Reviewer: Ryla (Signed) · Date: 09/03/11 11:33 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
This has got to be, in my opinion, THE best Stanford years story I have read to date. It's heartfelt, extremely plausible, something I could easily imagine happening. Great job, great story.
Author's Response: That is high praise indeed - it was such a nice surprise to see your review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 21/11/09 02:01 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
Middle ground worked just fine. Great how you had Sam work out what Dean had done for him two years before, and how much Dean had sacrificed by doing it. And I think he finally got the gist of the note Dean left as well - that the oil and water were not Dean and Sam, but hunting and normal. It was a pretty sad analogy at the end, especially given what we know now after seeing four and a bit seasons of Winchester sacrifice. But it was also very true. And poor, poor Owen - he really didn't have a chance, did he? He's a bit like those horrible little pampered poodles with the fluff and the pink bows in their hair - for heaven's sake don't let them get outside where they might get DIRTY!!!!!! Man, give me a good old collie or german shepherd, or even a blue heeler cattle dog any day. But I really loved Dean's wicked sense of humour, leaving Sam the note pinned to Owen's desk with that gruesomely deadly knife - ROFL!! Wonder if Owen ran back to Mummy and told her that she had been right about Sam all along? Well, that was a heck of a ride, and I thank you for letting me go on it. So - where's the next one? LOL Take care,
Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 21/11/09 01:48 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
I really liked Dean Evans and her shrewd analysis of Dean Winchester. And had to have a little chortle to myself over Esme's reaction to the undeniable Winchester charm. Loved how Dean was honest with Mary-Ann about a few things, including the fact that he was carrying weapons. But I have to tell you, when she asked him what would happen if Sam chose that world and Dean answered, "I don't know", I had tears in my eyes. I could just imagine that broken, lost voice and a world of hurt and unease in those three little words. Dean's made a hard sacrifice. They both have. But Dean's had to let go of his child, and that's a hard, hard thing to do. Oh, almost forgot - Dean's little speech about how much Sam means to him - that was heart-wrenchingly sweet. He really pulled out the big guns, didn't he? But unfortunately it wasn't enough to overcome Sam's fears and doubts, and his need to find out who he is and where he fits in. Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 21/11/09 01:32 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
Loved the analysis in the first two paragraphs - the in-depth peek at the boys and what they mean to each other, as well as the scarily true revelation of Dean's conflict and hurt as he stands continually in the ever-widening gap between John and Sam. That was so well-written, I wanted to quote the whole thing, but Firefox won't let me copy and paste on UnGen......*glares at screen*.... Very neat and very entertaining way to diffuse the tension between the brothers, by having them turn their frustrations on someone else. Loved the captain's ever-increasing doubts as he and Dean traded threats, and he realised that he really was biting off more than he and his seven little helpers could chew, especially after Sam just stood there grinning evilly behind Dean's shoulder. That was great storytelling. But oh, they're back at it again. And how sad was Sam's revelation that he feels like a freak wherever he goes, never fitting in anywhere. People think that Sam is cold and selfish, but I see him as scared and conflicted, with just as many issues as Dean. He just hides them differently. But my heart goes out to that lost little boy locked inside the hunter that is Sam Winchester. Even during Season 4, when he was doing all the wrong things for what he thought were the right reasons. And now it seems that he's about to be in deep shite with his teachers. This is going to end messy, isn't it? Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 21/11/09 01:14 AM · On: Chapter 4 War Games
