Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 13/12/07 10:21 AM · On: Chapter 6
OK...... This is so cute-Sammy's crush on Katie. I just love how you showed Sammy's shyness-too cool. Dean's total understanding of his little brother's awkardness- his ability to figure out just what Sam is doing-totally touching and loving. So , now to Ole Bo- I had a feeling he would show up when Sam was alone- Sammy 's hurt and Dean is getting worried. You have totally captured the dynamics of the Winchester brothers bond-AWESOME WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!! Words , timing, -you are the master writer blending it all together to create the great stories that are your signature. EXCELLENT....EXCELLENT WORK!!!!! Please post soon- I can't wait to see what Dean and John think now about Sam's so called fever dream. BRAVO!!!!!!
Reviewer: lindi (Signed) · Date: 13/12/07 06:01 AM · On: Chapter 6
I`m with you all the way. Love the story and how you describe Sam and Dean. And I always love a hurt Sam!!!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 13/12/07 03:39 AM · On: Chapter 6
Yep, I'm with you all the way! This is an awesome story. Love the story plot, love the way you portray the boys, love the way you write! Sam is sooo sweet in your fic. We see the adult Sam as gentle and considerate (but a mean hunter when he needs to be!) so I think you have nailed him as a teenager with a big dose of first-love, all shy and self conscious. Too cute! I LOVE how you write a reflection alone side your narrative to put us right in the boys headspace - "...butterflies flitting around in his stomach, his breath hitching up in his chest. holy crap" a beautiful example of this. Great work! You know how I feel about how you depict Dean, and you are at your best in this ch as well. Dean so focussed on Sammy's happiness "...eyebrows arching up in a 'this is awesome' look that made Dean's smile brighter" to mega protective!dean in warrior mode "sudden worry creeping up his spine." I think "Ole Bo" might be in a world of trouble for hurting Dean Winchester's kid brother!! Your standout line which made me catch my breath - "Dean stood stock still as he cocked his head to the side to listen; then he heard it, a slow whisper, a mumbled word, so slight he might have missed it if he had not been hearing it his whole life." Yep, we so get that! Absolutely awesome! Your description of Sam so out of it was vivid and showed us how bad the situation is - Sam is in serious trouble! I think Ole Bo hasn't finished with him yet... Hurry up Dean!!! Keep giving this exceptional story everything you've got! I'm loving it!
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 13/12/07 12:54 AM · On: Chapter 6
We're reading, or at least I am, and I'm really enjoying it to. I could see Sam standing up on that porch. Another day, sigh. Still say don't pocket things from irrascible ghosts!
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 10/12/07 06:00 PM · On: Chapter 5
Well, it looks like Sam's starting to feel a bit better now he's got a visitor!! I guess he's not the only one with a crush, Katie seems very sweet. I love Dean being subtle!!....lol. Looking forward to the next one. J
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 10/12/07 06:48 AM · On: Chapter 5
How sweet and loved that Dean was helping Sam out.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 10/12/07 05:28 AM · On: Chapter 5
How cute was that?!?! Yeah, I'm all warm and fuzzy alright! This little scene sure puts Sam's forlorn behaviour into focus as to why he muffed the hunt in the first place. He is so outta his depth! Gotta love his shyness and inexperience, so adorable! How good is Dean, as committed to helping out his little brother in his awkwardness with a girl to serious looking after concerning sickness and injuries. You showed his devotion to Sam with his mix of humour, experience and tact. Top job, it worked very well. I loved Sam's reflections along side your dialogue and actions. You gave us a peek into Sam's nerves and shyness which makes Dean's help touching. I'm really into this little fic of yours!
Author's Response: You rock. Thanks for the good review. I have 2 stories going at once; amazing what the mind can come up with. supernaturaldh
Reviewer: Rocksalt x 5283 (Signed) · Date: 06/12/07 11:03 PM · On: Chapter 2
I'm liking this story! =]] I should be posting one of my own soon. Hopefully that one starts off just as good as this one! =DDD XxCrash.And.BurnXx
Author's Response: Thanks for reading. I am loving this story line myself. Sam is so sweet...ah, puppy love.
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 05/12/07 11:44 AM · On: Chapter 4
I waited until now to review. First of all , the title had me laughing out loud........ Sammy in love...shy, stumbling at talking to a girl...too funny Dean feeling bad for Sam and his mis steps in the love department..very poignant. The end result with Bo and Sammy's little keeksake from the salt and burn- top notch all the way. As ALWAYS , you never disappoint your readers -timimg , tone, vivid words-all complete the story as told by a master storyteller!!!!!!!!!!! AWESOME...AWESOME JOB!!!!!!!! More please.... BRAVO!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks once again. Your reviews are always awesome!! Keep um coming...you keep me going. supernaturaldh
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 04/12/07 05:06 AM · On: Chapter 4
You sure opened this chapter on a hunter-alert. Both men at instant attention, working as a partnership – I could see Dean wanted to rush in as alarm set in but acted as part of the assault team, looking to John to lead. Great atmosphere you created here. You had Sam packing it, his fear was tangible as your description of a distressed Sam left us in no doubt. Loved the way you had Dean turn straight to comforter, checking his brother out while John went straight into search mode. Dean instantly justifying Sammy’s behaviour in terms of his fever was protective big brother on automatic pilot, beautifully written. Your description of John’s response as he went from hunter to father in a breath was awesome, in contrast to his MO while on the hunt. You further emphasised this with your words “… as he patted his baby on the shoulder…” *sigh* I just loved this WHOLE paragraph (couldn’t leave any out – too good!) a snapshot of the dynamics of this family– “Dean continued his movements with the damp rag. "I'll just sit in here awhile and make sure he doesn't have anymore nightmares." Dean's eyes never met his Dad's, never veered from his brother's face. John nodded and shuffled quietly out of the room, gun clinched tightly in his fingers. He's fine, he's just fine. He pulled his weary hand through his hair as he took one last look at his boys. Dean, Dean, Dean, always taking care of his baby brother. A smile curled on his lips.” – Brilliant writing. So John and Dean think it’s a fever induced nightmare so their guard will be down. Sam knows he saw something, knows it was Bo but is unable to convince his boys. OK, I’m hanging on tight so you can let go with the scary action!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the awesome review. I am glad you like me detail. I don't know what I like more, Sam in puppy love, Dean in big brother mode, or John as Dad and not just the big bad hunter!! Hope to hear from you again. superanaturaldh
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 03/12/07 10:06 PM · On: Chapter 4
Enjoying this, title alone is a scream, but I'm thinking Sam really shouldn't pocket things.....
