Reviewer: Harlech (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 11:59 AM · On: Chapter 3
Now that's cruel - leaving us hanging on the edge and vanishing for three weeks... This is a real cool concept of John's time in Hell and I'm enjoying it very much. Looking forward to the final chapter and anything else you will be writing!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review and stars, I love it! Yeah, sorry about that, leaving you on the edge. I have most of ch 4 plotted out, and I'll give writing it my priority once I get back. But meanwhile, shopping overseas and visiting all those new places and people...what can I say?!?! I really appreciate your comment about my plot concept and I'm thrilled your enjoying my story. And I basking in your shiny stars - thank you.
Reviewer: Geena (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 10:12 AM · On: Chapter 3
Wow... Once again that was a great chapter. I felt everything John was feeling.. Last part had me all fired up ready for the fight. Can't wait for the next chapter. Have fun overseas. :)
Author's Response: Ok, another hunter girl to go on a vengence mission with Bullet and Gaelic!! I loved writing that last part. The real John Winchester ready for the fight! Not to mention, easy to imagine that gorgeous man's body and face as he got angry. That saying 'Dont get mad, get even' just pops into mind! Glad you like it. Thanks heaps for your great review.
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 07:04 AM · On: Chapter 3
An amazing chapter, Petra. Wonderfully presented. You had me in tears at Sam's death (never fails). They really started to fall hard when you talked about Dean rocking his brother and how many times he'd done that in the past, only this time Sammy wasn't aware that he was safe in his brother's arms. (Geez, I'm tearing up just writing THAT.) I'm honored that you asked to include my poem. Have a fantastic time on your trip, and I look forward to your next chapter.
Author's Response: I knew I'd get to you Ness! And I could nearly bet which bits too! Yeah, that rocking scene is a heartbreaker. When I wrote it, it felt the right way to go, how each Winchester would react to it, would feel about it, would understand its significance. Your poem is just perfect for this chapter. As i said when i asked to use it, it was like you were in my head when I was writing, it reflected my scene exactly. It is me who is honored to use it. Thanks so much. Thanks for your stars and happy wishes for my trip.
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 07:01 AM · On: Chapter 3
WOW,brilliant,very very exciting.you had me on the edge of my seat.also very sad,needed lots of tissues,loved it when john went ballistic,i'll be waiting for update,hope you have fun overseas.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review. and John isn't finished yet... I sure will have fun overseas!! I'll get stuck into ch4 as soon as i get back. With all you readers saying such nice things and waiting for my update, I can't let you all down.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 3
Said it before Petra and I'll say it again, this is the most powerful chapter yet. The constant taunting and ridiculing of John by the demonic hoard is spiralling upwards to a crescendo of epic proportions...but the bit that hit me the hardest...the bit that had had me on the verge...were the images fed to John about the failings of his his eldest. For them to target Dean, the strongest and most dedicated protector and drag him down to their level made me fume. I felt like marching in there myself and having a few quiet words. Roll on the next chapter Petra and keep up the great work on this story...and Ness's poem was the icing on a very tasty cake...lol
Author's Response: Bulletbabe locked and loaded ready to march into Hell! If you just pick up Gaelic on you way through it looks like we have the beginnings of a hunter-girl army!! You saying that this is a powerful chapter is high accolades and I feel very flattered. I love your description of Dean, thats what makes caning him by Evil and Co such an effective a weapon of choice against John. It was very depressing to write it. Thanks heaps for your stars...or are they ninja throwing weapons for that you're taking with you ??
Reviewer: lekelly (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 05:00 AM · On: Chapter 3
Oh Petra that was totally heartbreaking.. But wonderfully written . Well done
Author's Response: Thank you Lorraine. Yours stars have made me smile as well. Yes, for John to watch it all from Hell could only be heartbreaking, and then add the demon-torture factor and I really didn't have a choice where to take this... Thanks so much for your comment about how I wrote it, you really made my day!
