Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 12:56 PM · On: Chapter 4 War Games
"How would we explain what looks like Yogi’s attempt to tickle you?!” Ha freaking ha! The encounter with Jess and her panties is sweet and vulnerable and cute! "as if the tiger had broken free of the jungle, and was chilling in the penguin enclosure. Watching Dean now, Sam realised something; his big brother was only twenty three years old, and since the age of four, had never been a day younger than thirty. Dean had watched out for Sam his whole life, never complaining once about it. The question was – who was watching out for Dean?" Lovely! penguin enclosure! you're seriously wierdly random Hun and I feel a strange if freaky affection for the edge your humour live on! love Dean tormenting Owen, boy that man is so hot when he's being a total git! Oh and God the Dirty Dancing scene is just a classic No one puts baby in the corner! ha frigging Ha! Loving it! bev x
Author's Response: I could not resist the Jessica moment - thumbs up from Big brother. It always seemed in the pilot that there is a moment when Dean sees Jessica, it's more than the usual Dean female appreciation response... he teases his brother, but seems happy for him too. (Well in my head anyway) Not quite sure what beamed the penguin- tiger thing to me, but it is a (sometimes) regular occurrence, I am just glad someone else gets it!!:-) Evil, bully boy Dean is interesting isn't he - I think he was trying to separate Owen from Sam, dreading that kind of influence. But then again Dean doing just about anything is worthy of deep deep contemplation, and lusty ogling (uh...hmmm!!!) *goes off to have a cold shower before reading on* Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 12:38 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing
Me again Hunny! No don't worry I'm not a stalker, just loving this so doing the every chapter thing! "This argument had deeply effected Dean (that was his name), who was a sensitive soul" Oh that's priceless, Abi, because, though Dean'd kill me for saying it but he so IS sensitive! "he knew he needed to patch up Dean’s body… cause God knew the older man’s mind was the work of a life time." So true! but i'd be really up for the job! i love the whole cry, laugh, vomit together scenario you've got going on here Hunny, it's making me snort and hiccup in an embarassingly unladylike fashion! "“Let’s not forget that I am also fast and scary good.” Dean tried for cocky." Might I add gorgeous, wonderful and Hot just for the record? Abi, the passages describing the black dog attack in the cave are graphicaly vivid (appropriately and frighteningly so). And then's there's this line "Sam was sure he had slipped into some alternative world, where his unbreakable brother, had actually, just shattered in his hands." That takes me fight back to tears. This is really good, it's pacy, and complex and funny too. (oh and OK I'll fess up - I adore hurt and panicky Dean and strong supportive Sammy! hot!) Bev x Bev x Bev xx
Author's Response: Stalk away lady... your reviews are such a joy to read!!!! I totally agree, Dean's hard-case persona and all that dry humor only serves to hide that little boy who gave up everything that was his to give, for his family. Yeah Dean may not like us for thinking it, but it is one of the big reasons that we like him so much... beautiful, broken man that he is!!! How fantastic - "snort and hiccup" responses are so honest!!! They might be as big a compliment as the stars!!!! Again thanks for sharing what is going right with this chapter - I was worried I'd tried to cram too much in here, but it is a pretty tense situation. Very glad the Dog attack was frightening, as it had to be at least believably traumatic to push Dean over like this. When I was re-reading this the whole Sam comforting Dean was a nice twist for me - and the more fragile Dean became and the more Sam stepped up to the job... the more entertaining I fond it ... you really learn about yourself doing this don't you? Twisted - who knew?!!! LOL. Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 12:13 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac
Abi. I'm doing the chapter by chapter thing as I so love it when readers do it for me! (yup, I'm a delinquent review slut!) "To Sam’s ears, it was a God damned symphony!" There is a sense of relief in these few words that leaps of the page at me. Urgent and raw! I really like this chapter, the irritated, (fear driven) rage that Sam has for Dean is spot on and the quirky funny references as Sam drags the uncooperative Dean to his room are wonderful highlights to the surreality of the situation. I'm realed in Hun! Onto chapter three for me! Bev xx
Author's Response: The Chapter by chapter thing, is something I adore!!!! So Review slut huh? Wow there is a NAME for my condition???!!!! LOL!! Again glad the humor pieces worked for you, I thought that I needed to throw in a little light as I wasn't sure at this point how dark this was going to get. I thought this situation for Sam, would be completely off the map ... Alice in Wonderland stuff, not just because he has taken on Dean's role but because he is trying so hard to fit in as normal and because Dean seems to be acting in a totally irresponsible way... which goes against his genetic make up!!!! Glad you are liking - racing on to catch you up!!! Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 12:02 PM · On: Man Down!
