Reviewer: Glitterbelle (Signed) · Date: 12/11/09 05:22 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Another story I read all the way through today, I just couldn't tear my eyes away from it. I enjoyed the suspense in the story, you kept me wanting to more about what going with Dean as well as Sam and Jo. You stopped each scene perfectly to add to the suspense as to what might come next to keep me reading and wanting more. I liked the twist of the angels it was an interesting idea and wouldn't mind seeing them again. You wrote hurt Dean very well, I felt so awful for him, the poor guy, I love it when he doesn't give in to Mikey, he didn't break not completely and he was awesome. Mikey was just horrible, I really hated that demon and was glad when they finally got rid of him. I don't think I would have liked to have met him anytime soon, you created quite a nasty demon there, I loved to hate him and what he did to Dean. Thanks for sharing. Gem x
Author's Response: Hey Gem. (waves and smiles) Gee what a lovely review, such thoughtful words, thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and that you loved to hate Mikey! He is a nasty piece of work isn't he? And yes, I do tend to hurt our lovely Dean a bit...but I do put him back together mostly too! Thanks again for reviewing, means a lot. bev xx
Reviewer: PinkBerry (Signed) · Date: 29/06/09 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
-Jumps up and down like a fool- I make 200 :P You're a f***ing amazing writer, I mean wow diggity! Such huge amounts of HurtDean, I love the guy when he's hurting and you freakin' nail him there. So many moments, I was close to tears, screaming, pulling my hair out. I'm very impatient! It's not a rumor. Dude, you even had me liking Jo. And I dig your Uriel, much cuter, and man!!!! The final moments of this story had me thanking my idjit friend for making me sign up with her. Out of this world, you rock. BeautifullyEvilBirdie. Berry x
Author's Response: Hey Pinky. Well I'm so pleased you enjoyed it hunny. The Fallen was the first longish story i wrote and i have a great deal of affection for it. I know it has a few flaws but I did so enjoy writing it and I loved whumping Dean to put him back together again. I've just posted the penultimate chapter of the sequel "So Not An Angel" (Chapter26!) if you're interested. Many thanks for the lovely review and if you read the sequel I'd love to know what you think. Bev xxx
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 09/04/09 03:41 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Yep definitely an okey dokey story. Awesome in fact. Thanks for sharing it.
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 09/04/09 03:19 PM · On: Chapter 9 Redemption or Destruction?
Thank heavens the Angels are winning. Quietly praying they can heal Dean too before it is too late. Referring back to my previous review, the quotes that made me question continuity are: "!-- @page { margin: 2cm } P { margin-bottom: 0.21cm } -->Dean strained his left hand against the rope tying it to the chair arm" in Chapter 7 and " His right hand was similarly rent, and crusted with dried blood" in Chapter 8. Sorry for nit picking, and thanks for your patience. Off to read the final chapter now, so that tomorrow I may read the sequel and review that too.
Author's Response: changes made apologies
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 09/04/09 02:24 PM · On: Chapter 7 Angels and Daemons.
Oh good the cavalry is on the way. Can't help myself but point out I spotted a continuity error. Back in one of the earlier chapters Dean's left hand was pinned to the table with the knife and his right tied to the chair. Now his left hand is tied to the chair, thought I do believe this is a minor error since his left shoulder remains the shattered one. Sorry but these things bug me. Am I right or did I misunderstand? Please don't get me wrong, I still love this story, but momentarily the question did drop me out of the story.
Author's Response: Hey Midge It remains his left hand fixed by the knife, what makes you think its the other hand hun? bev xx
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 09/04/09 11:52 AM · On: Chapter 4 Back Up Arrives
Am a bit late to wish you Happy Christmas, but I hope Happy Easter will be chocolate to your ears. The moment Mikey slammed the knife through Dean's hand was brutal. Dean may not have screamed in this chapter but I hear him anyway. Great writing.
Author's Response: Heehee, Happy Easter to you too sweetums. Did ya like the knife through the hand? Mikey's a bad boy ain't he? He's gonna make poor DEan scream a lot...ah music to our ears! hahahahah Thanks so much for reviewing, means a great deal hun. Bev xxxx
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 09/04/09 10:36 AM · On: Chapter 2. Raguel
I know I have read this story before, but for the life of me I don't know if I left a review. It certainly deserves at least one. I love that your stories drop straight into the action and the fact that involves hurt Dean from the get go, just gets my undivided attention from the word go. This certainly seems to have all the ingredients of a rivetting story: a mysterious good guy, a very bad, bad guy and one hurt Dean in need of rescuing. I'm here for the ride.
