Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:27 PM · On: Chapter 9
This is hotting up nicely, think big brother's gonna have a thing or two to say to this Scott...moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 8
And more proof that Dean really is the best brother in the world...moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:17 PM · On: Chapter 7
Arghhh, nothing goes right for that boy does it...really enjoying this, it's angsty and sweet all at the same time...moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:11 PM · On: Chapter 6
Great chapter and you're really cranking up the big evil now...loving this, it's quite an addictive tale...moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:06 PM · On: Chapter 5
Awe...that is the sweetest chapters end ever...and damn, if Dean is the best big brother in the world isn't he? Really enjoying this...moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 04:00 PM · On: Chapter 4
This is adictive stuff...and damn, Dean really is the best big brother in the world isn't he? Moving on straight away...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 3
Y'know I'm really enjoying this story, can't believe I've missed this little gem all this time...moving on straight away...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 2
Love the protective attitude Dean has towards Sam, even when dealing with their dad, he really is the big brother every one of us would have wanted isn't he... Moving on...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 19/01/08 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 1
Can't believe I've missed this one..great start, and poor Sammy, damn those hormones...lol - moving on to next chapter..
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 15/01/08 05:46 PM · On: Chapter 16
I hope they manage to keep Ole Bo at bay, cause I don't think Sams' poor head can take much more pounding. I love John acting like a naughty schoolboy caught in the act when he eventually finds the locket in the car and again in the hospital when Sams' bumps are being questioned. Your description of Dean and Johns' different approaches to trying to rouse Sam from unconsciousness, really manages to sumarize their relationships to each other. Thanks for another great chapter, Jane
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 15/01/08 12:21 PM · On: Chapter 16
This is a great story!!!! each chapter justs adds to the delight in reading it.Dean is at his best when he protects Sam-I just love it. John is as usual, an ass- even Bobby wants him to get his act together. OUTSTANDING writing!!!! This is a visual delight with all the elements, danger, suspense, brotherly love, action. Ole Bo is in for it now- the 2 older hunters are ready for him Your stories are fantastic!!! BRAVO!!!!!! more please..
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I wonder somethimes if anyone is even reading it, and then I hear from you and I feel much better. More to come.
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 15/01/08 06:54 AM · On: Chapter 16
Ooh, i get so excited to see an update!! Sammy needs a cuddle! Burn that locket QUICK! Dix
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 12/01/08 07:35 PM · On: Chapter 15
Yeah, they've found them!! Now all they have to do is get them out, destroy the locket and somehow mend that beautiful car. I guess there'll be time for John to give Sam his roasting later on but it's so nice to see the caring, panicing dad, once in a while. Great update. Looking forward to the next one. Jane
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 15
You dont know how excited i get when the email arrives and I see the word shovel! I love how you have written Bobby and John... Dix
Author's Response: Thanks Dix, glad you like it. I am totally enjoying writing this one.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 14
Such a sad, pitiful scene! Our two boys stranded, hurt, in the wreck of the impala no less! Your description of both boys struggling to regain and remain conscious was heart breaking and kept me on the edge of my seat. And Dean, the never failing hunter and big brother - “His adrenaline kicked in, he felt a sudden rush of clarity as his mind sprang into action.” Superb writing! A standout of this whole fic for me has been the way you have focussed on the boy’s bond with a poignant gentleness. And here it is again - “Sam's large eyes stared up at his older brother. Dean's fingers lightly pulled through Sam's hair, waiting for his brother to answer… Dean reached his good hand down and pulled Sam's chin, leaning down so close that his face was a mere breathe away from his” That was stunning *misty eyes* But OMG, you haven’t finished with us yet! "…Tears rose up in Dean's eyes, and he blinked harshly against them. He pulled his little brother tighter up against him,...” and again your brilliant interjection of internal dialogue which builds the angst and drama “…The driver's door was curved in so badly, he would never get out of it. He wouldn't leave Sammy anyway…” Awesome scene, awesome writing. And while my pulse is still hammering, here is John and Bobby panicking. Loved your words here –“He pulled his weary hand through his hair, as the strain of not finding his boys took a sudden toll against him, his body trembling lightly” Excruciating chapter! It was all I could do not to call out “Hurry up, John!” but that would be silly wouldn’t it!?!?!?