Abi, Me again! Going for your longer story now after devouring your one shots! " silver spoon and cashmere diapers" very cool description! You like to feast on words don't ya? I love a story that offers up a veritable buffet of place, mood and emotion. And this too - "In it, he saw his own pale reflection, offset by his dark baggage – and not just those tucked under his eyes" I like this, I could see Sam's angst reflected and enhanced by the silvered lens of the mirror, giving us an observers glance into the sadness in his heart. "Sam often marveled at his brother’s strength and nerve, despite the years of attrition his soul had endured" Wow, that's a killer line Abi! Got me to the point of tears here, with the loving and selfless description of a child become adult way too early. God is it a surprise that Dean has the odd issue when it comes to expressing his own emotions when he has been an emotional buffer for Sam for all those terrifying years? “SS…ammy” the bear whisper was frightening." OK, forget at the point of tears, now we're there! there is such resonant hurt, pain, grief and lonliness in these few words that I've screwed my fine British reserve and blubbed! Oh Gosh Abi those last few paragraphs! Sam's palpable and uncontained terror as Dean seeks the only solace (Sam himself) that he realy has even as his life ebbs away. And the last line? A soul stealer, Abi. Gee gotta read on! Loving it Bev xx
Author's Response: Bev, Really pleased you decided to take a look at this - multichapters are much more challenging for me, and your reviews always help with showing me what worked... and boosting my ego no end!!!:-) I LOVED reading your responses to the different sections in this chapter, I do try to experiment a little with pieces - I find words fun (Big Geek that I am!!!) and get a thrill when readers have picked up on something that I was trying to be clever with!!! LOL. The fact that this piece moved you and had an effect that way, that kind of makes it worth all the grinding of teeth when computers crash, or typing is taking way too long. And you are so kind with your praise, that I did a little non-Brit like, upper lip quivering myself!!!! Thank you so very much for this - it has made my day!! Abi.
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 26/02/08 05:06 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
Dean baring his soul to Sam, in a last ditch attempt to bring him home and failing must have been a punishing blow to him. To still go to the Dean, in secret, to try put things right for Sam shows with heartbreaking clarity the self sacrifice that Dean will make for his little brothers happiness. Don't worry about any lack of action here, Dean sparing with 'the Dean' was plenty action enough, there's also so much emotion at work here, not to mention the humour, a lovely chapter that brought tears to my eyes!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review and reassurance that this chapter wasn't lacking action. It was really helpful to find what worked for you - and the fact that this chapter had that effect on you has me grinning like a mad thing!! Writing this was challenging, it is the final straw for the boys and hopefully is believable enough to account for the break down in their relationship ... well on Sam's part at least. There is nothing (in my opinion ) that Dean would not forgive his brother, or try to make right for him; even if the answer is his absence from Sam's life. He really is an awesome Big Brother!!;-) Abi.