Even though Sam tries to deny it, he's still very much the hunter - not leaving many traces of himself in the room seems to be living proof of that. Stay under the radar, travel light, get ready to pack and vanish at an instant's notice. Had to smile - yeah, okay, grin like an idiot - at Dean's confrontation with Owen. Poor Owen - think he's streets ahead of Sam as the track and field star at the moment, the way he bolted off to the mysterious Kate and left Dean alone. And did Dean read right? Did Sam just body-slam the lovely Jessica and spread her undies from a-hole to breakfast? That was just fate, wasn't it? Loved Sam's embarrassed reaction both to Jess and to Dean's lightning-fast observations. Hmm - can fully understand Dean's puzzled reaction as to why Sam would let himself get pushed around by that brainless thug. Especially given the fact that Sam usually loathes bullies. Sam's no coward - there must be more to it than his "if you mess up you can't just run away from it" line. Oh, and the boys are squaring off? Uh-oh - this can't be good. Huh - and where did all these breadcrumbs come from?...*scratches head in confusion*... Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 19/11/09 09:20 PM · On: Chapter 3- Debriefing
Hi, Abi - I'm back. I tend to wander off and get lost, and have to follow a faint trail of breadcrumbs - or my beta has to come find me - a rather difficult task since she's in Surrey and I'm in Australia.....but not impossible - she just emails and texts me, my aunt, my friends until someone tracks me down - lol. Anyway - on with the review... "Hoodlum" vibe - oh LOL - Dean would have been so proud had he been able to tap into Owen's thoughts. Poor innocent coddled Owen - he's had quite a shock, hasn't he? I was smirking at the flow of colourful language and could just see Owen squirming uneasily before deciding to take the bolt. Could relate to his thoughts though - but he really didn't know the real Sam. Not that Sam isn't likeable, warm and friendly, but there is the hunter side that he gets from his father which makes him a rather formidable opponent when he's pissed off. He can go from puppy to scary in about five seconds flat. And could picture Sam's rage when he saw the stitching job, especially with his issues with their father still being so fresh in his mind. And even John admitted to Sam later that he stopped being their father and became their drill sergeant. With poor Dean as the perfect soldier......*sigh*...no wonder both boys have such huge self-esteem issues. Really liked the internal monologues going on with both boys, and almost laughed out loud at Dean's wish to have Mother Hubbard Sam back because he at least knows how to fight fair - lol. The end of the chapter was so touching and sad - Sam's anger at their father for breaking his brother, Dean's feeling of low worth because of what John had said, his calling so desperately for the brother who is more his child than John's. And oops - lunch is over damn it. But never fear, I'll be back. ...*leaves a scattered trail of breadcrumbs to follow back to chapter 4*.... Jules OOH - I ALMOST FORGOT!!! See, that's a sign that I'm a) getting old, b) too stressed and c) need a holiday....anyway..... - thank you so much for your kind words in your reply. I actually don't think I'm that good, but those words really warmed my heart. thank you.
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/11/09 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 2- Medivac
Know what you mean about formatting - it almost did me in the first few times I posted. HT Marie and Kittsbud have my eternal gratitude after helping train me in how to use the paste from Word function correctly - lol. Sam's despair and panic at finding his beloved brother in such a state came across loud and clear. And loved how he fell into that natural sarcastic snark of his while he was struggling to get Dean up the stairs - can easily imagine the drunk bloke making himself scarce, just in case Sam was serious. Poor Owen - he's not going to take this well, is he? Fight or flight time indeed. Jules
Author's Response: Uh formatting - still sometimes the highest mountain I have to climb!!! But getting there hopefully. At the moment I am leaving chasim wide spaces between my chapters, not sure it's right, but hope it's not too off putting for readers?! This was so early on too - it almost put me off posting... except, of course, I could sooner stop eating junk food than stop writing, even if no one read!! Oh drunk-guy-on the-stairs, was FUN to write. I think he may have been a University flashback for me!!! LOL. Halls were such a strange place to live!!! And we were ALL freaks!! :) Owen definitely found the roommate that would totally give him that 'REAL WORLD' experience he had been craving his whole life!!! Ha Ha. I think at the time I was aiming for a contrast thing between what Sam thought he saw in Owen's world and the real "gold" he already had (Dean) in his own world. Thank you for checking this out, I know it's kind of long, but I'm flattered you gave it a try, and read so closely too. If you ever make it back round I look forward to your thoughts (good or constructive, there is no shame at all in learning from one of the best, and that is what I believe you are). Many thanks Abi.
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/11/09 02:14 PM · On: Man Down!