Author's Response: Hey hunny. Such nice words! This was my first long story and although i know it has flaws I do like it. Mikey is a sweet character to write and I do so enjoy beating the crap outta Dean! heehee i'm so bad! hand in there chika, he screams a fair bit ! Bev xxx
Reviewer: kezza2kerri (Signed) · Date: 08/03/09 06:00 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
this is a great story is there a follow on
Author's Response: Hey Kerri. Thanks for those kind words and yes there is a follow up story. It's a WIP and I am a bit behind with it but its there. Its called 'So Not An Angel'. Thanks for reading and reviewing. This was my first long story and though it is flawed I am still very attached to it. Bev xxxx
Reviewer: Stacy L (Signed) · Date: 23/11/08 09:08 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Wow! I absolutely loved this story! I couldn't stop reading it from beginning to end. Thanks so much for sharing! I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories. Great job!
Author's Response: Hey Stacy. Well thanks hunny and I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I'm new-ish to fanfic and this was my first long story and even though i know it has flaws I still like it! I'd be delighted if you read my others and please do come tell me what you think. It's lovely to get reviews. bev xx
Reviewer: TuckerCat (Signed) · Date: 25/08/08 10:25 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
You have my vote! loved the story!
Author's Response: Hey Tuckercat is a real cute penname, my penname is really my cats name too, yeah he's called Bird! Thanks for reviewing, i love reviews! bev xx
Reviewer: TuckerCat (Signed) · Date: 25/08/08 10:05 PM · On: Chapter 8 Here Comes The Cavalry!
I totally think it works!
Author's Response: Hey Sharon. Welcome to UnGen and thanks so much for reviewing me I really appreciate it. I'm very pleased you liked The Fallen. It was my first long story and although its flawed I do still love it. In fact i'm just on with the sequel So Not An Angel now. So do ya write hun? will look forward to reading ya if ya do. Enjoy the site and give me a buzz if ya wanna chat I'm on IM on Yahoo. Bve xxx
Reviewer: riquitv (Signed) · Date: 17/06/08 12:32 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
sorry, i couldn't wait in fanfiction.net and i came here and read the story, i really really liked it. :)
Author's Response: Rut, You sweetheart! That's so nice of you. I'm glad you liked it and the sequel is here too if you fancy it. Called So Not An Angel. Thanks for your lovely reviews. bev xx
Reviewer: jane (Signed) · Date: 17/05/08 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 1. Nine Foot Babies and Snow Flurries
A good first chapter. You have the voices of Dean and Sam and good characterisation. I'm enjoying the hurt already of poor Dean and the rather silly drunk Sam is good to read too. Jo I like, but not sure I'm into a ship thing with those two. Typos, a couple there; and I know that hazel eyes can shift to green but I'd definitely put Dean as a green eyed boy. Otherwise, an interesting start and I'm certainly going to be going on to find out what happens next. Jane :)
Author's Response: Jane Thank you for your review Jane and I'm pleased you are finding it ok. It was my first ever long story and though far from perfect I'm really fond of it. It's sequel is at chapter 10 now "So Not An Angel!". And yup have settled on green eyes now! Bev xx
Reviewer: alena (Signed) · Date: 16/05/08 04:15 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Hi again Bev! Just to say that I was going to review this chapter by chapter, but since I've read the whole thing I'm leaving a story review instead. I enjoyed this- not sure poor old Dean did- you've certainly given him a thorough pasting! I liked the angelic brothers with their similarities (as well as differences) to the Winchester brothers and the fight to save Michael/daemon as well as Dean was interesting. Nice to see Sam in action trying to save his brother. The hints about Dean and what the daemon was after have got me rushing over to "So Not An Angel". See you next weekend!
Author's Response: Hey Rabid Racoon lady!! Thanks for reviewing hunny much appreciated and glad you liked it. It was my very first multi chapter story and I am very fond of it. Will be so cool to see ya next week! Love bev x
Reviewer: alena (Signed) · Date: 13/05/08 03:59 PM · On: Chapter 1. Nine Foot Babies and Snow Flurries
Hello birdie, just popped by to finally leave you a review! I enjoyed this chapter. I liked the references to 9ft Sam and his minor league alcohol tolerance! Poor old Dean starting out hurt before any demon gets their mitts on him. The mixture of banter and angst was good and I liked the give and take between the brothers and Jo.
Author's Response: Alison. Hey sweety! lovely to hear from ya and looking forward to seeeing ya again soon. Thanks for coming to review and yeah I enjoyed having Sam be a lit of a light weight when it comes to beer! Love Bev xx PS: watch out for Racoons!