Reviewer: CricketBee (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
Wow, I've been loving this. Can't wait to read the end, I'm hanging on every word. You've done a marvelous job so far. I usually try to read completed stories so I can blast my way through in one shot. But this one sucked me in from the start and now I have to wait! Patience is not my forte! :) --c
Author's Response: *Grin* Thank you for letting me know you have been reading along with this, it's very cool to know people are enjoying something you've written, but I am especially touched that you took time to review. I also appreciate the fact that you usually wait to read completed stories and that you have made an exception for mine. I will try not to keep you waiting for too long - patience not a big virtue of mine either!!!:-) Thanks for your encouragement - big boost!!! Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 02:14 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
AWWW omg i didn't even read the A/N, i just saw a new chapt was up and got so excited and just started reading. Well that was very sweet of you and it's my pleasure:D Prozac huh hahahaha I was reading that and i was like AWWW THAT'S FOR ME :D:D HAHAHA and don't worry, yes i'm really busy but I'm sure you'll be getting a 2 review-review for the 7th chapter loll Last Chapter:O:O:O I can't believe this story is done...it's so sad:(...and yea i can see how you're torn between tragic misunderstanding and a brotherly moment...but plz o plz just let Sam atleast know for sure that Dean did that for him, he doesn't need to talk to Dean about it but if Sam knew what Dean did for him, it would be super super awesome;) lolll ahhh the guilt :) LOL Anywho i'll keep this short, since this is the 3rd review LOL Looking forward to chapter 7:D (and don't worry you don'tneed to respond to this LOL you've already responded to the last 2, i just wanted to say thank ya for the shout out:D)
Author's Response: Your welcome! I will keep your request in mind... see what I can do. Abi.
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 05:27 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
*wipes tear from eyes* i'm not sure what response are you trying to get with your readers, but this chapter has me being misty-eyed...the way Dean actually went to the Dean (hahahahaha...sorry, that line just has me giggling) in order to keep Sam there, and then keep the whole thing a secret, it's just so him..and heartbreaking to boot.... i wonder if Sam ever found out...hmm..
Author's Response: What response am I trying to get? Well yours was a wonderful example, but to gain any reaction to something you have written is pretty special. This chapter should - if it has worked out my way, be bittersweet, but beyond that it's open to whatever the reader sees in it (I hope?!) My nerves have to do with getting a convincing enough storyline together, to explain how two brothers who share such a close bond could fall out of touch completely for two years. Oh yeah I had a lot of fun with 'the Dean' and 'our Dean' - unexpected perk, had me giggling!!! I am really glad that you thought Dean going in to argue for Sammy was in character and I am stoked that I got this reaction from you - thanks for sharing that! PS. All the shiny stars greatly appreciated too!!!! PPS. Not sure yet if Sammy finds out what Dean did - he has a suspicion ... (will get back to you in next chapter) Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 12:53 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
OH AND I FORGOT TO ADD THIS PART...WHAT'S WITH THE WHOLE TIME CONSTRAINT DEAN'S ON???? WAS THAT DADDY WINCHESTER ON THE PHONE :O ..."Time was up"....what....what does that mean...did John agree to let Dean go try and convince Sam to come back??? whattt ahhh you've got me playing 21 questions and trying to figure this out LOL How is time up...why is time up...who's time...lol ahhhh ur driving me crazy lady! but i'll let it slide for this story since it's so freakin awesome hahhaha This story just gets more and more in depth and intense...loving every minute of it! And there's the 2nd review BAHAHAHHAHAHA i swear i didn't even mean to, i juse realized after that review that i forgot to mention the whole "time" thing cuz that's been gnawing at my brain....maybe he just means time's up in trying to convince Sam tocome back...ahh wut the hell i don't know lolll Once again, can't wait for the rest:)
Author's Response: *GRIN... HUGE GRIN...GRINING SOME MORE!!!!* What a HUGE compliment it is that you are a two-time reviewer - this is despite being eyeball deep in mid-term revision - good luck with those by the way! You know I am still planning on chapter 7 being the last, so if you don't review twice there because you are such a busy lady, I will totally understand. Besides I still have all your other amazing reviews... talk about your instant gratification!!!!! So to the review. Just love the way your mind works... faster than mine, by the way - you have some awesome ideas here, you have actually started my head ticking and whirring, let me just see what it spits out. But yes it's Daddy J on the phone. By the way thanks for all the stars!!!;-) Hope the wait for this chapter was better, your guilt trips are VERY effective!!!! Best of luck with those exams ... now get back to work there Missy!!!! LOL!!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 22/02/08 12:44 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