You know, that's been an itch I've been wanting to scratch for a very long time - it bugged the crap out of me why those two didn't speak for two years. I figured it had to be something more than just Sam storming out to go to college. Especially since he revealed that it was their dad who had told him to stay gone, not Dean. Looking forward to where you're going to take this. Oh, and loved Sam's late night internal struggle, and the heartbreaking contrast between him and his roommate. Sam, I could easily imagine, would not have fit into the normal world he craved so much. He even admitted it at the end of Skin, when he told Dean he always felt like a freak at Stanford. I can easily picture him leading a very lonely existence until he met Jessica - always staying on the fringes, never being part of the crowd. Jules
Author's Response: Jules, thank you for your great review. I'm glad you found my version of the two year absence plausible at least, it always made me wonder too. Sam I could just about explain away - not wanting to run into John, knowing that where Dean went John would be about too - being wrapped up in his feelings of betrayal and hurt... but Dean leaving Sam all alone and unprotected for Two years??? Something was very wrong with that - to my mind anyway. Overjoyed that you bought my Sam!!! LOL. I do struggle writing Sam's POV, I often slip into 'spoilt brat' mode (can you tell I am the eldest??LOL) Hope you continue to enjoy this. Abi
Reviewer: rahne (Signed) · Date: 15/09/08 12:46 AM · On: Man Down!
Been looking for a "what happened when Sam chose Stanford" fic. Very well done, and true to the boys.
Author's Response: Thankyou for taking the time to review this story. I am glad you enjoyed this - I also like speculating about this period in Winchester history!!! I am bowled over that you think this is "true to the boys" - what greater praise could I look for?!!! Abi.
Reviewer: TuckerCat (Signed) · Date: 05/09/08 11:24 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
it worked. it really worked.
Author's Response: Wow!!!! LOOK at all those stars!!!!! Thank you you really DO know how to make a girl smile - glad you enjoyed this!!!!! Happy it worked for you as it was a tough one to end - I am noticing a trend here - I seem to struggle with endings a lot!!!!! Really sweet of you to look this one up and review. Abi.
Reviewer: DreamsDestiny (Signed) · Date: 17/04/08 02:52 PM · On: Man Down!
awesome job!! very well written and enjoyed how well you put across the emotion!!
Author's Response: Thank you. I really appreciate your time, and am happy that you enjoyed this. I find emotions tricky things to write - the balance between after dinner cheese and the whole damn platter is a fine one!!!!! Sometimes I was the 'emotions' came easier when I remembered something that had happened with my brothers or family..... ok we don't hunt ghosts, but we sure are spirited!!!!! LOL! Abi.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 29/03/08 08:05 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
Loved the ending, what a great way to put the final touches on your story. - Thanks for the terrific read and I'll look forward to more - Kel
Author's Response: Am glad you 'loved' the ending, I was kind of nervous about how to finish. Story-wise, I rewrote it after a lot of helpful suggestions, but that 'final touch' as you call it was elusive ... so very happy that you liked what I came up with!!! Would be overjoyed to have you along on the next one, and thank you for all your kind words and support on this story!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 29/03/08 07:58 AM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
Loved the convo between the Dean and well Dean..lol. Really just nailed it. - Great Chapter - kel
Author's Response: Thank you K!! I am really glad you enjoyed Dean and the Dean - I took major liberties creating her and she was just a fun charter to write. I wanted her to be similar to Dean - enough to 'get' him, but she obviously upholds the Ordinary world too. Thank you for reviewing. :-)
Reviewer: therealdoctor who (Signed) · Date: 11/03/08 06:28 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
whoops forgot to rate 10plus
Author's Response: Ahh the shinney stars!! Always a welcome sight!!! Lol! I will take that 10 plus, it brings as big a grin as the stars - Thank you Miss! Abi.
Reviewer: therealdoctor who (Signed) · Date: 11/03/08 06:28 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
i'm reading this to my class at the moment they are so hooked! Keep the stories coming!
Author's Response: Thanks for inflicting this on your class!!!! I got a real kick out of the idea that it was being read out loud!I know you will have vet-ed it first - responsible educator that you are!!!!;-) I am ABSOLUTLY THRILLED that it holds their attention and that they are enjoying it. May be a little while before the next one, but I have a few ideas floating around. Thank you for reading and reviewing - and especially for warping young minds with my scribblings!!!! LOL. Abi.