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. Love it, love it...Love them boys more. This story is addictive to me, and I am only writing it. Keep reading and reviewing. Thanks
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 05:08 AM · On: Chapter 13
What a sad intro but a perfect place to start. Sam’s broken heart rocketed out the page and the crack in my heart from Katie’s cruelty widened. “He sat perfectly still, seemingly stunned into submission, as he gazed out the windshield” No wonder you had Dean wanting to kick the sh!t out of something. I say turn him loose!!! One of the things that makes this story stand out for me is the effective way you have infused the internal dialogue with the actual dialogue. You put us right in the boys heads and hearts, your words here a perfect examplem Dean pondering what to do: "He had helped Sam through homework, skinned knees, and nightmares. Taught him to ride a bike, write his name, and tie his shoes; but this, this was a new one” Outstanding work! And I loved how Dean summarised what Sam was struggling to say - “Yeah... I just...just ...I didn't think....she, she…I...I thought...." because he just gets it, knows Sam so well, and wanted to save him from a meltdown “ …"It okay Sam. I know you liked her” Beautifully done, yep, I loved Dean more than ever. Your scene of Ole Bo appearing and the dilemma that faced Dean demanding a decision in a nano-second was exciting and intense. Your words here bought this intensity to life “The next thirty seconds were fleeting, dropping the gun, one hand to the wheel, one hand to anchor his brother; then watching as a tree came toward them at the speed of light; the sound of sturdy metal impacting with a loud crunch” That was a thrilling thirty seconds! Well…not for our boys but definitely for your readers!! And your description of Dean at the point of impact was electrifying! Your succinct depiction of his wrist snapping made me cringe! *flapping hands* His last conscious thought – “Sammy?” you struck at the heart of Dean, Sam always his priority. Despite John’s harshness in this fic of yours, when you let him drop his game face you reveal the awesome, devoted father we know is always hovering under the hard shell, with a suddenness and force that takes my breath away. And I just love it. John’s franticness reaching a crescendo during his attempted phone calls revealed this exactly - "Dean, damn it boy, pick up." John's voice bellowed into the cell phone” Fear of that intensity is borne from a love of equal intensity and you articulated this via Bobby - ”John Winchester would never survive if something happened to his boys.” Brilliant work! Ah Bobby! Thank-you for writing Bobby just as we love him – no nonsense, making the call when needed, watching the Winchester’s backs when they need it. So loved your scene here - “Bobby reached his hand over and ripped the phone from John's grasp. "Let's go find them. They should have called by now, should have been here." Wonderful chapter!
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 03:15 AM · On: Chapter 14
Oh my God oh my God oh my God! You are so posting this on my timescale! Thank you! Loving the story, loving the interaction with the brothers, poor impala! Dix
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 09/01/08 10:11 PM · On: Chapter 14
I'm still really enjoying this tale, poor fellas! (and the impala too)
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 09/01/08 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 13
Oh no! Save Sammy...Save car..... No contest! So still with this story! Loving every minute of it! Still faintly hoping the girl was possessed!! Dix
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 09/01/08 12:31 PM · On: Chapter 13
OUTSTANDING...OUTSTANDING WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This has been a great story right from the start. Dean, the ever present protector, big brother, fixer of all things broken- this is one time he can't help Sam. You have so totally nailed the relationship between the boys-AWESOME AWESOME WRITING!!!! As usual , John is an ass- he needs to get his Marine butt kicked for what he does to Sam. Ole Bo is really after that locket-WHY??????? Every part of this chapter is totally great. Now, let's see if John learns his lesson-what will he find ??? You have got us all hooked- more please. BRAVO!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. I had a hard time tying this all together in this chapter. But, I think Katie was just a tease and Sammy got his heart broke. I know that John needs to think long and hard about his harsh words, and desire to make his boy suffer. I am so mean!! The locket is attached to Ol Bo and should have been burned with him. Until the locket is burned, he will haunt the one who took it. Hey, thats my theory anyway!! Keep reading and reviewing...It's not over yet!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 06/01/08 05:24 AM · On: Chapter 12