AWW NUTZ! I WASN'T THE FIRST TO REVIEW ON THIS CHAPTER!!! loll damn midterm studying hahaha ANYWHO ONTO THIS CHAPTER....WOW...i can honestly say i sooo wasn't expecting that letter...i thought it be something about a hunting case or w.e but omgggg this chapter was amazing. First off Dean's story about the 8 yr old boy and his reason for sticking with hunting!!!! WOW...and it's only fitting that it's cuz of Sam. This part: “You changed my mind Sam. Seeing you when I stepped out of the shower… you were coloring, laughing and smiling brightly at me. Front tooth missing and lisping words – you were the most precious sight I had ever seen. I knew then and there that a janitor or a train driver could not keep you safe, and without a shadow of a doubt, that is what I wanted from my life….” WOW...THAT JUST LEFT ME LIKE SPEECHLESS...that was my favouritest (yes i know it's not a word lol) part of this chapt...and believe me i had a lot of them loll And then Dean knowing he couldn't convince Sam and walking out....broke my heart:( soooo freakin sad, and then him talking to the Dean ahhhhh i knew he'd go do that but it was just so like wow...and Sammy doesn't even know what Dean did for him...i sure hope he finds out *winkwink nudge nudge;) * ahahahaha but i won't tell u how to write your story cuz ur freakin amazing at itureself!!! It's werid cuz like i want Sam to you know have that happy life and all...but i want him to realize that the happy life is not at Stanford but instead that it's wherever Dean is :D Our boys haveta be together, no ifs ands or buts lolll But yea AMAZINGGG CHAPTER UPDATE, WORTH THE WAIT!!!!!
Author's Response: Hey, there you are!!!! You know you may not have been the first to review, but you are by far one of my favorite reviewers!!!! (Look at my A/N at the beginning of this chapter). Sooo glad this chapter worked for you, when I read it back I was nervous because of it's lack of action. Also the "why" Dean and Sam lost touch, is a huge question mark - and as we have agreed before, one of the most interesting. To actually propose an answer to that - nervous times I can tell you!!! (By the way going to have to look up your take on this very soon) Thank you for quoting your favorite line, I find that really helpful to know what works. This line is special to me as it is based on something I wrote in my diary a few years back... the first time I "met" my son!!!:-) (He is a lot younger than Sam is here - but some feelings translate well!) I am undecided whether or not to let Sam in on Dean saving his ass at Stanford. Torn between tragic misunderstanding and a satisfying brother moment!!! What to do?!!! Don't worry about throwing in your opinions on stuff especially since I know you have given this period in SN storyline a LOT of thought. Lastly - before, I end up babbling on FOREVER ... still have to go to review two!... Thank you as always for your enthusiastic and very, very appreciated reviews!!! They always put me in such a good mood, and you are way too kind in your praise sometimes, but I'm so addicted to theses now!!!!! LOL! Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 02:53 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
Deans story is just gutwrenching and for him to be telling himself it just wasn't enough just broke my heart. This is just beautiful, and I loved how Dean has made it right, especially the weapons on the table...lol The little touch of the Dean calling him Sammy was superb...loved that to bits...will keep my eyes open for more!
Author's Response: How impressed am I that you made it all the way through, in ONE sitting!!! Thank you for giving me such a huge grin, I may actually need plastic surgery to revert to my original form!!!! This chapter was a little intimidating to write. The speculation over what could cause Sam and Dean to loose contact for so long being as close as they are, is massive. I figured that it was ultimately an impasse that neither of them could overcome. This argument engaged both the brothers most cherished beliefs and needs - Sam's need for freedom and independence and Dean's commitment to the hunt and his brother. Ultimately it was always going to be Dean that would loose the most. In his eyes the Big brother always takes the fall. Thanks for letting me know what worked - will look out for you on the next chapter - last one, and hope you continue to read and enjoy it. Many, many thanks for all the time you've given up this evening (on my side of the pond) - such an amazing confidence boost! Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 02:41 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
Damn, you've got some great lines in here...way too many to quote or this review would be as long as the chapter. Awesome. Loved the fight at the start of this chapter, love a great and well written fight, and the emotions bouncing beween the two brothers is tangible. And Owen has the patience of a saint hasn't he?...lol Moving on to next chapter...