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 07/03/08 04:29 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
I have enjoyed that immensely and will be checking out your other stories, past and future. Keep writing and keep smiling.
Author's Response: Great advice, I intend to try both!!! :-), Thank you for taking the time to read and review this, I am really glad you enjoyed it. I am thrilled that you will be checking out my other pieces - I haven't been writing for long, and so the list is short and (hopefully) sweet!!!! LOL! Look forward to your thoughts on anything I have written or will write, find reviews useful to learn from - and lets not forget that they are in fact SWEETER than chocolate!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 06/03/08 04:50 AM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
Perfect perfect ending...how you actually link it back to the pilot eppy. Nothing short of genius!!!!! Bravo!! Did Sam really read a note before he put in the curved blade into his overnight bag??? Have to go and see the pilot again.. You did middle ground beautifully... i didn't want it to degenerate to too brotherly because the way Dean left is too abrupt, and whenever i see the pilot now (after 2 seasons) i have this tiny tiny desire to hit Sam on the back of his head (like Dean did!) when he dismissed his brother's words about not being able to do it alone. and the part where Dean said he hadn't bother him or asked him for a thing for almost 2 years, damnit..... i just has this stabbing feeling in the region of my heart. i guess it's easier to see on hindsight. Thanks for bringing us a wonderful story and hopefully you'll write more soon!!!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the vote of confidence on the ending, I am happy it worked for you. This is my first multi-chapter and although it was a lot of fun to write I have a greater appreciation for the very talented writers on this site... knowing how to keep up the suspense and interest comes with practice I guess, but finishing it on the right note - nerve wracking!!!!! LOL! Hee Heee!!! Love that you are going to double check for the note in the pilot... no it wasn't there, all me I'm afraid. But so thrilled that my blending with the pilot, made it seem plausible. I KNOW exactly what you mean about needing to smack Sam up-side the head - doesn't he come across as a little bratty there for a second?!!! I have a hard time with that point in the pilot - especially in hindsight, so in my version I try to give Sam a motive, I guess, for treating his brother that way. Your kind reviews are pretty much all the thanks I need for this one, and I hope to hear your thoughts on anything I write in the future. Abi. PS. Shiny stars... BIG Bonus !!! ;-)
Reviewer: CricketBee (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 04:01 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
I loved it. The end brought a few tears to my eyes. This line in particular sums it all up in a nutshell: The Winchesters were raised to be warriors, but more than that they were sacrificial lambs who went down like wolves. They fought the good fight, with no care for their own safety, no hope of rescue, no thought of salvation. --c
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking time to tell me what you thought. I am so touched that this provoked that reaction from you. I put a lot of effort into those last lines, finding a way to round this story off was challenging, so you can imagine how pleased I am that, this is what you picked out. Glad to have you along for the ride! Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 02:39 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
me again LOL so here's the final 2-review for this story:( so sad hahahhaa no but seriously i left something else out...the oil and water thing...loved how you mentioned it twice, once Dean's words and once Sam's...brilliant! Mann i wasn't the first to reply again...i should really work on this huh...maybe keep my laptop open and stay on it 24/7 HAHAHHHAA JOKES JOKES I'm not that crazy, i value sleep wayyy too highly lolll But seriously once again....wow....and Sam's little recorder comment with mary had a little lamb HAHAHAHAHAHA PRICELESS and then how Dean and Sam just burst out laughing LOLL 2 cute...but yea amazingg story, def. one of my favs!!!!!!! AND OMG.....THE LAST LIKE 3 LINES The Winchesters were raised to be warriors, but more than that they were sacrificial lambs who went down like wolves. They fought the good fight, with no care for their own safety, no hope of rescue, no thought of salvation. In the Real World they stood in the light and fought off the darkness, and afterwards sought out the shadows to bleed, to re-cover, to try to go on. ...LIKE HOLY SHIT R U KIDDING ME?!?!? THAT WAS JUST AMAZING..AND WHAT A WAY TO END OFF THE STORY...SO AT THE BEGINNING I WAS LEFT SPEECHLESS MY THE DEAN SEEING MARY IN JESS THING AND AT THE END BY THOSE LINES....JUST WOW.... Keep up the awesome writing!!!!