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 11:04 PM · On: Chapter 3
As usual, it was so so intense!! And i love every minute of it.......and when you wrote the scene with Sam dying, it kinda breaks my heart all over again........... He's going to know about Dean's deal won't he?? It'll break his heart more......i think..... Hope you have a nice holiday... :)
Author's Response: I'm so glad your loving every minute of my story. And your stars are much appreciated. There is no other way to portray Sam's death other that heartbreaking is there? Watching it, reading it, writing it... Yeah, John's in for a bit more torture yet... Thanks for your kind wishes re my trip. We've got a stop over in your part of the world, so I'll think of you when we're there!! Thanks so much for dropping me a review.
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 09:24 PM · On: Chapter 3
I'll be here end of Feb or any other time you post more of this - this story conitinues to be wonderful, a raw look at John and the emotions all the Winchesters hide so well. A great read.
Author's Response: Thanks heaps for your encouragement Angela. Hell and its cronies are giving our Winchesters such hard time with their relentless tirade that raw emotions have to come out. I'm really glad you liked that in my story. I really appreciate you staying for the long haul.
Reviewer: bayre (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 07:13 PM · On: Chapter 3
Very nice, and what a great poem Vanessa did for you. Laura
Author's Response: Thanks Laura! And hey, more stars - I sure need their happy light after the dark doom and gloom of Hell where I've been residing while writing this! And isn't Ness's poem perfect! I had just edited my "death" scene when Vanessa sent it as a treat and couldn't believe my eyes - it was like she was in my head!! Thanks for reading and reviewing Laura.
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 05:03 PM · On: Chapter 3
Woman, you are destroying me. You better have a way out of this pit because I don't think I could take more. While I started this expecting to be devestated for John, I found a huge sense of unfairness climbing up from my gut as the demons taunted John with images of Dean "leaving his post." I wanted to yell at them/him. Tell him that it's not fair -- no one can hold the constant vigilance that he demanded. You can be there and turn your back on life, or you can live and do your best. And how come Dean's not allowed to live? To have those encounters and those guilty pleasures. It just burned me up how evil can twist need into something dirty when all it is is human. God, see? You got me all worked up. And when the moment came and Sam died, I had a hard time swallowing. I still can't rewatch that scene to this day. Dean's desperation, his agony, his denial, his pain just rocks through me and I can't breathe. I knew it was coming in your story and almost read with my fingers over my eyes. So... c'mon -- throw me a rope. Get me outta here...
Author's Response: Oh dear Gaelic, to cause to you to read with your fingers over your eyes!! I agree with everything you write, but hey, the aim of the YED and his pack of hyenas is to torture John into eternity... It was actually very draining to write this chapter. As for watching the scene of Sam's death, I watched it over and over to get the cadence and details right for this ch, so I've been a real mess! And that scene NEVER gets easier... Yes, I will throw you a rope and haul you out, but Hell hasn't finished with John quite yet, so I'm just gunna dangle that rope outta your reach for a bit... Thanks for reading and reviewing, despite the fact that I'm traumatizing you!!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 30/01/08 08:57 AM · On: Chapter 2
Incredible. Your descriptive word make me feel like I'm really there instead of in my lounge chair. Love it!!
Author's Response: Hey Shannon, thank for your wonderful feedback. Glad you're enjoying. "Love It" is very nice to know!
Reviewer: Roguehunter (Signed) · Date: 27/01/08 01:39 AM · On: Chapter 2
The descriptions you have in this story are just amazing. I can feel John's fears as the demons torment him. So horrible that he is forced to watch what is happening to Sam and Dean and is unable to do anything about it. I really love how you have made this seem like he is watching a movie, very original and inventive on your part. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review. You have made my day with your glowing comments. Unfortunately the demons haven't finished with John yet! Again, many thanks!
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 24/01/08 03:15 AM · On: Chapter 2
Wow...that is intense.....especially coming from John's POV..although i kind of think that Dean would know that it's do-or-die with Sam's destiny....... I can't wait to read the next chapter... :)
Author's Response: Yeah, but the demons are making sure John knows it too! Thanks heaps for your review. Glad you found the ride intense, that's my aim! Your stars are shiny and beautiful, thanks so much.
