Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 12/01/08 08:22 PM · On: Chapter 4 War Games

Oh no, I guess this is where it starts to get really painful, in more ways than one!  Dean was never going to fit in comfortably at Stanford but I never saw Sam and Dean facing off against each other, coming.  I just can't see Dean being able to really lay into Sam, or vice versa, either way there's some major guilt on its way.

I loved the way they both met Jessica, nicely done and the Dirty Dancing coment was priceless!!

Very much looking forward to the next chapter, although I think it's going to make me sad to see them fight.  We know the separation is coming and it's bound to be brutal.   For Dean to drive away and leave Sam to his new life, something pretty drastic is going to have to happen, so I guess we're not in for a happy ending on this one.   Loving the Story.  Jane

Author's Response:

As always really happy to see this worked for you, thanks for letting me know which parts in particular. I couldn't resist the Jessica part, as there is just something about Dean's reaction to her in the pilot that hints at something a little more than Dean being Dean with the ladies. 

I agree the bond the boys share make this time, and the separation even more difficult, Sam is struggling without Dean, but when big brother comes back and needs him he is willing to give up all the inroads he has managed to make...  i.e. friendships with Owen and Thomas. 

Really happy you’re enjoying this and always appreciate hearing what you think.

Abi 

 

Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/08 07:26 PM · On: Chapter 4 War Games

ahhhhh omgggg...why does sammy haveta be so serious:( all dean was doing was protectiing him...i see Sam's point though...it's just Dean's...well Dean lolll can't wait to see what happens next...like i really can't wait...so..plz...plz...post next chapt soon:D

Author's Response:

I know!!!! Super serious Sammy... the boy has issues!!!! I am glad that both sides of the arguement worked though as it is something that generates tension between the brothers in the story. I didn't want Sammy to come off as too much of a spoilt brat. 

Thank you for keeping with the story and for all the exclaimation marks!!!!!!!! :-)

Hope the next chapter is worth the wait... am working on it! Thanks for the review.

Abi. 

 

Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 27/12/07 09:07 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing

You've really captured the terror and horror in Dean's flashback, somehow there's such a sense that it's all gone horribly wrong without Sam's presence.  I love the humour (particularly the joining a daemon worshipping cult line) amidst all the pain, suffering and angst.  I'm very much looking forward to the next one.  Thanks  J.

Author's Response:

*Grins* I am really happy the humour worked, I love Dean's snarkyness (new word fit for a Dean!). You hope that when you are trying to capture it, you aren't going overboard or missing the mark completely. 

When I imagine the Stanford years for Dean I always see a black hole. Sam was part of a small, tight knit unit, with his brother and his father; they must each have had their role to play. John and Dean strike me as shoot first types in comparison to Sam, and I am sure they suffered for the lack of his influence on hunts.

So enough with the deep meaningful psycho-babble, I am just thrilled you are enjoying this and look forward to hearing your thoughts on Chapter four!!!!

Abi. 

Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 27/12/07 08:33 PM · On: Man Down!

A thoroughly gripping start, the build up of tension and panic was intense.  Sam's constant anger at John and his terror at the thought of losing Dean were such an accurate insight into what Sam would have gone through.  Beautifully done.  J

Author's Response:

Thank you for your kind review, I was really happy that you thought my version of Sam at this time was accurate. I was debating if I had done a little too much "John bashing". But I kept coming back to that line from John; if Sam left he should "stay gone". How could you not get hurt by that?  The Winchester's world is one big irony to Sam, what other families would be celebrating and throwing parties for, his family marginalizes or considers selfish. They really aren't the Brady's are they?!!!

Thanks again for taking the time to read and review. Abi. 

Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 25/12/07 05:13 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing

Wonderful stuff. I'm of the opinion that D couldn't have stayed away from s fro four years anyway so going to S was a GOOD move!

Thanks for the new chapter!

Dix 

Author's Response:

Your very welcome, thank you for sharing your thoughts on Christmas day - hope you enjoyed the holiday.

I completely agree with you - no way such an awesome brother was ever going to stay away and keep Sam unprotected for so long. If you think, looking out for Sam had been Dean's mission since he was four, how do you give that up cold, even following the messiest of arguments? I have two younger brothers - both MONSTER pains sometimes, but I know that I could never just leave them to it. (And I don't have the Marine Daddy or paramilitary training!! )

Glad your still enjoying it Dix, working away at chapter four.

