Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 01/10/09 02:34 PM · On: Only The Young

again!!!! great job!!!!

Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 01/10/09 02:30 PM · On: Only The Young

aawww again...poor sarah!!! Good job!

jess

Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 01/10/09 02:24 PM · On: Only The Young

aw poor sarah!! I liked this so far, and I'm sorry that you're going through a hard time, and I saw that 219 people read your story and you have 20 chaps and not ONE reveiw and I think thats sad, sooo...Im going to read this...haha

Jess

Author's Response:  Thanks for the reviews, they are definitely cheering me up and making my day. Keep Sending them and keep reading. There's plenty of stories I wrote on this site!

Reviewer: Andromeda171 (Signed) · Date: 25/06/08 02:06 PM · On: I'm With You

This is a cool story

Good job 

Reviewer: kerawd (Signed) · Date: 15/01/08 06:04 PM · On: It's Not Over

Really good until the last chapter. The ending was depressing!

Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 02:32 PM · On: It's Not Over

As I promised to review, I wanted to make sure I'd gotten up to speed on where you were with the story. I shared with you that I don't watch Smallville, so many of the references you had of that show were lost on me.

I think that you have the writing bug, and that you should continue to work with your craft. Writing has been one of the things that has grounded me over the last year.

The more you write, the better you're bound to be -- but the other thing I would suggest is to also read. Read a lot. Fanfic, novels, whatever grabs you. See how others pace their stories, accent their characters, alternate their scenes.

I could see that you were working to overlap situations between Sam and Lana and Dean and Lupine, but the perspective and POV shifted so quickly and so often, it was hard to keep up.

One of my personal quirks is seeing the characters from Supernatural fall too quickly for a love interest. Attraction, sure. Desire, absolutely. A fling, a connection, all of that I can buy... but falling in love in two days? Love at first sight? I don't really see the hunters allowing themselves to be that vulnerable -- BUT, that's just me. Doesn't mean others would agree.

I think that your interest in these two shows can certainly fuel your desire to tell stories, and if you keep at it, you will continue to improve and draw readers. Writing is a passion, and it's my belief that it should never be stifled.

Have fun!

GS