Reviewer: nightchills (Signed) · Date: 25/03/08 05:37 PM · On: Chapter 3
Different. Not sure an angel could be defeated by a mortal, but I could see Sam wrestling the angel to his own death for his brother's life.
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/12/07 05:30 AM · On: Chapter 3
Sam must be happy.
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/12/07 05:28 AM · On: Chapter 2
Aww, it's so touching how determined Sam is to help Dean.
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/12/07 05:26 AM · On: Chapter 1
This is a great first chapter, I feel sorry for Sam, he feels lost now he knows that Dean's days are numbered.
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 19/12/07 11:13 AM · On: Chapter 3
WOW....just wow.
Reviewer: Seraph (Signed) · Date: 14/12/07 07:02 AM · On: Chapter 3
The concept is brilliant. An old, and in some circles, well known myth that is also a little 'forgotten' nowdays. I'll be 100% honest in that the 'tense' is not my favourite style; I find that it distances me from the story somehow, but that is purely a matter of taste. A matter of taste that is quite easy to ignore the minute Dean collapses. Given how much the demons hate and fear Dean, the idea that that they would make him suffer a hideous, humiliating and painful death, rather than making it quick and 'painless' is completely in keeping with the show/world. The great warrior reduced to a feeble and weak man, whose body is destroying itself. The scenes in the hospital, the weakness of Dean, the pure psychological shock that engulfs Sam; broke my heart. But the master stroke was the use of the myth. I might have used Michael rather than 'Medatron' (and 'yes' it does sound like the name of a 'Transformer' - "more than meets the eye," indeed,) but then I'd never have come up with this story. Kripke may have stated that the side of "Good" works through human agents like the Hunters, while Evil works more directly in the world, and your story doesn't break with that idea. Sam FORCES Good to act, through a pre-existing "loop-hole" in Angelic lore; a precedent that even the evasive side of Good can't wriggle out of. Best of all? I can usually tell where a story/movie/book/etc is going within the 1st 5 minutes, or chapter or 2. You had me in suspence from the beginning t the reveal. Thank-you for sharing your wonderful tale. Seraph
Reviewer: Rosilee (Signed) · Date: 12/12/07 07:43 AM · On: Chapter 1
definitly intriged!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 29/11/07 08:51 PM · On: Chapter 3
Congrats on the featured spot and thanks for the read, I enjoyed - Kel
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 29/11/07 08:21 PM · On: Chapter 3
Oh Wow! If your gonna have the mother of all deal breakers, one serious enough to crack the “big bad”, it may as well be the Second In Charge!! Your description of that intense light was blinding. And those wings! Breathtaking! Could only be angelic, holy, powerful – “Wings. Outstretched; pure white and intricately patterned. Beautiful and soft and heartbreakingly perfect” – stunning writing. And Sam’s awe – “More so than anything he has ever seen” I felt myself staring, marvelling too. No wonder Sam’s search bought him to the highest Angel. His faith and belief in angels has never wavered. It was really the only way. Clever thinking! *standing ovation* Sam’s struggle was epic. I felt humbled by how hard he fought -“his limbs and mind are locked on one, all-consuming purpose” – that fierce stubbornness that sustained him through an entire night of fighting. Because Dean was at stake. I have always felt Sam’s toughness is his inner strength and you wrote this to perfection. That hip displacement was horrific. Your description of Sam bucking and screaming bought home the extent of his agony, and still he held on. I loved your janitor, that anonymous hero who rescued Sam, prayed for him and stayed with him holding his hand – a kind soul in the dark Winchester world just when he was needed. I’m glad you had someone there for Sam. Your moment where Sidley relents was heart stopping, your vivid description of his defeat, his rage – “Morning is breaking. Let me go.” *holding breath...* After a year of searching, seeking, here we are. Sam knowing that he had to wait for that surrender - “Your name. Give it to me.” Your words were amazing, Sam’s hope and joy leaping out the page “Exhilaration rockets up Sam’s spine. This is it, the moment he has strived for” Brilliant! Loved it! And still the Winchester self sacrifice “If there’s any left over you can keep me from dying in the process.” Save the brother at any price. At least Sam thought to ask for this in with the blessing! But the pinnacle of this chapter, of this fic, is the boys reunion. What a stunning scene; gentle, intense. Your words allowed me to see Sam clearly, battle weary and filthy and in awe. Your lack of words from the boys, just the touching and the eyes, was perfect. I cried as I read this numerous times!! The finale of the century. I just loved this - “The freedom exudes from his pores, radiates from him”, yep the deal is off. And that kicka$$ ending “He realizes in that moment that the holy light from Medatron is no longer the most beautiful thing he’s ever seen…It’s his brother’s face.” A.W.E.S.O.M.E. So Sam! As a deal breaker in tune with the characters and with the genre of SN, Kripke needs to see this! Please, oh please, oh please, oh please (Sam’s not the only one who can beg) write this ending from Dean’s pov, from the instant he realises the deal has been broken!! And yes, this is the longest review I’ve ever written!!!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 2
My heart is beating at a hundred miles an hour! First because of that crushing intro and then with adrenalin as the battle began. Your scene of Dean so ill, pleading with Sam, so sad "...his eyes wide and dark, swimming with feelings that had slipeed through the ever widen cracks of his carefully constructed emotional barriers" beautifully written, you showed the depth of Dean's agony at leaving Sam alone. No wonder Sam found it so hard to leave. His gesture of squeezing Dean's neck made his promise "I'll be back" absolute. Such great work. Loved Sam as steathy and menacing hunter - "oh I think you know why I'm here". Awesome oneliner that said everything. Your whole battle description was Sam at his hunter best, skills and dirty tricks, powered by determination, stubbornness and the love of a desperate brother with nothing to lose. "There's no way he will let Sidley up. Absolutely no way" These words are so final, no argument, I felt that inner strength of Sam's clearly in your words. "How much it too much when your brother has sold his soul for you ?" Sam's mantra for not giving up, Loved it! Sam's moment of doubt totally dismissed with your words "...And that, that feels like the end of the world" And here comes that dog determination and we just know this battle is to the end. Do or die! "I am satisfied with what I have...I want to keep it. That's why I need you" -I loved the way you countered Sidley's belief that greed was Sam's motivating factor. But still, Sam's gonna have to earn this prize isn't he?? Both letting the other know it's on, your words confirming this "...and the struggle starts up in earnest again" Your story written in present tense is so powerful, we're there cos it's happening right now, in front of our eyes. Your vivid description enhances this ten fold. Awesome work!
Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 08:17 AM · On: Chapter 3
Loved it! Stubborn Sam wins the day - and proves angels are real! Fantastic. Thanks for sharing.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 12:58 AM · On: Chapter 1
WOW, intriguing all right! Your intro is spectacular - Sam not recalling the conversation, almost collapsing with emotion but the all important words branded onto his brain. That description alone had us in the palm of your hand. Your scene of Dean collapsing in Sam's arms, blood splattered on the pavement, struggling to breathe was heart wrenching. So near, yet so far... Your words "The room begins to swim in slow, nauseating circles. And Sam can't breathe, he just can't breathe through the tightness in his chest, the squeezing of his heart." show the extent of Sam's distress with precision, beautifully written. My heart squeezed too. And your vision of the brothers together in that hospital room, one who's long, dark lashes make him look fragile, the other crying for twenty minutes just broke my squeezed heart into a million bits!! There's not a SN girl on the planet immune to that scene!!! Awesome chapter, you got my attention! PS I have read your amazing “A New Leaf” (I did write a review but it got sucked into cyberspace, I must have pushed a wrong button??? new one on it’s way shortly…) and this fic just seems to follow nicely, after Sam’s visit to The Sisters of Eternal Harmony…
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 08:42 PM · On: Chapter 1
intrigued? yes. Kinda surprised Sam would go the hopsice route.
Reviewer: clclemmons (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 06:29 PM · On: Chapter 3
what a beautiful story.
Reviewer: hgarf (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 05:37 PM · On: Chapter 3
Hi, I thought it was a great story and I'm glad I got chance to read it. Thanks because without authors like yourself I'd have nothing to read and being a Supernatural mega fan you make my world that bit more enjoyable x x
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 04:24 PM · On: Chapter 3
If possible your chapters get progressively better and that chapter hit like the business end of a sledgehammer!! Your very first line is beautiful and has the feel of poetry to it. You have many beautiful lines and breathtaking descriptions "The janitor stays with him, holding his hand through his screaming as two ER doctors curse, pull, and wrestle his leg back in place" . Sam's response to Dean's recovery was perfect - Sam has always believed in Angels and now that he has seen a "real one", he appreciates his own guardian Angel all the more. This is an accomplished piece of writing - thank you for sharing it.
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 2
It's a good thing that Dean's in this chapter so briefly I think the gentle, broken way you describe him might just make me cry!!!! Your empathy with the boys as they face Deans declining health is touching. As for your portrayal of Action Sammy - I am impressed. His motivation, his will and driving force to come through for Dean, is everywhere in this chapter. From the fact that he is being sustained by a packet of oatmeal cookies to what he endures taking on Sidley. "The needles in his crotch, now those are above and beyond the call of duty. Except that really, they aren’t. How much is too much when your brother has sold his soul for you? " (LOL!!) The desperation, determination and humor with which you write Sam is truly inspired. Your story continues to rock!
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 03:18 PM · On: Chapter 1
Your style of writing is descriptive and powerful - in a very controlled way you convey a lot. Loved the desperate anticipation running through Sam's head when he calls Bobby; "The thought please, oh please, oh please, oh please, is running through his head, chugging and revving, wheels spinning, steam hissing and screaming like a demonic freight train, when Bobby answers" Amazing stuff. The way you depict Sam catching only the Dr's key words, like "pain management" really highlights the shock Sam is in. Fantastic start .
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 03:16 PM · On: Chapter 3
good
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 02:53 PM · On: Chapter 3
Marvelous! To think that Sam wrestled all night to save his brother's life is amazing and inspiring. I love it! I also love the bible verses you used at the beginning and the end. Your description of the silence after Medatron vanishes is profound. Excellent story!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 02:46 PM · On: Chapter 2
"A peaceful, normal day. Everywhere but here." Beautiful line! I've felt that way before. So Sidley is some sort of creature. Intriguing! I wonder what power he possesses that will help Dean.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 02:36 PM · On: Chapter 1
Wow! Lung cancer---didn't see that coming. I guess too many smoky bars. Interesting beginning. You've got me very curious.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 01:24 PM · On: Chapter 3
Wow, the Metatron, the voice of the almighty himself - you chose a pretty big good, to counter your big bad and what a great job you did too. I'm so impressed with your style and lyrical descriptions, absolutely beautiful.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 01:16 PM · On: Chapter 2
...can't write...too engrosed in the action...must move on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 01:11 PM · On: Chapter 1
Intrigued?...very much so...this is a great start...must move on to next chapter straight away...
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