Author's Response: 24/7 Supernatural fix ... hmm... your right sleep interferes with this - But other fixes fit the bill perfectly... your SECOND reviews for instance... how spoilt have I been throughout this?!!! They have all been amazing, by the way and I have to admit getting a little misty eyed at reading the last one... so not in character for me!!!! Really glad you liked the ending - struggled and rewrote it a hell of a lot. So getting that response from you... totally worth it!!!;-) In fact all that's left to say is; all your reviews have made this story well worth the writing. So thank you. Abi.
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 02:22 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
O WOW....OMGGG DUDE YOUR MIDDLE GROUND WAS AWESOME!!! THANK U SO MUCH FOR MAKING SAMMY REALIZE...and the fact that u didn't give it the chick flick moment made it 100 times better because you're so right the chick flick thing here wouldn;t have gone with your story.
So onto the story, i absolutely loved how you incorporated your ending with the pilot of the series...brilliant!!! As for some of my fav parts... - (So I’m doing this without the beer? Heartless Sammy) ahhahaha i loved thattt - when Dean stares at Jess and sees his mom....holy cow i would've never even thought of that Dean’s breath catches, her long blonde hair, her startled eyes … the way she stood in the doorway coming to check on Sammy, like another… twenty two years ago…. THAT LEFT ME BREATHLESS!!!! LIKE SERIOUSLY THAT WAS JUST AMAZING WRITING...and how Sam put a protective arm around her cuz he took it the wrong way:( o man o man! The little note Dean had left for Sammyy...very cute and so Dean-like and just the way this whole chapter played out was brilliant. First Sammy thinking that Dean had left because their father had threatened him somehow so Dean always complies...and then to find out the truth when Dean let Evans slip out of his mouth...the fact that they never even brought it up once but Sam still figured it out was awesome!!!! I'm really glad you didn't do a sappy ending where they talked about what happened cuz it def. wouldn't have gone with the flow of your story but i can't thank u enuff for making Sam realize and making Dean realize that Sam realized loll I loved it loved it loved it!!!!! AMAZING STORY!!! REALLY!!! I'm sad it's over though:( hahhaha I'll be looking out for your next pieces! GREAT, GREAT, GREAT JOB ON THIS!!!!!
Author's Response: Hey there you you are!!! Happy that the middle ground meets with your approval. Soo grateful to you for your influence on this chapter. I actually had not considered Sam finding out what an awesome Big Brother he actually has. However knowing and not being able to do anything about it, that was amazingly satisfying to write and led to some of the lines I am proudest of ... thanks for letting me know how it worked out for you. The comparison between Jess and Mary Winchester only really dawned on me when I was trying to combine my story with the pilot. I always look forward to reading your reviews and am forever grateful that you have the patients you do - I am never disappointed, you challenge me with your observations and boost my ego no end with your too kind compliment... which I am hooked on now, by the way. I will, likewise be looking out for you, whether it be on the review pages or on the story front!! Thanks (two) million for all your reviews - they never failed to dish out the confidence when I needed it most. Abi. PS. I am glad we both agree that warm fuzzes at the end of this would have ruined a perfectly good tear fest!!!! LOL!!!
Reviewer: Coldfire (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 02:14 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
Great story! I love the part where Dean and Dean Evans have their little talk. This is a great story, and you hit the beats just right.
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. I always find it helpful when someone tells me what they enjoyed. The character of the Dean was a favorite of mine - a lot of fun to write. Glad you enjoyed this, thanks for taking the time to review. Abi.