Reviewer: PropGal (Signed) · Date: 17/04/08 08:26 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Okay, Bev, here it is. The review you've been waiting, the one i promised to gain enough brownie points to keep me out of trouble (ha!) in the future. The only problem is, though, that it's not really all that excessively put-on (but at least a little...hehe). This story blew me away. And yes, the angels have a cool funky-ness that needs to be revisited at some point. their relationship with each other was well written, as was their interaction with the brothers Winchester. Oh, (and this isn't the put-on part), you had me crying chapters 8 and 9.....(is that enough? i could go on and on and on and on and on...... ;)
Author's Response: Hey annA Awh hun, ya don't have to review me to stay out of trouble clearly I'm not gonna pick on Atticus' birth mom! I'm glad you enjoyed it and apologies for making you cry (heehee, was aiming for a bit of snuffling though!) thanks hunny! bev xx
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 08/04/08 08:16 PM · On: Chapter 7 Angels and Daemons.
Wow you really are torturing my Dean! The action is on it's way and I'll be back for more later! Nice job!
Author's Response: GenGen. Yup hun I'm sorry but I did bash the bejesus outta Dean in this one, I may have learned to be a little more measured now! (well marginally - but god he's sweet to torture!) Thanks again for your precious time. bev xx
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 15/03/08 09:40 PM · On: Chapter 6 "My Tartarus"
Great chapter! Ok I kinda thought the names sounded familiar...Raphael and Michael anyway lol! Of course I'm probably the only person that didn't catch on that they were angels! Loved the part where Mikey tells Dean that he's far to pretty to damage and Dean tells him "In your dreams..." liking the progression of this story...though you've got me worried about Dean though...Mikey's planning on summon someone and that can;t be good! Will read on soon! Saw you weren't at 5 stars for this chappy so I starred you hopefully it gets you up there!
Author's Response: Hiya GenGen yup they are Angels, well freaking archangels actually! Hey I figured our boys needed the best seeing as the daemon is a...well damned daemon! haha I'm glad you're enjoying Mikey, he's a bad guy but he has style! And yup summoning is never good is it? there's more action to be had yet. Thanks for reviewing every chapter, I know how time consuming it is but it's a wonderful and flattering thing to do. And for the stars, well thanks that's kind of you Bev x
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 15/03/08 12:38 AM · On: Chapter 5. The Power of One
Nice chapter! Very hard to read Dean being hurt that way...poor thing...send him over here I'll nurse him back to health lol! Laughed so hard at the Burger part lol! Greatg chapter! promise to read again soon!
Author's Response: Hey Hun. Yup, only our sweet, beautiful and freaky weird boy would think of his stomach when a deranged daemon is torturing him! I so love that boy! Thanks for coming back, appreciate it Bev xx
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 06/03/08 09:17 PM · On: Chapter 4 Back Up Arrives
whoa! That was brutal! Poor Dean! He ios truly getting the crap beat out of him! This Mikey is very very scary! Oh man poor Dean...can't get over the shoulder thing...that is frickin painful and then impaling his hand! omg gotta take a breather...
Author's Response: GenGen Hey Hun thanks so much for coming back again and I'm sorry! Our poor boy is suffering isn't he? Mikey is a really bad boy and I'm afraid is gonna continue to be so for a while yet. You have a breather and get your strength back! Thanks so much for reviewing. Bev xx
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 12:37 PM · On: Chapter 3 Michael
Poor Dean! Always being tortured in the name of making Sam acceot his destiny! But Dean can't contain his snark even in the face of pain and torture. Will read again soon gotta get chapter 23 of pained finished lol! But don't worry I'll be back!
Author's Response: GeGen. Yup, I'm a bit of a dedicated Dean whumper I'm afraid so loads more pain to come! But the wonderful Green eyed love god fights hard all the way through, and snarks between the gasps of pain! Enjoy your writing Hunny and I hope to see you back when you have time. Thanks for your time Bev xx
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/08 09:33 PM · On: Chapter 2. Raguel
Very interesting developments in this chapter! Don't know that I trust Raguel...lol but hey... Poor Dean, oh how we all love to inflict pain on him! Will be checking out the next chapter tomorrow! Nicely handled got me hooked
Author's Response: Hello GenGen Well thank you I'm glad you are enjoying the chapter. You're unsure about Raguel huh? Well I won't spoil it for you! And as to hurting Dean? well all I can say is this daemon is a real bad boy! Thank you for reviewing always appreciate readers taking time to review. bev
Author's Response: Hello GenGen Well thank you I'm glad you are enjoying the chapter. You're unsure about Raguel huh? Well I won't spoil it for you! And as to hurting Dean? well all I can say is this daemon is a real bad boy! Thank you for reviewing always appreciate readers taking time to review. bev
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/08 11:50 AM · On: Chapter 1. Nine Foot Babies and Snow Flurries
Intense! Reading on! Very descriptive. Loved the banter between Dean and Jo and drunken Sam is a fave of mine.