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed) · Date: 23/01/08 03:47 AM · On: Chapter 2
Cookie, WOW!! I don’t even know where to start. To be fighting every kind of evil for so many years and it comes down to what humanity does to itself. Faith in others is not a fault, but it comes back to bite you in the ass time after time. To be forced to watch his youngest go through this alone, has to be heartbreaking. Of course John has to know Dean would never abandon his brother regardless of what his tormenters say. Finding out Sam was the favored had to be overwhelming, knowing him to be specifically targeted by evil for their own purpose. It is so painful to see the depths of John’s despair, not being able to protect your children is every parents worst nightmare. You have taken us to the very core of John’s soul, love of his sons, fear of what his failure has meant, anger at not being there to save them. This is so emotional and powerful. Crystal
Author's Response: WOW yourself!! What an awesome reveiw, you have delved so deeply into the concept and your feelings about it, and I thank you for that. Everything you said is in my mind as I am writing this story, the evil twist on the interpretation Hell is presenting to John is the point. So again, my thanks. Your stars and your comments humble me, my friend.
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 22/01/08 07:36 PM · On: Chapter 2
oh my God, Petra..Your story leaves me feeling wrung out, worn out and weak...Such turbulence of thought and action....Like a vortex I'm caught in along with John.....Hearing the Demon's voice inside my head (just as he spoke in AHBL as you quote his words perfectly............ Glad you didn't start writing earlier...No t sure I could have survived this long....
Author's Response: Oh no Jude! Although I'm stoked I've sucked you into the vortex of my story (and that phrase rocks girl!) I sure don't want to kill you...especially not before the end of my story!! I'll have a posse of Hunter Girls after my tail if I harm you!! Hang in there girl!! Thanks so much for your stars, I cherish them coz they're from you!!
Reviewer: bayre (Signed) · Date: 22/01/08 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 2
Meat Loaf is my absolute favorite! What a great chapter Petra! Good job. Laura
Author's Response: Me too! I have seen him in concert three times!!! I actually play "Bat out of Hell" before I work on this story. The way the tempo builds and slows guides me a bit, not to mention those lyrics... Thanks for your praise, from you its very precious. Your stars shine on your words and light them up for me!
Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 22/01/08 08:36 AM · On: Chapter 1
I would have never known that this was your first fanfiction. This was a very well written chapter. I love your writing style. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Wow, your review blew me away. Such high accolades, I'm basking in your words. Thanks heaps!
Reviewer: lekelly (Signed) · Date: 22/01/08 07:35 AM · On: Chapter 2
wow Petra that was brilliant could see the whole chapter playing inside my head. Well done. Lorraine
Author's Response: A nicer compliment can't be paid than saying you could see my ch playing in your head! And your 'brilliant' has put a smile on my face that won't say die. Thanks for your review and your 'brilliant' stars!
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 22/01/08 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 2
this is a fantastic chapter,you kept the tension going from start to finish.thought i was going to explode.awesome more please.
Author's Response: That I led you to nearly exploding is such a cool comment! That really showed me that my tension worked!! Thanks for your review, I really appreciate that you're reading and enjoying.
Reviewer: catchme21 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 2
Oh man, this chapter was so dark I can hardly see my hand in front of my face. I could just see a large gathering of demons, cheering on the view like a demented football game, and John helpless to watch his team lose. Awesome update Cookie!! I'm loving this first story of yours, and I can't wait to see what you come up with next!!
Author's Response: Well I can see your hands (very cool comment by the way!) coz your glowing stars are very bright!! Thanks so much for them! 'A demented football game' - what a wonderful analogy, and yeah, Team Winchester are down. Will they put points on the board in the next chapter...??? I'm really happy that you're loving my fic - thanks SO much for the lovely review.
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 2
Have you ever heard Carmen's "The Champion?" It's a Christian story/song, but as I was reading this chapter, listening to the demons and the devils taunt and tease John, torturing him with their twisted view of the truth, that song echoed in my head. Nicely done, lady. I checked back often to see if you'd updated, and you didn't disappoint with this. I look forward to the next part.