Abi. 

Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 25/12/07 08:12 AM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing

Well, i have no problem with your formatting...it's fine...not all over the place...

“Yeah… Dad did, I was… indisposed (rolling on the ground screaming).”

“So how did you get (ditched) separated from (that careless bastard) dad?”

I also like the way you actually write some of the words in brackets to express the real meaning of what they were actually saying...kinda see beneath the surface what actually happened.

Can't wait for the next chapter... 

Author's Response:

Your sweet - thank you, but I had a few medium sized gremlins going there, with the formatting, that it did not seem to spoil your read makes me feel better about it.

Glad the beneath the surface stuff worked for you. I often find one of the most amazing things about the work of the SN writers is what they leave unsaid, how it speaks volumes about their characters and gives them such depth. For me (when I take a small break from ogling the prettiness that is Jared and Jensen) the actors give such a great performance that they make it real easy to pick up this non-verbal, beneath the surface stuff. They both are great actors.

Thank you for the review - hope you continue to enjoy the next chapter.

Abi. 

Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 24/12/07 12:59 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing

good job

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing, I hope you continue to enjoy this.

 

Abi 

Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 10:01 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac

Great chapter! I'm really enjoying this. You had me a little worried at first that Dean wasn't actually hurt but had gotten drunk and taken a bunch of vicodin... looking forward to Owen's reaction to the "real" world....

Author's Response:

*Smiles* I am so happy that you seem to be enjoying this story - multi chapters are fun to write, though challenging to keep the interest and tension going in each chapter. 

I did toy with the idea of Dean plus pills and alcohol for about two seconds, but something monumental would have had to occur, for him to willing leave Sam unprotected and alone. 

Hope to have Ch 3 up soon.

Abi.

 

Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 04:20 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac

very good update, better formatting, keep up the good work, looking forward for next chapter...

Author's Response:

Thanks for the praise - I am really pleased that you are enjoying the story. I am continuing to do battle with my computer!!! Thanks for your patience. Next chapter on it's way.

Abi. 

Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 02:20 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac

Oh, a third by Christmas, I'm gonna hold you to that.  Great chapter, loving Sam's inner dialog and I can't wait to see WTF is going on. 

Terrific job - K

Author's Response:

Thank you K for all the support and advice. Chapter three is churning along nicely - hopefully the posting goes more smoothly.  Really pleased that your liking the Sammy-ness, as I find it more of a challenge... being more of a Dean girl!

Abi. 

Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac

This is really great.

I love Sam talking to himself, and still getting into the argument stage-great writing!!!!!

Sam's slipping back into his "old" mode- truly well done and only adding to the story.

The complication of the roommate- non existant- Dean still remains Sam's first concern.You have captured the Winchester way- OUTSTANDING!!!!!

Again, I ask...MORE PLEASE!!!!!!

BRAVO!!!!!

Author's Response: *Big GRIN* I kind of see Sam as the argumentative type, despite what Dean says about their roles in Wendego. Besides their bickering is just way too much fun - even when one is unconscious !!!  I am trying to post Chapter three as soon as I can... seeing as you asked so nicely!!:-)

Reviewer: brookiwinchester (Signed) · Date: 12/12/07 12:30 PM · On: Man Down!

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BUNNI LUVS IT

Author's Response: LOL - Hell ! Anything to keep Bunni happy! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 11/12/07 06:53 PM · On: Man Down!

From my point of view it's going really well..lol. 

Loved "If Sam had weathered the storm, that was their lives on the road as part of John Winchester’s baggage, it was because Dean was standing in front of him, facing off against the elements."  That's gotta be one of the best descriptives I've read concerning the boys relationship.  Loved it.

My only complaint and it's a tiny one at that was the formatting.  It made it very difficult to read.  Otherwise great job and I look forward to finding out just what happened to Dean - K

Author's Response:

*Grin* Well that's alright then!!! ;-) Thank you for the review and the suggestions - hope to clear up technical difficulties before next chapter. Thank you for the huge compliment on the descriptive, I am so glad you are enjoying this.

Abi