Author's Response: Yeah that Owen - what a guy!!! LOL. Thanks for wading through another mammoth chapter!!! SOOOO HAPPY you have made it this far!! I have writers envy - for writers that can pull off action sequences in a convincing way. This site holds some of the best examples of this, I'm in awe of authors like Gaelic Script and Thru Terry's eyes for their ability to just take you there. I struggle with fight scenes - Thanks for the thumbs up on this one. Funnily enough, this was the first part of this story that came to me. Onwards ... need to race to keep up with you, I am a terribly slow typer!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 4 War Games
Owww, the boys are getting tough, wouldn't want to put money on that one... And should have said in the last review, as well as this one, you have some of the best and funniest dialogue in this story I think I've ever read...just awesome stuff...moving on...
Author's Response: Lady, you are going to END me ... my family have to put up with my swelled head ... they deserve to stay in your thoughts - poor things!!! ;-) I know you review a lot - and way more deserving authors than me - but thank you for letting me know that the dialogue works for you. It's always risky doing "funny" if no one else gets it ... well now there is at least one, other than me ... do you need me to call someone ?!!! (Just kidding!!! LOL) I am addicted to the stars and your extremely kind words now. Thank you! Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing
I actually had to go back and read some of these descriptions twice, you have a very beautiful turn of phrase, and a very individual way of putting words together. I'm enjoying this story more and more...moving on
Author's Response: *Huge GRIN* Can't grin any wider... my face hurts!!!! You went back and re-read things?!! *THROWS IN A PINCH FOR GOOD MEASURE* Your praise is high indeed - and the fact that you are looking at my work so closely... and seem to be enjoying it, gives me such a buzz!!!! Thank you for taking all this time and effort to keep on reading and reviewing. Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 01:48 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac
Beautiful chapter, the description of Sam's deep concern for his brother is so touching, even with all the other complications revolving round them. Liked the cheerleader with a face pack...made me lol. Only one thing, for an Impala purist like me, to call it a 69 instead of a 67 is like saying Sam's a redhead...lol - but it in no way ruined this excelent read, moving on...
Author's Response: Wow - BIG BLUSH!!!!! I got the year wrong?!!! (Feels need to borrow the cheerleader's face-pack ... to hide behind!!!!) LOL. Sorry to all Metallicar fans out there! I am relieved that you got my version of Sam, I am such a Dean girl, I sometimes have to try not to channel him when I am writing about his brother! Glad you liked the cheerleader, the show does those random moments of humour in such a genius way, that I can't resist at least attempting them!! :-) Thank you for this review, and the assurance that my Metallicar slip up hasn't effected the rest of this story. Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 01:33 PM · On: Man Down!
Very nice start. I loved the way you have described exactly where Sam is in his head, and how he got there. To set a story pre-series is a brave move as you have less series mythology to draw on but you've done a great job here! And Dean phoning to say goodbye was completely gutwrenching...great job, moving on straight away...
Author's Response: Thank you for the encouragement and all those shiny stars ! I am so excited that your reading your way through this. Glad you are enjoying it so far. This is one of those times in the boys lives that is briefly touched on (and who doesn't LOVE the pilot?!) and is just so interesting to me. In my head the Stanford years are kind of like the dark ages for the Winchesters. Moving on to see what you make of chapter two!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: gini (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for taking time to review ... especially for all those exclamation marks!!!!! Really grateful for the boost! Abi.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 21/02/08 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
I like it keep going
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and especially for reading on!! I'm glad that your enjoying this, and I appreciate the encouragement Bookworm!!!! :-) Abi.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 18/02/08 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
Great job loved the fight description and Owen's a riot - Thanks for the read - kel
Author's Response: Hey Kel! Glad you liked it. The action stuff is hard to convey... how do you guys manage to write it so well - so often!!!! I enjoy writing Owen, he's ended up in a different place to where I thought he would go, but it's too much fun letting Dean mess with him! Thanks for the review, a real boost - as always ;-) Abi.