Author's Response: Wow, Gaelic, I went and did some research after I read your review on Carman, read heaps and then found his song you refer to on YouTube. What an AMAZING vid!!! The words, the visuals, the music, the concept...I was truly blown away. And I could hear it echoing in the background of my story, Thanks so much for pointing me in Carman's direction, but more, thanks for the honor of relating my story to it. Your comment that my update didn't disappoint made my day, especially from you.
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 04:42 PM · On: Chapter 2
Absolutely awesome update, Petra! My oh my, the peanut gallery is very good at tormenting. The heartbreak John feels when he figures out that one piece of the puzzle that he could never before grasp is so sad and telling. This is exactly like watching AHBL from John's POV and I'm reacting to it just the same as I did when I watched it. I'm watching my Season 2 DVDs that I got for Christmas and I'll be thinking of your fic soon when I get to AHBL (which won't be long since I just finished Heart this morning). :-)
Author's Response: Hello Vanessa! I knew you would spot my little tribute to you! I'm so pleased that you see the impact of the puzzle piece because my intent was/is (next ch too) to make that a focal point for the demons to bury John. Your comment that this feels 'exactly like watching AHBL from John's pov' made my day. That you are reacting to it like you are is no surprise to me - i know how each eppie impacts so deeply on you at different levels. Enjoy your DVD's! Lucky they take a hiding before they wear out!! Your stars are beautiful, thank you!
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 2
Cookie. This is a fascinating chapter, I feel like I'm in a daemonic locker room with the team of dumb, though powerfully violent daemon jocks. They are expertly and amusingly coached by the head bastard, Yellow Eyes, and he is the sinister and witty brains behind Team Hell. Wonderfully original The pace, flow, cadence has changed from one of bone wearying despair to that of gut wrenching terror, it's somehow hotter more airless in this next phase hades! "the talons of hellfire scratching at his muddled mind." Love this it's savage and raw and cruel! And love the vultures so apt! Next chapter please Bev xx
Author's Response: Bev! Wow! what a review! LOVED the locker room analogy! clever! I might see what I can do with that... I'm so grateful for your deep critiquing of the change in emotions and pace as my story progresses - this was the first scribble I made in my notes before I wrote this ch!!" Thanks for quoting a line that caught your attention, I loved the 'savage and raw and cruel' comment - Hell to the core! And i can't get a little vulture icon a little Birdie sent me post-ch1 outta my head when I re-read my vulture scene!
Reviewer: fantasycatcher (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 03:41 PM · On: Chapter 2
Pet you have produced another strong chapter full of visual torment. Poor John, I felt for him. Guilt overpowering everything else, having to watch his boys go through pain that he can't stop. Loved it and can't wait for more;)More stars for you! Schelz
Author's Response: Hey Schelz, loved your review, thanks heaps! To know you are feeling weighed down by John's guilt means you are deep into my story and I love it that my story does that to you. If only you knew how much your words 'strong chapter full of visual torment' mean to me - you energize and inspire me! And with your stars that energy ramps up to Energizer Bunny status!!!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 02:16 PM · On: Chapter 2
It's always such a tribute to a piece of writing when it gets better with every read and I'm so happy to say this does. There are just so many layers of angst and deep emotion woven together with guilt, frustration and horror..all wraped up in such a powerful visual image of the demons tearing at John's soul. Every time I read it I see a new angle! Fantastic work Petra and thanks for the lovely nod, but this is ALL your own work and talent, and I'm in awe of it...Well done my friend, nothing less than 10/10 will do.
Author's Response: Ah Louy! What an awesome thing to say that you find a new angle in my ch and it gets better everytime you read - huge compliment! As a writer to be inspired by you are amazing, as a beta to bounce ideas off you are the best, as a friend and confidant who gives encouragement and friendship unconditionally, you are awesome. I'm glowing under your shiny stars!! Thank you!
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