasnt alone in my opinion --
Great work Cookie - you certainly got off to a fantastic start!
Thanks so much Tree, I'm overwhelmed and honored that you featured my story. I'm so excited, I've been on a high all day!
You reviewing alone is a compliment and I appreciate your comments very much.
As always, thanks to you and the Admin team on all the work you behind the scenes. I don't take it for granted one bit.
Reviewer: staffy08 (Signed)
05/01/08 03:57 PM · On:
Before you read this Petra I should warn you that I'm no where near as good at reviews as you are... that said here it is.
Absolutely loved it, it's awesome from begining till end, not to mention beautifully written. I can't wait to read more. A well deserved Feature Story! :)
No warning needed Merrie! I'm just loving your comments and support!
Thanks for your wonderful words and your congrats. I'm so overwhelmed by the feedback I've received and your review is icing on the cake.
Author's Response: PS Your shiny stars are awesome Merrie! Thanks for making my day!
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed)
05/01/08 03:06 PM · On:
wow this is good! can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind words. I really appreciate your interest and enjoyment.
Author's Response: PS Stars! They light up your review and I'm glowing! Thanks soo much!
Reviewer: Geena (Signed)
05/01/08 03:05 PM · On:
Wow, that was beautifully written. What a way to start out. I can't wait to read more. :)
Your review has me smiling madly! Thanks for such high praise, I'm really glad you enjoyed reading!
Reviewer: birdie (Signed)
05/01/08 02:45 PM · On:
Your story resonates with the tender cadence of John's breaking heart.
Desolation, loss and despair, it's throbbing pulse.
It is both bleak and beautiful, cruel and cathartic and magnificent!
Wow Bev, you have the tone of my story in a nutshell. This is exactly what I was aiming for.
Thanks for such a beautiful, descriptive review. I am honored that so many high caliber authors have responed and are liking my work.
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed)
05/01/08 02:41 PM · On:
wow this is fantastic please update soon.
Thank you so much for reading and leaving me a review. 'wow' and 'fantastic' just made my day! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed)
05/01/08 02:30 PM · On:
BRAVO!!! Petra, the correlation to being in a theatre with the special presentation absolutely brilliant. From opening scene to end credits, I absolutely loved it. You more than exceeded my expectations.
John’s devastation at being forced to watch those he loves being destroyed, living the worst parts of their lives, the “audience” reactions as the scene played out, his front row seat, so amazing.
“For the umpteenth time in eternity, John collapsed inside himself, crying his pain, frustration and torment in silent tears. His mind tried to shut off, to disappear, to hit the mute button since the off button was non existent. But for the umpteenth time in eternity, the demonic plague hit the replay button and Hell became the box office hit with John the sole audience.”
My heart broke with John’s watching Dean, knowing family was Dean’s life.
“John wrapped his arms around himself in an unconscious gesture of supporting Dean. He knew that Sam’s indifference, indeed his cold disregard, would be tearing Dean apart, that this was the ultimate torture for his boy.”
Although rarely seen, we know John loved his sons, and believed he was doing the right thing by them, doing the best he could. Trying to keep them safe and protect them, even dying for them. Hell would indeed play upon these emotions, twisting, taunting, trying to destroy the man.
I can’t wait for the rest of the story. Welcome aboard to the ranks dear. Congrats on the feature selection as well.
Wow Crystal, what a wonderful review. I'm blown away! I appreciate every single thing you said. Thanks heaps for showing me the parts that worked for you.
I wholeheartedly agree with everything you said about John - one die hard John fan spotting another a mile away!
Thanks for your support and encouragement, your little 'shoves' worked wonders!
Author's Response: PS Your stars are the icing on this beautiful reveiw cake Crystal! Thanks so much!
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed)
05/01/08 02:27 PM · On:
What a terrific first start! You've done a wonderful job of tormenting John - the imagery really comes through, especially by robbing his perception of season 2 events of any of the upside. Certainly our boys have a , shall we say, less than charmed existence, but there is certainly a strength of bond and underlying love between them (wouldn't Dean just gag at that description). Edit that out, and a view to their lives is devastating. Great job!
Thanks for such a thoughtful comment. Yep, without the good, the bad is very ugly isn't it?! And yeah, Dean would gag at that description but he would be grinning on the inside!!
I really appreciate your encouragement and praise, thanks so much for reading.
Author's Response: PS Thanks so much for your stars! Your review was shiny enough, but your stars are an extra treat!
Reviewer: fantasycatcher (Signed)
05/01/08 01:55 PM · On:
Congratulations!!! You're an author. Yay;) and have a feature.
Ahhh Pet, I am choking up right now. You've been such a loyal, dedicated reader and reviewer for so long and now you have your own story up *reaches for the tissues*
You deserve to get loads of props for this because it rocks big time. I love the way you showed us everything that has happened in season two through the demon with his own worped notion of what each boy is thinking just to torture John.
Your depiction of hell was absolutely breath takingly AWESOME!!! I can't believe you've kept such talent to yourself for so long. I anxiously wait for the next chapter...I applaud you on this masterpiece!!!!
Thanks heaps for everything you said about me, very nice *bashful smile*
Your comments about my writing are much appreciated. I'm honored by your huge praise "breath takingly awesome'!!
Ta for your cute smiley face too!
Yay! I so excited that my story's featured!!
Author's Response: PS How could I not see your stars? Stars from the madgirl are extra blingy!! Thanks heaps!
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed)
05/01/08 01:55 PM · On:
Ahhh, Petra, this was wonderful! Sadly, I'm not as good at doing reviews as you are.
You portray, and describe, the torment of Hell quite well, scarily well. I certainly can feel everything that John is feeling--how agonizing it is for him to see everything that is happening to his boys throughout Season 2. And the demon peanut gallery providing such unwelcome commentary is great.
Terrific job! Can't wait for your next chapter. Congratulations on your first story!
Wow Ness *madly smiling* What a wonderful review! I'm very glad that you could feel everything John went through - mission accomplished!
Love the term "demon peanut gallery' - that's exactly what they are!! Such rotten peanuts!!
Thanks for all your chats and encouragement, I really appreciate you.
Author's Response: PS Ness! Stars from you are such treasure! Thanks soo much!
Reviewer: bayre (Signed)
05/01/08 01:49 PM · On:
What a great start! This is definately very unique.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. To get two lovely compliments from an author I admire is awesome!
Reviewer: lekelly (Signed)
05/01/08 01:26 PM · On:
Petra, like lou i am very proud of you. This a wonderful story, knew you could do it. As i told you anyone who can write reviews like the ones you give can write a good story. roll on next ch. Oh bugger lou beat me to be first to review lol.
You were the first one to give me encouragement and just to bounce my ideas off you was the kick start my muse and I needed. Your praise is treasured. Thank-you so much.
And yes, you DID say that, way back...
Author's Response: PS I've just found your stars! Thanks so much! Lekelly stars are such high quality!