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 09/02/08 11:25 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
Oooohh.....Sam is going to get in trouble for getting Dean back into shape?? Sigh....Winchester luck runs true again.....bloody hell.....(sorry for the language...)
Author's Response: Winchester luck indeed - it never ceases to amaze me how much it sucks, but I do think that just makes the boys more likable because of how well they bear it ... if that's possible?! (Yeah OK I sound like a mad stalker chick!!!) Thank you for the review and keeping with this story, especially after the time lag! Don't worry about the language ... I still write and re-write some of the blue stuff in this because maybe it's OTT even for DEAN. But I hail from England and Bloody Hell is like our Nickelodeon alternative to the hard stuff!!!! LOL. Abi.
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 09/02/08 06:22 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
I loved the images of the gurgling one year old, and Sam's first word.... Deen. I guess that made it kind of hard for Dean to keep up his levels of anger quite enough to fight Sam. I almost felt sorry for the football team, two p....d off Winchester needing to blow off steam, not really a fair fight!! Kyle seemed a decent enough sort though, typically generous gesture on Sams' part, ever the peacemaker, letting the fight end, saying he'd lost. That anger's still bubbling below the surface though, it's a sure sign of the turmoil Dean's going through that he hasn't returned his Dads' phone calls. Now what's in this letter that's just arrived, doesn't sound too good! Please update soon, we need to know! Thanks. Jane
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Jane, and the shiny stars!!!:-) I was actually worried about how this chapter would be taken as so many people thought it would definitely come to blows, and though violence was in the air I could not bring it to bear directly on the boys. In my story it has only been three months and not two years of separation, they still have that strong link that has probably saved their lives repeatedly. So yes the anger is still there, the betrayal for Dean is enormous and the Football team got caught in the fallout ... though to Dean's credit, he did try to warn them. I am glad you liked baby Sam, I was quite pleased with that part. Dean knows he raised Sam, he may not say it but his every action shows it. Thank you for your thoughts, they kind of help me to see what is working and what isn't. All will be revealed with the letter. I am having techno troubles with my computer but aim to find new and inventive ways round that!!!:-) Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 09/02/08 03:41 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
ME AGAIN! LOL Jeez looks like it's gonna be 2 reviews for chapter now LOL I can't help it, I'm like totoally into this story lol i absolutely love stories about when Sam's in college, and Dean going back and seeing him...it's just so much of what we've been left out of in the show...not saying the show isn't great cuz its F-ING AMAZING!!! lol but it's awesome when stories pop up about the brothers when Sam's in college, I did one about that, and my one right now has flashbacks to his college years and my next one will deal with something that happened to Dean when Sam was in college...so you can see my interest for those kinda stories lol BUT ANYWAYS I just had to write this to reassure you that I'm not going anywhere lol Yes this chapter took long but believe me, as a fellow writer i understand 150% lol I've done it several times, hell I'm doing it with my story that's up now lol Anyways yes i don't have patience but your story is that freakin good that you can try my patience all you want but at the end of the day, when that next chapts up I'm like...ecstatic lol like seriously I check this site everyday for stories and i'm always checking my favourites, mainly to see if YOU'VE updated yours lol And today...LOL my sister was like what the hell you smiling so hard bout i;m like o0o0o nothing just this story i've been waiting for to be updated HAS BEEN!!!!:D she laughed and called me a dork :) LOL NEWAYS MY WHOLE POINT IS DON'T YOU FRET! I WILL BE THE FIRST ONE TO REVIEW ON THE NEXT CHAPT! LOL ...prob the first two to review the way this is going LOL...and u didn't dissapoint with this chapt...we had action...the fight with thefootballers...action...lol...so if i have to wait another month...i will:( LOL (me trying to make you feel guilty so you post soon :) ) hahaha neways keep doing what ur doing:D and keep kicking ass on this story!!!