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 06:30 PM · On: Chapter 3
What on earth would they do without Dean to look after them all? Besotted Sam is a joy to behold, it's a lovely illustration of teenage boy reduced to quivering wreck. Dean's gentle humour and encouraging words of wisdom were just what Sam needed. I was wondering when 'Ole Bo' was going to pay a visit, I feel it would be a little optimistic to assume he's come to offer Sam some advice on his love-life!!...lol Love the story, looking forward to the next chapter. J
Reviewer: buttercup (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 03:27 PM · On: Chapter 3
ahh cliffie!!! Loving this tho...can't wait for more. really enjoying your other stuff too sophie
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 28/11/07 01:32 AM · On: Chapter 3
Little white white lie from Dean, big whopper from Sam - not telling about his souvenir is heading for major trouble. My heart just melted for tongue tied, gangly in-love Sam! Dean watching as those kids laughed at him was a tough break. You wrote Dean with compassion when he was encouraging and reassuring our dejected Sam. *sigh* awesome big brother again. And here's Bo!! I'm buckling up coz I think your ride is just about to speed up!
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 27/11/07 09:55 PM · On: Chapter 3
omg the salt & burn didn't work ??!!!??? What the hell did Sam swipe from the grave that overrode a S&B ???
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 25/11/07 06:34 PM · On: Chapter 2
Poor Sam, his arm's obviously much worse than he let on at the cemetary and he's got a huge pile of homework....I'm wondering, is that scribbled scratching just 'cause he's got a bad arm, or is there something more sinister at work here?? This chapter really bulds up the tension between John and Sam and highlights the pressures that this puts on Dean. Nice work, looking forward to the next one. J.
Reviewer: buttercup (Signed) · Date: 25/11/07 08:10 AM · On: Chapter 2
Completely loving this fic!! Why do I think what Sam took from te grave is important hmm lol. Great work and please update soon sophie
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 25/11/07 03:06 AM · On: Chapter 2
Poor Sam! I have a feeling a sore arm and scratched, unfinished homework is gonna be the last of his worries, between the contraband and John's wrath when he finds out. I loved the way you are writing Dean in this fic. His watching out for Sam whether it be on a hunt or writing a please excuse note for school. And that hug in the car when he was scared for Sam - beautifully written. Your last paragraph about Dean in the middle of his family was poignant because we know that despite his efforts it will lead to his family becoming estranged. While Dean feels John is riding Sam without cause, Ole Bo's prize in Sam's pocket might justify John's constant harping about keeping your head in the game!! Great work *applause*
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 25/11/07 12:44 AM · On: Chapter 2
Great update! Poor Sam! But I love that Dean is feeling for his brother! ~Kayla
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 23/11/07 06:56 PM · On: Chapter 1
good start.....will be interesting to see what Sam took from the coffin....
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 22/11/07 06:39 AM · On: Chapter 1
Ooh just what did 'Ole Bo' have clutched in his hands that Sam's now got a hold of?? Off to a great start here, loved the humour, dialogue and lovesick Sammy. It's always good to see the softer side of John and Dean as multi-faceted as ever. Looking forward to the next one. J
Reviewer: theldybg4u (Signed) · Date: 22/11/07 12:22 AM · On: Chapter 1
ah i love it it's so funny and it explains why john yells at his sons
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 21/11/07 08:23 PM · On: Chapter 1
nice start! Really great premise. :0) I'm interested in seeing where this goes! ~Kayal
Reviewer: buttercup (Signed) · Date: 21/11/07 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 1
Can't wait for more!!! It was a truly excellent start! sophie
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 21/11/07 03:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
How cute is Sammy?!? I loved the way you wrote all three Winchester boys. Your title and John's comment is terrific - I had a smile cos it was so John, I had his voice in my head big time. John and Dean's reflections just made this story *applause* Your portrayal of Dean was just the best. You gave us teasing Dean, hunter Dean attentive Dean and protective big brother all at once. Excellent work, you made my day! Thanks for John's reflections. He comes across as cold and gruff, no wonder Dean feels he's letting Sammy down and has a need to protect him. However, John's reflections show us the understanding and smitten father behind the hunter. I just wish he'd reveal more of that to his sons... For me, your last paragraph was the pinnicle, the brothers relationship showcased, pure Dean. Beautifully written. So what has Sam got in his pocket that Ole Bo was so intent on getting back in this last ghostly moments??? The story gets started... So pleased you decided to 'jot this one down', it's off to a great start. You've got me!
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