So Sam’s copping it again, Ole Bo seriously wants his locket back! Loved your scene of Dean intervening "Let him go you ugly son of a bitch." He pointed the gun directly at the iridescent figure, no hesitation, pulling the trigger with one thought pulsating through his mind. Save Sam.” Absolutely awesome description!! Dean going from soldier "Sam, open your eyes." Dean's voice was commanding; a direct order…” to gentle, concerned big brother "It's okay Sammy, I gotcha. "Ole Bo's' gone." was beautifully written. And this line - fingers coming up to brush against Sam's cheek, inquisitive eyes peering into his face. "You okay kiddo?" just melted my heart. Brilliant! And what a turn coat Katie turned out to be! Jumped sides with gifts. What a shallow b!tch (I’m with Dean on that name calling!) Your whole final paragraph was exceptional writing. You portrayed Sam’s shock and Dean’s reaction with precision and the whole scene pulled at our heart strings. Well done! Dying to see John’s meeting up with his boys and why this locket is so important to Ole Bo…
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 06/01/08 04:59 AM · On: Chapter 11
Oh no! Scott has the locket, no wait, Katie has the locket, so Ole Bo’s still going to be gunning for Sam!!! Nasty, but clever twist! And, gotta tell ya, Scott’s green eyes are so not attractive! Thinkin’ they should be black… Your scene of Dean swerving the impala to a screeching stop in front of the hummer was awesome. As soon as I read that I thought, yep, she’s unleashing hunter!dean and protective!dean and that kid’s gunna pay! Your words from Sam. I just loved this -“…he firmly stepped toward his brother as the pissed off guys emerged from their car” – despite Sam’s illness and hesitation to cause trouble at school, that strong united-we-stand-Winchester-mantra. Just delicious writing! "GIVE me the DAMN JACKET” – no mucking around, straight to the point, classic angry Dean. Great job! This was my fav scene. These words from Sam were priceless –“He sounds just like Dad when he's pissed” fan-freakin-tastic!! "It would be smarter to just give it to him."- damn straight!! I can see “in full Winchester fashion” straight ahead, I felt it with Sam, you left no doubt…“Sam felt his older brother tense up behind him, heard the anger rising up in his breathing. Shit.” And the bully hit Sam! That was harsh!! It’s just not Sam’s week at all! How much bashing up can he endure?? O-oh, a little more it seems, coz here's Ole Bo!!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 06/01/08 04:30 AM · On: Chapter 10
I gotta say it – that Scott is a first class jerk! Your description of his bullying made my heart ache for our gentle Sam. Who says we can’t’ salt and burn humans?!?! "Dude is such a dork, he can't even stand up”. I hope you are intending to unleash Dean “in full Winchester fashion” soon!!!! What a great phrase!! Also loved Sam’s "Dude, so not a good idea; they would think you were a terrorist if you went in there." Hee, hee!! How cute is Katie, getting all huffy at the injustice of how the jocks treated Sam. I liked how you had her sticking up for Sam when he was too out of it to think straight. As usual, how you write Dean watching out for Sam got to me. Dean catching him as he collapsed on the stairs was so nicely written. "I gotcha, com're." *soft sigh* And the subtle little "Don't do that." In the middle of their discussion as Sam tried to touch his injury showed that Dean misses nothing. Lovely nuance in there! And John going off on the phone - lucky we know and love him!! Once again you did a great job of portraying that conflicting mix of hunter and father. Bi-polar gag was a bit funny, hee hee! I also like the way you have Dean on that cusp of his relationship with his Dad, where he goes from obedience “Yes Sir’ to standing up to him when he perceives an injustice, especially to Sam. You do this so well *applause* And to top it all off? Cold coffee. I agree - Sh!t!! Dean’s frustration just oozing out of your words.
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 04/01/08 05:42 PM · On: Chapter 12
What a bitch!! I love that last line, 'ratty black hair blowing wildly in the wind'. I thought Katie was quite sweet up until taking the locket from Scott, then to say those things to Sam, she deserves that ratty black hair......lol. Poor Sam how is he going to come back after that one. Full marks to Dean for his totally diplomatic handling of the situation, well, at least he didn't shoot her with rock salt!! Great chapter. Jane
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 04/01/08 10:47 AM · On: Chapter 9
Wow, have you been busy since I went off on holiday - 4 chapters for me to catch up on. What fun!!! Loved how you continue to showcase Dean's tender side with Sam. Dean reflecting on how he used to comfort and relate to Sam when he was little was just beautiful and Sammy leaning into his hand in his sleep with Dean's words "Guess he still remembers" melted my heart. Awesome! You showed classic Sam courage by haivng him struggle to get the job rectified by himself, despite how sick and injured he is. Your line "...as Sam put his Winchester mask back in place" left no doubt that despite his sensitive nature, he has a tough side - and we know he can be menacing and deadly when he needs to be. Oh boy, is Scott in a world of trouble, if only he knew!! If it's not from Ole Bo, then he'll need to take note when the Winchester clan turn hunter all over him. And I am loving your Katie - her loyalty and infatuation with our Sammy is charming. Great chapter, it's hotting up again!
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