Author's Response: Call me (VERY) slow, but I just realised something, this is your first review?!!!! Oh wow! All reviews are thrilling, but to know that my story may have been one of the first you read and reviewed on this site, that is kind of special for me. So thanks again for taking the time to read and review . Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 02:13 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
me again! Sam shrugged solemnly “I would have produced my recorder and given ‘Mary Had A Little Lamb’ all the soul I could muster!” haha! musical prodigy! Jeeze, that's last paragraph is lovely, a real soul stealer! It oozes the grief and hurt and love that is the brothers life but in a realistic and softly amusing way. Brave a lovely rounding off of a well crafted story. Bravo! Bev xx
Author's Response: Hey there you!!! ;-) Appreciate this review as I know that you and your (Pit Postcard) partner in crime are busy ladies. As always you let me know what works in this chapter, I find this so useful for the next one I inflict on people!!!LOL! Can't you just see little Peter Pan Sam and his racy recorder?!!! Thank you for the compliments and the feedback, I am thrilled you found this realistic and that you seem to pick up on the things I tried out in this story - happy to know that I didn't miss the mark entirely!!! But your reviews kept me entertained so I hope I returned the favor at least!!! Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 02:08 PM · On: Chapter 7 - Re-enlistment.
Wow Abi this is a fantastic end to a fantastic story, and I LOVED the note and the last line - how very true and what a great depiction of both Winchesters. Loved this whole story and I feel sure this won't be the only time I read it! Now get typing, I want to see what you come up with next..lol X Louy
Author's Response: *Grins* Thank you for the thumbs up - I didn't realize how nerve wracking finishing this would be, it kind of didn't end up where I expected it to at all. But so pleased to have had you along for the ride!!!! OVER- THE -MOON, (like that alcoholic bovine from the nursery rhymes) at the thought of you reading this again!!! There are a few stories on this site and in general that I go back to - what a huge compliment, thank you so much! Speaking of astral feel-goods - all the stars, have been very kind and a huge boost. As to the orders... Yes Mam!!! LOL. As soon as I stumble across something worth scribbling and taking your time up with. Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 01:38 PM · On: Chapter 6 - Avoiding a Court-martial
Abi Awh hun that was great. I loved the Dean and her scaring the shit outta our Dean and she knew he was packing! Ha what a girl! And he bailed Sammy out, he is sucha great big Brother! i've got a big bro and he's wonderful, hope you have one too Hunny. You are one groovy writer Hunny! Your Sam and Dean and John are very recognisable to me, and they live for me in your words, so you gonna write somemore aren't Ya? Cause now I've read ya whole catalogue, marked ya as a fav author and I have expectataions!! Thanks loved it! More! Bravo! bev xx
Author's Response: Bev, Happy the Dean character went down OK. I needed her to be someones who could see Dean clearly, so that when they consented to saving Sam for him, it was because of his merits - and all round good guy aura, so the Dean of Stanford had to be streetwise and slightly scary with it. To quote the awesome Ridley James, Dean really is Captain One-helluva Brother!!!LOL! Thank you for these amazing reviews, which are like... deep fried crack!!!!! (quoting is big with me) they are a HUGE incentive to keep on writing, in the hope that you may like what I write enough to drop me a few lines... Bev-style!!!! *Grins* Wow; to being added to your favorite authors list... glad I was siting down at the computer!!!! Thank you so much I really am deeply touched that you did that. It has been an absolute pleasure reading your reviews and I am flattered by both the time it must have taken for you to read and review chapter by chapter AND making your list!!!! There is a final chapter to this story and then I have one or two things on the drawing board, but I am nervous about posting stories I haven't all but finished. Hope to see you on the next one! Abi x
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 29/02/08 01:13 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Friendly Fire
Abi Now hun far be it from me to suggest violence is ever the answer but regarding the fight with 'the petting zoo' all I can say is Kick their f*****g asses boys! fight fight! Sorry, I'll have one of my blue pills and rebook the anger management classes again! This is a triffic chapte the boys bonding (re-bonding) over some sibling needlepoint (ooow I love it when Dean needs sutures to his beautiful tawny skin! (heehee am I a bad person?) "His eyes were a thrashing storm of battling jade waves" yeah baby! Groovy! next serving please! Bev x
Author's Response: The violence, was the first scene that came to me in this story ... maybe I should be borrowing some of those blue's? Ha Ha "sibling needlepoint" LOVE that!!! No you are not a bad person... your just in touch with your inner minx - and "beautiful tawny skin" ... water hoses at the ready!!!!! LMAO. Your reviews really have me in stitches ... of my own Bev... on to see what you make of the next one! Abi.
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