Author's Response: Hey gengen Wow thanks so much, I am a bit wordy - thank you for calling it descriptive, that made my day! I like drunk Sam too he's cute when he is silly! hope you manage more I'd be pleased to know what you think. Many thanks for reviewing. Bev xxx
Reviewer: tarot_theresa (Signed) · Date: 24/02/08 06:04 PM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
I enjoyed the story on the whole, it was an interesting concept and I liked your take on Dean and the power of his strength. It felt believable the way he dealt with his pain and the situation he found himself in. Sam seemed in character as well for how he dealt with Dean getting taken. As for Jo can't say much about her. I've never really went much for Jo/Dean. The angels were interesting and I enjoyed their similarities to the Winchester dynamics. I hope to see them developed further in the next story. On that note there are some things that I found a little unbelievable, and yes I know that sounds weird considering the genre, but how did Micheal commander of Gods Army, winner against the devil himself become possesed by a demon? Even a high ranking one, when he managed to defeat the original fallen angels? This I can write off as artistic license and suspend my disbelief but it might be something to address in the sequel. Also with the amount of injuries Dean sustained I think Sam would have taken him to the hospital. I did like the brotherly togetherness in the final chapter but you could have achieved the same feel with a hospital scene. I'm not sure where this was placed in the supernatural seasons but wanted by the FBI or not I don't think Sam would have risked treating injuries this severe. I know that you said some of his injuries were healed but on reading the final chapter it sounded like Dean was only healed enough to stop him from ending up dead and nothing more. A hospital trip would have been upsetting to Dean but if his shoulder really was shattered and there were bone fragments, he would have needed surgery to remove the fragments, before putting it back into place. Sam should have also been worried about shock setting in due to blood loss, not to mention infection. All things considered I think Sam would have hauled his brother to the nearest ER rather than to a motel, even considering the story Sam would have had to make up to explain the injuries. Thank you for the interesting read and I look forward to seeing what the Winchesters brothers are up to in your other stories.
Author's Response: Thank you for the thoughtful and considered review and i'm sorry that you found parts of the story unbelievable. The main reasons for Michael's possession are actually addressed to some degree in the sequel although it's not a major plot line as it has the potential to be a story in its own right and may well get written as a prequel. As this was my very first piece of fanfiction, I was finding my feet as I went and to a certain extent I still am, but hopefully improving with experience As to the issue of hospital vs self treatment, you are completely right that the angels intervention had stabilized Dean to a degree and Sam was aware of this. My take on the situation was that after such an ordeal to reclaim Dean, there was no way Sam would have let him out of his sight hence the motel not hospital. And there was also a huge amount of hospital based fics being posted on site at the same time as this story (and very good ones) but it’s good to head in a different direction sometimes. It may quiet possible have been an irrational action but that's my Sam…and I love him for it…lol Oh, and maybe 23 years in healthcare have made me overly cautious of hospitals! Thanks and I hope, if you chose to read anything more of mine, it works out better for ya. Bev x
Reviewer: Scanilla (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 11:01 AM · On: Chapter 10 Sutures and Sympathy!
Sorry it took me so long to read this! Now I finally did, a chapter after chapter and wow, it was a great story! It was thrilling and brilliantly written. Woman, you've got a wonderful writing style! I liked those angels. Mikey was a very cool and wicked bad guy. I liked it how this bond between your angel brothers and the bond between our hunter brothers were so alike. There were many funny lines (of course not a surprise because you have written this story ;D) but for some reason this one made me crack up: "Dean looked up, smiling his best ‘let’s charm the pervy daemon’ smile" You also wrote many brotherly moments, they were lovely. I gotta admit, I'm not a big Jo fan but I didn't let it bother me. I think you wrote Jo well and for a sake of a good story, she was bearable. What else can I say? I enjoyed this story and found myself admiring your writing skills. Keep going!
Author's Response: Sanna Thank you for this lovely review, and I'm very pleased you liked the story. Mikey is a little poppet isn't he! Naughty boy! And glad you liked the angels I think they're sweet, so much so that they are back in "So Not An Angel!" And it's cool that you don't thrill to Jo I know lots of people don't but I kinda like her so wanted to give her a go! Thanks for reviewing Hun. Love Bev xx
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