Author's Response: OMG, YOU really know how to spoil a girl!!!! What an incredible review to receive - and it's the second on the same chapter ... your right you are going to make me dependant on these!!!!! HahA. I am fairly new to writing and this is the first place I have ever bitten the bullet and shared what I scribble with anyone (it helps that all the reviewers here are supportive, encouraging and such decent types... with incredibly well developed taste in men... UH hum!!!) your praise, the fact that you look out for my story and that it makes you smile... my friend you cannot understand what all that means to me. It's beyond my powers of expression to tell you. (Oh and don't worry gullit mode is FULLY engaged, I am scribbling as we speak, and will try to overcome computer troubles to post sooner!!!). I find this whole period in the boys lives fascinating, there is just so many places to explore here, and I will be looking at your take on it. So you have totally prepared me for what was shaping up to be a pretty challenging day - I am now armed (to the teeth !!!!) with a dorky grin of my own!!!!! (I'll reserve you the first two spaces on the next chapter - hope I give you something interesting to review in it!!!) Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 09/02/08 01:33 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
WHAT!!! OMG U CAN'T KEEP DOING THIS TO ME:( GOD THE WAY U END YOUR CHAPTERS....AMAZING BUT I DON'T HAVE PATIENCE:( LOL as for this chapter, i was really surprised that they didn't fight, but it was still a wicked chapt! and i loved how despite them about to fight minutes ago, he was standing right behind Dean, but of course he would, they wouldn't be the winchesters if they didn't put everything aside to protect the other. And as for the last footballer standing who asked if he should call the ambulance...loved that, that was really sweet of him! BUT BACK TO THE ENDING...WUT THE HELL WAS DELIVERED TO SAM...PLZ PLZ UPDATE SOON, WHEN I FOUND OUT THAT THIS STORY WAS UPDATED I HAD THE BIGGEST GRIN ON MY FACE LOL Can't wait for the next chapt!!! :D
Author's Response: Talk about your major encouragement!!!!! I can't believe that after all your kind words of encouragement throughout this story, it's this review, with all the capitals that has me laughing out loud and feeling a little sorry (but mostly wickedly satisfied) for the evil cliffhangers!!!! They write themselves - I swear, every-time I turn around recently I seem to be bumping into one!!! :-) Thank you from the bottom of my coffee cup for this amazing review, to provoke this from you, after I kept you waiting for this chapter - really I am so unbelievably pleased!!!!!! I hope your patience hasn't run out completely, I plan on having two more chapters, and would be majorly disappointed not to see you along for the ride. Back to some of your points, I tried writing a fight scene for the boys, but it just wasn't happening... they are just too damn Winchester!!!! I hope this version did not disappoint those looking for the action in this story!!! PS. Thanks for the stars!!! Ab.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 4 War Games
Don't know that I'd take bets on that outcome. Looking forward to more - Sorry for the delay in reading, somehow missed this one - Kel
Author's Response: Again with the sorries!!!! Lady, I am just pleased you are still reading my ramblings!!!!! ;-) I find writing the conflict between Dean and Sam a real challenge - in a good way. Maybe that's why I was so bogged down with chapter five. I want it to be believable, and am praying I have accomplished that to some extent at least! Abi.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 12:57 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing
Ah... man I so have to appologize, I read this update during the christmas holdiays but forgot to review, now here I was looking for an update and i noticed my mistake. Great chapter, gotta love seeing Sammy taking charge. Gonna go read the next one, ;) Kel
Author's Response: Hi Kel!!!! No appologies necessary, just relieved your still here!!! :-) I am really touched that you keep looking in on this story despite your other commitments. Hopefully it continues to entertain - yeah I enjoyed writing a more forceful Sam too. Thanks for the review - happy to hear from you whenever!!! Abi.
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